Issue17 【四人行小组】第1次作业 小白

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In general, a law is a form of regulations to protect most kinds of human rights such as birth, live, work etc and ordain [his or her] everyone’s necessary duties which involved people should do. Different types of laws exist in different societies obviously lead to different opinions in different people. The discussion of the issue might be valid in some cases but has flaws in other ones. In my point of view, it is hard to judge whether a law is just or unjust with everyone's agreement above all. [And granted the fair judgment is possible] Even we granted the fair judgment is possible, whether we should simply obey just laws and resist unjust ones is open to doubt. 开头精炼而准确的提出自己的观点，很好
Justness is a concept [with relativity] relative with that different people may give different answers according to his or her social bracket, knowledge, experience and so on. Except [some basic virtue which is ]复数形式 some basic virtues which are keeping with fundamental humanity such as respecting other's lives, [not to steal or rob] 排比注意结构一致 not stealing or robbing, almost every law is controversial in the view of different individual. For instance, the regulation that everyone who goes to college must pay  the tuition, which [protect] 单复数一致protects the colleges' rights on economy, threatens the right of being educated for some students from poor families. What’s more, the law that the one who kill others in self-defense should also be sentenced in some cases is obviously controversial [to simply appraise it just or not ]when we simply appraise it just or not. Since there are many instances like [that] those in this complex society, the classification in the issue is not indisputable. 本段论据很好的支持了论点，但要注意长句子的使用，以及谓语动词的一致性
However, it is true that there are some unjust laws which impair the majority and seem unmoral. The disobedience of these laws is a sublime virtue under certain [circumstance] circumstances单复数问题. Without the brave resistance of the slavery by Abraham Lincoln, it is hard to imagine how the black people live in America now; without the laborious work by Martin Luther King, it is possible that there is still severe racism in the United States today; and without the impressive effort on struggling for his right of playing football after injury by Bosman ，who was a obscure football player in Belgium, the famous Bosman Ruling in modern football will not be regulated and countless young players' right of playing will be impaired by the clubs. In short, if there is no better choice , disobeying and resisting unjust laws means braveness and being respected.本段的论据同样很精彩，但是，我认为in short引导的这句总结并不能很好的概括本文的论点。
Fortunately, in most cases, we have the better way---amending the laws peacefully. With the development of the law system, there are many approaches to make the laws more justifiable and fair. For example, in most countries, it is possible now to contract with the government and legislators and share the opinion with them. Through this, the legislators can take more circumstances into account and make a better edition. What is more important, this access avoids violence and chaos so that the reformation is taken in a peaceful and effective way. Therefore, as to unjust laws, disobedience and resistance is not the only choice and it is responsible for individuals to help to amend those laws in a more effective way, such as giving suggestions.本段开头的过渡很精彩，呵呵，我要学习一下，但是建议作者在写有诸多成分的长句时，把能提前的成分提前，能置后的成分置后，使得句子结构更为清晰。
In a word, the view of the attitude towards the laws is so complex that we must choose better ways according to different situations. As I mentioned above, no one can judge every law that whether it is just or unjust in a way that everyone agrees deeply. In my view, it is most important for the government and the legislators to pay attention to the effect of [every law in society think about it] every law being thought about in society and amend it so that it plays a more satisfactory role in everyday life and [reflects] reflect谓语不一致 the social fairness and fundamental human rights. For ordinary people, besides obeying the obvious just laws, [one duty] another duty is to give significant suggestions to the authorities and legislators and make the laws more acceptable.相比其他段落，结尾不算出彩，In my view, it is most important这句话，个人认为不应该这样写，文章从头到尾都是站在一个普通公民的身份上来写的，这句话突然改变角度，让人觉得唐突

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第一次该文章，不知道这样请不清楚？