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发表于 2009-6-19 08:14:19 |显示全部楼层

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Although we are surrounded by numerous same things, we observe the things differently. The reason is that there is no purely observation since observation is based on the surroundings and individuals.
From everyday experience, we assume that observation is the product of our cognition. We view something, after several complex procedures we turn our observation out to become the cognition of one thing, which affixes our own recognition to the surroundings. Which is to say, the surrounding is one of the major determinants of the observation. Consider, when we confront a bear, almost of us may consider it as a cute animal, if we are in the zoo. Imagine we are faced by the same bear in the forest, would you ever consider
the bear as a cute one? Maybe at that time, you are so scared that run as fast as you can. We may wonder why we observe the same kind of thing yet lead to the never rigorously same reaction? Let's explain it more clearly: in different situation, people have different level of arousement. People, who have nature sense of the dangerous, would definitely feel more aroused by the surrounding in the forest, and this would function our cognition automatically without coming into our realization. Based on that, we know that we actually in different stages when in various surroundings, which may result in no purely observation .

Also, the observation can be affected by individuals, which is another kind of unconscious procedure. There is old saying goes: thousands people have thousands kinds of Hemlet. We are rich in differences since the day we were born, the every, tiny, little various existed in our whole life lead to the huge gap between us. We all view things based on the our past experience, personalities, and beliefs and values, etc. Consider, a half glass of water, a person with positive personality may observe that the glass has already half glass of water, by contrast, a person, with negative personality , may consider the glass as half empty. The differences between them lies in the fact that we all attached our emotional feeling, our desires, expectations and etc, whether automatically or not, into the procedure of observation. Taking all that together, we have compelling evidence that there is no purely observation for the reason that observation always attached and determined by the surroundings and persons.
Admittedly, what we discussed based on the fundamental assumption as to the contemporary level of the technology and science. With the fast development of the scientific, who can predict there is no purely observation in the future? Who can tell what is like in the future world? we can not deny the possibility that maybe in one day we human may invent something brand new which can conduct observation without any existed judgement. Or, maybe, in not long run, artificial intelligence or robot may develop into which that can observe things like our humans do but with purely objective. Looking back to the history, we may not difficult to find out the steps of human are more and more close to pursue pure objective truth, although now we may not achieve it.
As what we have discussed above, we may conclude without any hesitancy that now purely observation is not existed resulting from the different surroundings and various individuals. Any observation is the combinations of two factors above, or may be more. However, one day in future, we may just amazingly find out a way
which would be lead to the objective observation.


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本帖最后由 kren_crazy 于 2009-6-22 00:35 编辑

先占个座, 哥们行啊, 我写这个用了一天的时间  你只用了两个小时 先顶你

Issue157
"There is no such thing as purely objective observation. All observation is subjective; it is always guided by the observer's expectations or desires."


Although we are surrounded by numerous same things, we observe the things differently. The reason is that there is no purely observation since observation is based on the surroundings and individuals.
From everyday experience, we assume that observation is the product of our cognition. We view something, after several complex procedures we turn our observation out to become the cognition of one thing, which affixes our own recognition to the surroundings.
Which( or That?) is to say, the surrounding is one of the major determinants(
这样表达? Is the word “determinant” an adjective or a noun? ) of the observation. Consider, when we confront a bear, almost of us may consider it as a cute animal, if we are in the zoo. Imagine we are faced by the same bear in the forest, would you ever consider the bear as a cute one?
Maybe at that time, you are so scared that run as fast as you can. We may wonder why we observe the same kind of thing yet lead to the never rigorously same reaction? Let's explain it more clearly: in different situation, people have different level of arousement(arousal?). People, who have nature sense of the dangerous, would definitely feel more aroused by the surrounding in the forest, and this would function our cognition automatically without coming into our realization. Based on that, we know that we actually in different stages when in various surroundings, which may result in no purely observation.


Also, the observation can be affected by individuals, which is another kind of unconscious procedure. There is old saying goes: thousands people have thousands kinds of Hemlet. We are rich in differences since the day we were born, the every, tiny, little various existed in our whole life lead to the huge gap between us. We all view things based on our past experience, personalities, and beliefs and values, etc. Consider, a half glass of water, a person with positive personality may observe that the glass has already half glass of water, by contrast, a person, with negative personality , may consider the glass as half empty. The differences between them lies(lie) in the fact that we all attached our emotional feeling, our desires, expectations and etc, whether automatically or not, into the procedure of observation. Taking all that together, we have compelling evidence that there is no purely observation for the reason that observation always attached and determined by the surroundings and persons.
Admittedly, what we discussed based on the fundamental assumption as to the contemporary level of the technology and science. With the fast development of the scientific, who can predict there is no purely observation in the future? Who can tell what is like in the future world?
We can not deny the possibility that maybe in one day we human may invent something brand new which can conduct observation without any existed judgement
judgment. Or, maybe, in not long run, artificial intelligence or robot may develop into which that can observe things like our humans do but with purely objective. Looking back to the history, we may not difficult to find out the steps of human are more and more close to pursue pure objective truth, although now we may not achieve it.
As what we have discussed above, we may conclude without any hesitancy that now purely observation is not existed resulting from the different surroundings and various individuals. Any observation is the combinations of two factors above, or may be more. However, one day in future, we may just amazingly find out a way
which would be lead to the objective observation.

