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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Perseverance makes people stronger. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The one manner is unchangeable in whole progressive of human being, of course, it is the perseverance. No one could deny that the perseverance is human’s excellent characteristic, because that it gives people a lot of benefits in life and work, finally, lead to people become stronger.

To the very basic first, the perseverance plays an essential role in process of the goal. Apparently, there are many works need him/she to complete in the contemporary society, which they would not like to do, such as studying profound course, training hard in sports everyday, spend much time for handling one thing and so on. Therefore, how to overcome these problems that you would not like to do and achieve the success? Admittedly, the answer is perseverance. Only he/she efforts to complete these dislike things, the success will come to him/her finally.

On the other hand, the perseverance would teach human a truth that whenever you was stumble, you will get back on your feet quickly. That is proved through many famous people. For instance, the Bill Gates, the leader of Microsoft Company, spend much time and energy on his the favor work, the computer programs. For his destination, set up a program for helping people to best use computer, he overcomes numerous difficulties which come from family, government, friends, and even including his teacher and university. It no exaggeration to say that when he decides to give up his campus life for researching computer programs, that is so hardly decision that instead of other common people must not to continue own work. However, Bill depends on his manner of perseverance overcoming the many troubles and achieving the success. Therefore, the perseverance also is a teacher, guide to him/her face to difficulties bravely.

In conclusion, without perseverance, he/she will not complete anything in life. Without perseverance, he/she will far away from his/her destination. Thus I believe that the perseverance is the best characteristic which let people become stronger.

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The one manner is unchangeable in whole progressive of human being, of course, it is the perseverance. No one could deny that the perseverance is human’s excellent characteristic, because that(that 去掉) it gives people a lot of benefits in life and work, finally, lead to people become stronger(leads people to be stronger).

To the very basic first, the perseverance plays an essential role in process of the goal. Apparently, there are many works need him/she(her) to complete in the contemporary society, which they would not like to do, such as studying profound course, training hard in sports everyday, spend much time for handling one thing and so on. Therefore, how to overcome these problems that you would not like to do and achieve the success? Admittedly, the answer is perseverance. Only he/she efforts to complete these dislike things, the success will come to him/her finally.. X! a- ~5 X. k0 Q+ I2 \
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On the other hand, the perseverance would teach human a truth that whenever you was stumble(stumbled), you will get back on your feet quickly. That is proved through many famous people. For instance, the Bill Gates, the leader of Microsoft Company, spend much time and energy on his the favor work, the computer programs. For his destination, set up a program for helping people to best use computer, he overcomes numerous difficulties which come from family, government, friends, and even including his teacher and university. It no exaggeration to say that when he decides to give up his campus life for researching computer programs, that is so hardly decision that instead of other common people must not to continue own work. However, Bill depends on his manner of perseverance overcoming the many troubles and achieving the success. Therefore, the perseverance also is a teacher, guide to him/her face to difficulties bravely.
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In conclusion, without perseverance, he/she will not complete anything in life. Without perseverance, he/she will far away from his/her destination. Thus I believe that the perseverance is the best characteristic which let people become stronger。

WOW~~不得不说，写的太好了，呵呵，通篇行文很流畅，用词也很丰富，我认为挺地道的，结构也很好，挑不出什么毛病，赞狂赞，向lz学习了……

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哪有哪有，我还是菜鸟，鞠躬～ 谢谢

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6,7月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组lingyao1的第十六次作业

