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TOPIC: ARGUMENT242 - The following appearedas an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.
"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among collegeand university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar toGroveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academicendeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others havecheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in whichstudents were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases ofcheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful:in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases ofcheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in arecent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of studentssaid that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place thanwithout."

为解决最近上报的大学生作弊现象显著增加的问题，大学和学院应该采取和Groveton学院类似的诚信制度，该制度要求学生同意在学业中不作弊，并且当他们怀疑别人作弊的时候通知老师。Groveton的诚信制度代替了原有的学生被老师严密监视的老体制，在老体制中平均每年有30起作弊被上报。该制度被证明成功的多：在它实施的第一年，学生上报了21起作弊；五年后，这一数值下降到了14起。而且，在最近一次由Groveton诚信委员会组织的调查中，大部分学生说有了诚信制度他们更加不太可能作弊。

破题分析:
1.直接提出学校应该采纳G的honor code.并且给出了honor code的定义.
2.陈述honor code的效果:取代了传统监督做弊的手段,并且有效地捕捉到了做弊的案例.
3.honor code还有far more successful:做弊数量在五年内明显减少,并且调查显示,学生在这个体制下做弊的意愿降低了.


提纲:


开头
陈述G的honor code的定义,提出题目建议在做弊日益猖獗的今天,学校们采取G的honorcode手段来对抗做弊行为.复述应该采取G的honor code的理由:1.hc有效地捕捉到做弊的同学并且省去了老师监督的辛苦.2.G的honor code使做弊人数明显减少.3.G的honorcode是学生的做弊意愿降低.但是我认为以上理由是存在疑问的.

分论点
1.没有确凿的理由证明G的honor code可以有效地捕捉学生的做弊行为.
(G采取的这种学生报告学生做弊的手段对于联合起来互相保护的学生群体是无效的./学生的做弊手段很可能较高超导致其他学生没有发现./学生之间可能会顾及相互间的关系而不愿或不敢于揭发报告别人的做弊行为.)
2.G的honor code和做弊人数的减少以及学生做弊意愿的降低没有必然的联系.
(根据上段所提出的G可能存在的无效性,被报告做弊人数的减少并不意味着做弊人数的真正减少.即使做弊人数真正减少,也不一定是因为G的出现,可能是因为考试难度的降低.调查显示的学生做弊意愿降低也不具有说服力.首先调查不一定是面向所有学生,而抽样调查就不具有代表性.比如调查到的学生正好是认真踏实学习的同学,或者是不需要很好的GPA以获得fartherstudy oppoutunity的同学,他们都没有做弊的动机.也有可能受调查的同学正是做弊的同学,他肯定会说自己没有做弊或者做弊意愿降低.即使调查是面向每一位同学的,对于它的真实有效性也是值得怀疑的,因为做弊与不做弊并不像购物时选A选B这样具有平行性,学生往往会更倾向于选择看来正义的选项而不是真实的选项.)
3.即使G的honor code在G取得了成功,它并不一定能够很好地应用到其他学校.
(因为每个学校的学生素质和处事方式是不同的.假设G的学生愿意报告其他同学的做弊行为,并不代表着其他学校的学生也会这样做.并且每个学校的考试题目难度和考试对于学生本身的重要性不相同,导致学生愿意为做弊冒险的程度亦不相同.)

结尾
G的honor code的确是一个有创意的对抗做弊的方法.但是它依然存在一些不完善的地方,有待进一步观察研究.另外其实对抗做弊还应该从学生的思想教育入手对其进行质的改造.

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Groveton’s honor code is a method to combat the cheating among students which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. As there’s a dramatic rise in cheating among university and college students, t is suggested that other institutions should adopt the Groveton’s honor code for the honor code frees the teacher from monitoring the students,catched the cheating students and cause the amount of cheating and the students’ willingness to cheating decrease. But in my point of view, the suggestion is somewhat questionable.

There is no exact proof to show that the honor code can catch the cheating students sufficiently. The students may combine to a group against the honor code in which they can cheat together with the protection from each other, thus the honor code is of no sufficiency. It is also possible that the student’s cheating methods are too wise to be discovered. What’s more, to report that someone is cheating is not a good  way to maintain harmony among students, it may cause students less likely to tell that someone is cheating.

