[YB-1]7月9日作业 by xxhhtt 刘珂鑫

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提纲：
开头：conclusion evidence flaw
正文：
一 攻击调查
1.范围变化 nation――》suburban town

原因 该地居民的fresh vegetable的来源并非 supermarket

本地的supermarket的fresh vegetable 的质量并不差
2．调查结果构不成充分条件

其他因素 例如 金钱精力成本 及 自己种的并不一定比超市好
二 攻击magazine论据
1．Magazine近三个月并非比原来卖的好

Magazine本身就好，印刷量少，报亭位置好，从而不能说明人们 more and more interested in。。。
2 即便卖的比原来好 并非是由于人们对种蔬菜的兴趣增加了
3.偷换gardening和grow vegetable 的 概念
4.即便兴趣增加，构不成充分条件，人们并非会决定种蔬菜
三 攻击最后建议

Greatly 和variety 据缺乏调查
结尾

让结论更可信的三条建议，即总结上述三个flaw
我觉得写得太罗索了，若干重点也没把握好。烦大家指点。
In this argument the author concludes that we canincrease our profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds thiscoming spring， To support this conclusion, the author cites a nationalsurvey which has shown that many consumers were dissatisfied with the qualityof fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. In addition, the author pointsout that a local gardening magazine has sold out at a news stand three monthsin a row. However, these alone do not constitute a logical argument in favor ofthe conclusion and fail to provide convincing support to making this argument convincingand invulnerable.

First of all,the survey cited leads no support to the argument. The author assumes that thenationwide statistics about the consumers’s dissatisfaction with the qualityof fresh vegetables in supermarkets applies equally to a suburban townwhich
the gardening center serves. Yetthis might not be the case, given that a suburban town is near to the country,sometimes people there can get fresh even just picked vegetable directly fromthe farmers. The vegetables in the supermarket may not be the main source forthem to get vegetables. Even if they mainly buy vegetables from supermarket,they may not dissatisfy with the quality of fresh vegetables in the supermarketof the town. Perhaps the supermarket in this town can easily, quickly andcheaply get high-quality fresh vegetable from the near countries, and perhapsit has good equipment to keep the vegetable fresh. Without ruling suchpossibilities, the author can’t justifiably concludethat the many people in this suburban town are as dissatisfied as the result ofnational survey.

Even if thepeople in the town are really dissatisfied with the quality of the freshvegetable in town’s supermarket, it is not sufficient to infer that theywill choose to grow vegetables by themselves from these evidence. Althoughpeople in suburban town may have a big garden to grow vegetable, people wouldhave to spend some money on seeds and dead stock. Furthermore growing vegetableon one's own needs some specific knowledge and techniques such as when and howto plant, irrigate and fertilize which are complex. In addition no evidence inthis argument promises that the vegetable grown on one's own must be betterthan the vegetable in the supermarket.
Taking these costs of money and vigor and uncertainty into consideration,maybe few people will choose to grow by themselves and then few people will buyseeds.

Anotherproblem that weakens the logic of this argument is that the evidence of thesold out gardening magazines seems not strongly relevant to the conclusion thatconsumers are more and more interested in growing their vegetables. The factthe gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out atthe Village News stand three months in a row has many possible reasons. Forexample, Great Gardens is such a useful and attractive magazine that it alwayssells out or the number of Great Gardens published is so small that it can beeasily sold out, or perhaps the Village News stand has a so good location such asa corner of two busy streets that many people passing by buy magazine there andall the magazines sell well there. In short, without the
former market state of this magazine and justone news stand, it can’t be inferred that the magazine sells well than before.Furthermore, even if we assume that the magazine sells well than before andmore and more people want to buy it, the conclusion still can’t
be drawn that people in thetown are more and more interested in growing vegetables.
Not providing sufficient evidences aboutpeople’s motivation to buy magazines, the author failsto establish the causal relationship between the well-selling magazine andincreasing interest in growing vegetable.
It is highly possible that other factors contribute to the magazine’s well-selling. For instance the magazine is revised making itselfmore interesting and attractive than before. And as spring is coming and theseason is suitable for doing some gardening work, buying some magazine relativewith garden seems very common. In addition, gardening work includes growingvariety of plants, cutting a lawn etc, but not just growing vegetable. Theauthor seems to substitute growing vegetable for all the gardening work.Lacking compelling evidence that links the well-selling magazine with thepeople’s increasing interests in growing vegetable, itis presumptuous to infer that people’s interests ingrowing vegetables is increasing from a magazine’swell-selling.

Even ifconsumers are more and more interested in growing plant, it is still
questionable that interest’sincreasing will necessarily result in buying seeds to grow vegetable. Asmentioned above, growing vegetable needs money and vigor with uncertainty toharvest. How many people will decide to grow vegetable is still a question.
　　Before I come to my conclusion , it is necessary topoint out the last flaw involved in this argument that the author’s suggestion lacks relevant surveys about how many seeds are reallyneeded and what kinds of seeds are needed by the consumers. Without thesesurveys, greatly expanding the variety of vegetable seeds this coming springwill have a very high risk to gain profit. Some kinds of seeds might not sellwell and the cost may not be got back.
　　To sum up, this arguer fails to substantiate his claimthat we can increase our profits by greatly expanding the variety of vegetableseeds this coming spring, because the evidence cited in the analysis does notlend strong support to what the arguer maintain. To make the argument more convincing,the author would have to provide more information with regard to the localconsumers’attitudes to the fresh vegetable in localsupermarket and the main source they get fresh vegetable. Additionally, hewould have to demonstrate that people’s interest ingrowing vegetable is really increasing from several cogent aspects. And last,he should have to give some surveys associated with the quantity and varietythat the consumers need. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factorsdiscussed above, it would have been more thorough and logical acceptance.

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:lolA写1000字，嘿嘿

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怎么了？第一篇没限时就写成这样了