本帖最后由 lingyao1 于 2009-6-13 23:02 编辑 % `4 n/ ^, v/ s4 g- M+ ^   U/ V, @* S$ p' ^4 O Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Perseverance makes people stronger. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.$ ~/ a4 J0 W* b$ n) Z2 _5 S3 M The one manner is unchangeable in the whole progressive of human being, of course, it is the perseverance. (这句话要表示强调？？这里是两个并列句)No one could deny that the perseverance,one of the  human’s most excellent characteristics,gives people a lot of benefits in life and work, finally, leadpeople  to become stronger.   q* ^3 r. t To the very basic first, the perseverance plays an essential role in the process of the goal. Apparently, there are many works needing him/she to complete in the contemporary society, which they would not like to do, such as studying profound(个人认为用complex 或者complicated，profound是褒义词) course, （excessive）training hard in sports everyday, spending much time for handling one thing and so on（不能连用）. Therefore, how to overcome these problems undesirable and achieve the success? Admittedly, the answer is perseverance. Only he/she efforts (noun??)to complete these dislike ？？things, the success will come to him/her finally.（only by completing the undesirable tasks will people achieve succuss ） the other hand, the perseverance would teach human a truth that whenever you was stumble, you will get back on your feet quickly. That is proved through many famous people. For instance, the Bill Gates, the leader of Microsoft Company, spend much time and energy on his the favor work, the computer programs. For his destination, set up a program for helping people to best use computer, he overcomes numerous difficulties which come from family, government, friends, and even including his teacher and university. It no exaggeration to say that when he decides to give up his campus life for researching computer programs, that is so hardly decision that instead of other common people must not to continue own work. However, Bill depends on his manner of perseverance overcoming the many troubles and achieving the success. Therefore, the perseverance also is a teacher, guide to him/her face to difficulties bravely. , N; P$ a% q% Z% S' ?' ]3 l8 E! {+ i6 x+ a$ A" j2 e, F' @2 b In conclusion, without perseverance, he/she will not complete anything in life. Without perseverance, he/she will far away from his/her destination. (not only but also)Thus I believe that the perseverance is the best characteristic which let people become stronger. 整片文章没有点过题，说是赞同还是不赞同，起码应该提到。中间说理的部分挺好，没有改小的语法错误。 建议：掌握定冠词的用法 和常用词的词性什么的，感觉楼主有些混。 一般很少有人给我改结构，你是第一个，谢过了~~~ 黄色的去掉，红色加，有些我直接改了，水平有限，鞠躬了~~~ 另外，有还有没几天就考了，还没有模板呢，正在弄，想再练练手，有什么建议吗？？很着急~~~

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outline:
1.perseverance lead people to persist on the difficulties which is inevitable on the way of being stronger.perseverance means focus and hard work which make access to confidence and determination.
3.persist on the wrong thing is harm for individual development,both mental and physical.

When I was a child, my mother taught me to be a perseverant peoson.She who holds the same opinion with most people in our contry who advocates that perseverance makes people stronger.They argue that perseverance is the essence of being stronger. But people who disagree with the statements,on the other hand, indicate that some people with perseverance do not achieve success which leads confidence and determination. As far as I am concerned, perseverance is able to help people become strong in most cases,although it have no contribution on those people who persist on the wrong direction.

There is no doubt that perseverance plays a vital part in individual success,which often leads people to feel strong. Only with perseveranse can people handle all the inevitable difficulties in the way of pursuing success.Generally speaking,perseverance has a beneficial effect on broadening the possibility of seizing potential opportunities around them because opportunities prefer perseverance people. In addition,as there is no royal way to the summit of success,pursuing success often have to overcome a large number of difficulties. dealing with such problems, people should own perseverance which often means hard work and focus.Obviously,people can found out that almost all the strong people in the world own the excellent characteristic,perseverance. Take Stephen Hawing,the extraordinary British physicist,for example.He had a motor neurone disease called ALS for practically all his adult life.Yet it did not prevent him persisting working on the basic low the universe goes. Eventually, he was outstanding in the pysical field as well as led an attractive family. Franking speaking, it is the perseverance that makes him a giant in a specific field.

Although it is more likely for determined people to achieve success and become stronger, concluding that perseverance makes people strong may be aggressive. Generally speaking, sticking on the wrong direction do not make access to success results from that it let people to reproduce the wrong things. Fortunately,this situation can be dramatically improved through making a applied and appropriate plan.

Though perseverance may has disadvantages in some cases, the advantage of it outweigh harm we gain from it as it can help to success associated with being stronger. Only by persisting on peope's dream can they finally gain the achievement. What is more, more perseverant one be, more considerable output he or she attains.


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