Still, the Groveton’s honor code has no necessary links with the declination of the amount of cheating students and the willingness of cheating. According to the point above, there’s insufficiency existing  in the honor code, so that the reported declination does not mean the real declination of cheating among students. Even if the amount do decline. There’s other possibilities, such as the exam is not as difficult as before, to cause it. And the survey that shows that the students are less likely to cheat is also without strong proof. Fisrt, there is no sign to tell that the survey is among all the students in Groveton, and surveys with limited simples are with less persuation. The students under the survey may be just the one who studies so hard and never cheated in life. Or it may be a student who don’t need a good GPA for further study opportunities an thus don’s care much about exam scores. Both of them have no tendency to cheat. It is also possible that the students under the survey are just the one who do the cheating and he will surly tell that he didn’t cheat or he is less tend to cheat than before. Even though the survey included all the students in Groveton, the result is suspicious as well. For to choose to answer cheat or not cheat is not the same as to answer to buy A or buy B during a shopping. Students usually tend to choose the latter as it shows the positivities of themselves.

Finally, assume that the Groveton’s honor is indeed successful against the cheating. It is not a strong proof to show that it can be apply to other institution and be successful as well. Different institutions have students with different thoughts and different ways to deal with things. Suppose that students in Groveton are willing to report the cheating students to the school. it can’t be inferred that students in other institution will do the same thing. And the difficulty levels of exams and the importance of exam scores to students varies as schools change, which lead to different degrees of  risks student like to take to cheat.

To conclude, the Groveton’s honor is a creative way to combat the cheating among universities and colleges. But there still exists some flaws to be observed, researched and improved. And to control the increasing number of students that cheat, we can also take steps of educating the students of their mind and thoughts to change them from the original root.

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2# echodingdingh

TOPIC: ARGUMENT242
破题分析:
1.直接提出学校应该采纳G的honor code.并且给出了honor code的定义.
2.陈述honor code的效果:取代了传统监督做弊的手段,并且有效地捕捉到了做弊的案例.
3.honor code还有far more successful:做弊数量在五年内明显减少,并且调查显示,学生在这个体制下做弊的意愿降低了.
提纲:
开头
陈述G的honor code的定义,提出题目建议在做弊日益猖獗的今天,学校们采取G的honorcode手段来对抗做弊行为.复述应该采取G的honor code的理由:1.hc有效地捕捉到做弊的同学并且省去了老师监督的辛苦(有些自我发挥啊).2.G的honor code使做弊人数明显减少.3.G的honorcode是学生的做弊意愿降低.但是我认为以上理由是存在疑问的.

分论点
1.没有确凿的理由证明G的honor code可以有效地捕捉学生的做弊行为.
(G采取的这种学生报告学生做弊的手段对于联合起来互相保护的学生群体是无效的./学生的做弊手段很可能较高超导致其他学生没有发现./学生之间可能会顾及相互间的关系而不愿或不敢于揭发报告别人的做弊行为.)
2.G的honor code和做弊人数的减少以及学生做弊意愿的降低没有必然的联系.
(根据上段所提出的G可能存在的无效性,被报告做弊人数的减少并不意味着做弊人数的真正减少.即使做弊人数真正减少,也不一定是因为G的出现,可能是因为考试难度的降低.调查显示的学生做弊意愿降低也不具有说服力.首先调查不一定是面向所有学生,而抽样调查就不具有代表性.比如调查到的学生正好是认真踏实学习的同学,或者是不需要很好的GPA以获得fartherstudy oppoutunity的同学,他们都没有做弊的动机（想法很独特，不过学习不好的为了及格作弊好像是常事，学习好的不需要作弊，我感觉这才是常理啊。你的观点让我有些意外。）.也有可能受调查的同学正是做弊的同学,他肯定会说自己没有做弊或者做弊意愿降低.即使调查是面向每一位同学的,对于它的真实有效性也是值得怀疑的,因为做弊与不做弊并不像购物时选A选B这样具有平行性,学生往往会更倾向于选择看来正义的选项而不是真实的选项.（你的论述挺深奥，改卷老师能立刻理解“购物时选A选B这样具有平行性”吗？购物有比较后才会有选择，是哪个更好的问题吧递进，不是平行，不同背景的人理解起来不一样。原谅我的愚笨吧，感觉比喻的效果不是非常棒。“,学生往往会更倾向于选择看来正义的选项而不是真实的选项”感觉很到位，出彩）)
3.即使G的honor code在G取得了成功,它并不一定能够很好地应用到其他学校.
(因为每个学校的学生素质和处事方式是不同的.假设G的学生愿意报告其他同学的做弊行为,并不代表着其他学校的学生也会这样做.并且每个学校的考试题目难度和考试对于学生本身的重要性不相同,导致学生愿意为做弊冒险的程度亦不相同.)

