0910G[NorthAmericanFlying]issue143by麦子

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Issue143
Is it true that artists should pay little attention to the critics for the reason that the critics tend to limit and reduce artists’ creativity? The speaker claims so. As for me, although I concede that some times the artist will be bordered by lots of criticisms from the so-called critics, artists should never overlook the critics on him or her.

As a matter of subjectively creation, it is easy to understand why art is always under the heated debate of itself and its author like all the other subjectively things, which can due to the nature of art—human mind’s subjectively creation. Art is different from the other subject such as science which can be hardly questioned when proved by specific formulas or statics.Under such circumstance, artist maybe inevitably be influenced by such critics, but it is still unfounded that speakers should pay little attention on that undermining or constraining their creativity.

First of all, weather an art’s creativity will be limited by critics is depend on people itself, means that only those who is emotional or think too munch of fames will be easily influenced. In fact, for many people, criticism play more important role than praises helping with their temper improvement. Because criticism can help encouraging some art’s sprite for fighting, which may promote a great work birth. Just like the saying goes that “attitude determines all”. When facing to the same problem, different people acts different, so it’s impossible to identify the advantages or the disadvantages at the same time.

Secondly, another important reason why artists should pay enough attention on criticisms is that, instead of limit the artist's creativity , the critics can promote a successful artwork's birth. As we know, many art critics are also  professional artists at the same time. So comments from  them is also  wisdom advices which due to the different standpoint the critics hold, making both the creator and the public understand the content of works more exactly and more comprehensively. In addition, an artwork would hardly be accomplished in short time, which needs a hard process of conceive and accumulation. So during this time, the former critics's commendation of oher 's work can always light on the mind of the artists.Taking the architectural art for example, we can easily find this point. The design of the Shanghai Global Financial Hub, one of the most successful highest building in the world, used to be changed several times before the construction according to the reasonable criticism.And in order to make the design prefect, some architecteven  asks the expert for criticism on initiative.

Thirdly, it seems illogically to worry about the critics’ influence for an eligible artist in most cases. As we known, a good artists must have strong mind, which, instead of changing easily, leads to the deeply consideration when confront with the doubt from other people, especially those critics. The greatest painter Van Gogh whose success is partly due to his strong mind and firmly belief is a convincingly illustration for this point. As we know, even Van Gogh’s painting is worth millions of dollars today, he has never had a rich life and step into the mainstream public eyes in his time, for no one can really admire his picture and him. Nearly all the critics laugh at him. And at the same time doubts from all the others especially his friends and family, would nearly destroy all normal people’s confidence, came of Van Gogh. Nevertheless, under such circumstance , Van Gogh still insist on his mind, keeping his style and drawing his painting without giving up anything and that’s why we still have the honor of admiring that.

All in all, criticism is what an artist would never avert. But as an artist, it is necessary to know haw to put the wisdom and the unresonable criticisms aside.  What's more, weather the criticism would influence the arts’ creativity is incertitude, which depend on the different people’s personal and temper. Nevertheless, it is still necessary to pay much attention on that.

   

追忆2009UID: 2629509

昨天三点才写完，时间比较紧，比较欠考虑，会继续修改~
改的同学辛苦啦~

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Is it true that artists should pay little attention to the critics for the reason that the critics tend to limit and reduce artists’ creativity? The speaker claims so. As for me, although I concede that some times(sometimes) the artist will be bordered by lots of criticisms from the so-called(意思有点纠结，so-call暗含贬义，这句话又是正面的，纠结……) critics, artists should never overlook the critics on him or her.(看不懂)

As a matter of subjectively creation, it is easy to understand why art is always under the heated debate of itself and its author like all the other subjectively things, which can due to the nature of art—human mind’s subjectively creation. Art is different from the other subject such as science which can be hardly questioned when proved by specific formulas or statics(experiments are much more convincing).Under such circumstance, artist maybe(may) inevitably be influenced by such critics, but it is still unfounded that speakers should pay little attention on that undermining or constraining their creativity.

First of all, weather(whether) an art’s creativity will be limited by critics is depend on people itself(himself), means(这个谓语冗余) that only those who is emotional or think too munch of fames will be easily influenced. In fact, for many people, criticism play more important role than praises helping with their temper improvement(很诡异的表达，shape their character更好吧). Because criticism can help encouraging some art’s sprite(spirite) for fighting, which may promote a great work birth(give birth to something). Just like the saying goes that “attitude determines all”(性格决定一切:Personality is destiny). When facing to the same problem, different people acts different, so it’s impossible to identify the advantages or the disadvantages at the same time.

(批评家有助于艺术家的性格完善，跟题目不太搭界)

Secondly, another important reason why artists should pay enough attention on criticisms is that, instead of limit(ing) the artist's creativity , the critics can promote a successful artwork's birth. As we know, many art critics are also  professional artists at the same time. So comments from  them is(are) also  wisdom advices which due to(behafl) the different standpoint the critics hold, making both the creator and the public understand the content of works more exactly and more comprehensively. In addition, an artwork would hardly be accomplished in short time, which needs a hard process of conceive(conception) and accumulation. So during this time, the former critics's commendation of oher 's work can always light on(enlighten) the mind of the artists.Taking the architectural art for example, we can easily find this point. The design of the Shanghai Global Financial Hub, one of the most successful highest building in the world, used to be changed several times before the construction according to the reasonable criticism.And in order to make the design prefect, some architecteven  asks the expert for criticism on initiative.

(前面的抽象论证比较空，逻辑线索不明显，跟后面的例子结合也不是很紧密)


Thirdly, it seems illogically to worry about the critics’ influence for an eligible artist in most cases. As we known, a good artists must have strong mind, which, instead of changing easily, leads(谓语冗余) to the deeply consideration when confront(confronted) with the doubt from other people, especially those critics. The greatest painter Van Gogh whose success is partly due to his strong mind and firmly belief is a convincingly illustration for this point. As we know, even Van Gogh’s painting is worth millions of dollars today, he has never had a rich life and step into the mainstream public eyes in his time, for no one can really admire his picture(s) and him. Nearly all the critics laugh at him. And at the same time doubts from all the others especially his friends and family, would nearly destroy all normal people’s confidence, came of Van Gogh. Nevertheless, under such circumstance , Van Gogh still insist on his mind, keeping his style and drawing his painting without giving up anything and that’s why we still have the honor of admiring that.

(这段的论证明显比上面两段好，但是仍然没有展开到足够的地步，也有一定的逻辑缺陷，例如，Van Gogh实际上就是ignore the criticism啊)

All in all, criticism is what an artist would never avert. But as an artist, it is necessary to know haw to put the wisdom and the unresonable criticisms aside.  What's more, weather the criticism would influence the arts’ creativity is incertitude, which depend on the different people’s personal and temper. Nevertheless, it is still necessary to pay much attention on that.


merits:中间几段能够切中主题
drawbacks:展开的思路和方向不太好，句子结构问题比较明显，建议从语法和思想两个角度入手，好词好句的模仿可以暂缓

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3# haunteagle
谢谢ha啦，意见很中肯，很有道理~
其实我也知道确实写的比较烂，实在太忙了，没什么时间来想，来写，所以本来基础就不是很好，结果就更烂了
另外刚刚交131，自改143恐怕是交不上了，我尽快，争取本周能交上