优点:段与段之间的连接的不错,句式变化也很好,好句也比较多。
缺点:1、你是从两个角度论证,第一个角度中举得论证例子,我有一个问题:
主观性(subjectivity
和本能反应是不是
属于和被属于的关系,如果不是的话,我个人觉得论证有点不足。
2、倒数第二段,这样的写法在ISSUE 中是不是可行?
其它的辅导教材中有的说吗?
no choice, but have to

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发表于 2009-6-20 16:34:03 |显示全部楼层
呵呵,组长来了啊,呵呵,欢迎欢迎!!
呃,就是质量不怎样~~~:L

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发表于 2009-6-21 11:39:03 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 nicoleq 于 2009-6-21 17:02 编辑

Although we are surrounded by numerous same things, we observe the things differently. The reason is that there is no purely observation since observation is based on the surroundings and individuals.


From everyday experience, we assume that observation is the product of our cognition. We view something, after several complex procedures we turn our observation out to become the cognition of one thing, which affixes our own recognition to the surroundings. Which is to say(句子碎片。。This is to say , the surrounding is one of the major determinants of the observation. Consider, when we confront a bear, almost of us may consider it as a cute animal, if we are in the zoo. Imagine we are faced by the same bear in the forest, would you ever consider the bear as a cute one? Maybe at that time, you are so scared that run as fast as you can. We may wonder why we observe the same kind of thing yet lead to the never rigorously same reaction?(表达问题,这里句式不是问句) Let's explain it more clearly: in different situation, people have different level of arousement. People, who have nature sense of the dangerous, would definitely feel more aroused by the surrounding in the forest, and this would function(动词时不及物) our cognition automatically without coming into our realization. Based on that, we know that we actually in different stages when in various surroundings, which may result in no purely observation.


Also, the observation can be affected by individuals, which is another kind of unconscious procedure. There is old saying goes: thousands people have thousands kinds of Hemlet. We are rich in differences since the day we were born, the every, tiny, little various existed in our whole life lead to the huge gap between us. We all view things based on the our past experience, personalities, and beliefs and values, etc. Consider, a half glass of water, a person with positive personality may observe that the glass has already half glass of water, by contrast, a person, with negative personality , may consider the glass as half empty. The differences between them lies(单复数) in the fact that we all attached our emotional feeling, our desires, expectations and etc, whether automatically or not, into the procedure of observation. Taking all that together, we have compelling evidence that there is no purely observation for the reason that observation always attached and determined by the surroundings and persons.


Admittedly, what we discussed based on the fundamental assumption as to the contemporary level of the technology and science. (此处之前和之后都是阐述观点,用,号吧)With the fast development of the scientific, who can predict there is no purely observation in the future? Who can tell what is like in the future world? we can not deny the possibility that maybe in one day we human may invent something brand new which can conduct observation without any existed judgement(想表达个人看法). Or, maybe, in not long run, artificial intelligence or robot may develop into which that can observe things like our humans do but with purely objective. Looking back to the history, we may not difficult to find out the steps of human are more and more close to这俩词重复了 pursue pure objective truth, although now we may not achieve it.


As what we have discussed above, we may conclude without any hesitancy that now purely observation is not existed resulting from the different surroundings and various individuals. Any observation is the combinations of two factors above, or may be more. However, one day in future, we may just amazingly find out a way which would be lead to the objective observation.
先赞~\(≧▽≦)/~下,Zl限时写作了,字数也很可观。学习~~~
建议自己先放到word里修改一遍。阐述中心只说了that there is no purely observation,但是在将来我们可以达到purely observation。没有关于All observation is subjective的反驳或赞同。不知道可不可以观点侧重写~~~~这个有待讨论~~有待讨论
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发表于 2009-6-22 20:30:07 |显示全部楼层
我会尽量快点将我的作文改好,再发上来的,最近太忙太忙了~~~~sorry
非常感谢两位的细心的修改,谢谢,小女子不胜感激~~:loveliness:

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