结尾
G的honor code的确是一个有创意的对抗做弊的方法.但是它依然存在一些不完善的地方,有待进一步观察研究（欲抑先仰蛮不错的）.另外其实对抗做弊还应该从学生的思想教育入手对其进行质的改造.（我有个问题：ARG不需要表达个人的见解和想法吧，你的合理化建议有些明显了。）

Groveton’s honor code is a method to combat the cheating among students which（如果不变成非限定性定语从句，感觉用的不对，which的先行词应该是“honor code”但是定语从句有先行词就近原则，我仔细看了语法书的句子，感觉你这样用有点问题。如果改为G’s honor code,which ……，is……是不是好点？） calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated.（有必要把具体的honor code 内容论述一遍吗？感觉开头的论据不重要，加上后开头有点长了） As there’s a dramatic rise in cheating among university and college students, t is suggested that other institutions should adopt the Groveton’s honor code for the honor code frees the teacher from monitoring the students,catched the cheating students and cause the amount of cheating and the students’ willingness to cheating decrease.（感觉论述的有点繁琐了） But in my point of view, the suggestion is somewhat questionable.

There is no exact proof to show that the honor code can catch the cheating students sufficiently. The students may combine to a group against the honor code in which（先行词按就近原则可是honor code 不是group啊） they can cheat together with（有个疑问，用under可以吗？哪个更常用）
the protection from each other, thus the honor code is of no sufficiency（validity）. It is also possible that the student’s cheating methods are too wise to be discovered. What’s more(东方老师说，这不是英文说法，不要用), to report that someone is cheating is not a good
way to maintain harmony among students, it may cause students less likely to tell that someone is cheating（和前面重复，用report代替，）.

Still, the Groveton’s honor code has no necessary links with the declination of the amount of cheating students and the willingness of cheating. According to the point above, there’s insufficiency（看上去论述不明确，是不是想用inefficiency。第一句话感觉逻辑感不强，没足够的让步） existing
in the honor code, so that the reported declination does not mean the real declination of cheating among students（用represent the fact是不是可避免重复词语“cheating 和 declination”之嫌）. Even if the amount do decline. There’s other possibilities, such as the exam is not as difficult as before, to cause it. And the survey that shows that the students are less likely to cheat is also without strong proof. Fisrt, there is no sign to tell that the survey is among all the students in Groveton, and surveys with limited simples are with less persuation. The students under the survey may be just the one who studies so hard and never cheated in life. Or it may be a student who don’t need a good GPA for further study opportunities an thus don’s care much about exam scores. Both of them have no tendency to cheat. It is also possible that the students under the survey are just the one who do the cheating and he will surly tell that he didn’t cheat or he is less tend to cheat than before. Even though the survey included all the students in Groveton, the result is suspicious as well. For to choose to answer cheat or not cheat is not the same as to answer to buy A or buy B during a shopping. Students usually tend to choose the latter as it shows the positivities of themselves.（感觉没必要解释来解释去，可以精简语言概括）

Finally, assume that the Groveton’s honor is indeed successful against the cheating. It is not a strong proof to show that it can be apply to other institution and be successful as well. Different institutions have students with different thoughts and different ways to deal with things. Suppose that students in Groveton are willing to report the cheating students to the school. it can’t be inferred （infer 和prove 用法相近，不用被动“意味着;暗示;表明”）that students in other institution will do the same thing. And the difficulty levels of exams and the importance of exam scores to students varies as schools change, which lead to different degrees of
risks（可以这样说？） student like to take（这个定语从句确切吗“like to”） to cheat.

To conclude, the Groveton’s honor is a creative way to combat the cheating among universities and colleges. But there still exists some flaws to be observed, researched and improved. And to control the increasing number of students that cheat, we can also take steps of educating the students of their mind and thoughts to change them from the original root.（这是合理化建议啊）
dingding, 感觉我现在追求ARGUMENT的状态是希望自己的论述让别人看到会豁然开朗,让读者共鸣，而不是让别人感到奇特。我们的想法多少会让人意外，互改的目的我觉得是把自己的“钻牛角尖”的思维去除（我的问题不是一点两点啊，你的论述蛮到位挺让我佩服，但感觉有时会有）。你感觉呢？

还有每段论述最好字数差不多吧，感觉2、3段看得结构不大爽，当然没啥大碍

Dingding,我要是改的不对的地方请给我标出来吧

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抱歉，dingding ,现在才传上来。对不住，对不住，我的水平有限，改错的难免会有，我们晚上沟通。