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11# wk4a

As human beings, people never stop desiring for more and better merits, including hoping that every official leader could be upright, brilliant and even good-looking as well（我也得呵呵两下）. Actually, although irreproachable as common public to have this wishful thinking, it is never necessary for an effective leader to fulfill the highest and moral standards.
Admittedly, it is of great advantage for officials to maintain being morally and ethically outstanding. The public need a trustworthy government which to rely on, pay tax to and give authority to. In too many films, the government has played a secret villain, found companies against public freedom and rights. Such an artistic expression reveals the deep concern and disbelieve toward government and the desire for a decent one. If, to some extent, most public officials are amiable and well-known for their superior ethical and moral standards, the public would cooperate with most policies more readily, and the employers in government department would perform their jobs more efficiently, for all of them are optimistic to create a better future under the trustworthy government. Setting an excellent example, officials could achieve their tasks with much more efficiency.（这个例子我并没感到excellent啊）
（这段论述不错）
However, beneficial as public officials stick to highest ethical and moral standards, it is not necessary, sometimes even detrimental to follow these fixed standards, to effectively obtain profit and solve social problems. As the complexity and diversity of nowadays society are raising（rising） rapidly, competitions are correspondingly more challenging. Every country around the world is struggling to maintain their own energy resources and at the same time glare like a tiger at others'. Government officials, more often than not, have to take some unconventional means to take some advantages of their opponents. It may sounds immoral, but all these are for their own society’s good, because there are only lasting profit rather than moral standards and friendship between countries(呵呵，丘吉尔的话貌似，他原话怎么说的？最好查个准确的说话，用上去地道). Also, since nobody could be perfect while mass media usually likes to spot and magnify public figures’ flaws, officials have to cover their disadvantages in order to keep their popularity and support to continually make more contributions to the society.
(ok~当利益和道德相冲突~你选择了前者)
Actually, there are really no written standards to demand a public official. If there is any,（if any） that should be a request（这个词是不是后面虚拟，加should do？） that officials to be effectively conductive to the society. To fulfill the need, the most valuable part is having the ability to improve the society. As long as the fundamental goal is reached, other qualities are just like more flowers on the brocade（锦上添花？是不是这么用的啊？你确定下） rather than fuel in snowy weather（这也是，雪中送炭）. Although people never give up in expecting a society based on morality management, human nature is far from reliable. Only just, detailed and strictly carried out law system could ensure every single part of the whole society functioning as expected. Whimsical as human beings are, we need regulations to help restrain our behaviors and keep safe as well. Thus, public should expect less on officials' moral merits but their professional quality.
（这段的观点很好，提到了法律）
Without doubt, it is perfect to have officials with both decent moral and ethical standards and excellent professional skills working for the public. But if we have to choose between the merits, the ability to ensure the profit of society is always the most important. After all, a vibrant society is what common public truly need. （我觉得这个结尾不太好，感觉犯了argument中false dilemma的错误，为什么要从merits中选择呢？）

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

13# lele77521

unnamed是指不知名的人~可以是任何平头百姓~

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

10# wk4a
TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."

Throughout history, every society is combined with various urgent problems. Although most of these social problems are never eliminated or even alleviated, the overall social development trend is vibrant and promising. What really determines the destiny of a society is how prospective problems rather than burning ones are treated.(我没太看懂，怎么解释？)

Admittedly, there exist numerous immediate problems which seemingly threatening the maintenance of society. Many of these urgent problems take most time and sources of government departments as they are so troublesome and stubborn. Unemployment, for example, has always been difficult due to the collaboration between rapid population growth and occasional economic crisis. Although people without jobs would not be unable to survive for the moment, their support for the government has been damaged and their enthusiasm of devotion is greatly broken, and many new problems, such as violence and starvation, would emerge along with it. As a result, society would be a giant machine without fuel, heavy and powerless to carry out any policy to stimulate economy and maintain the function of society. Being out of job has caused so many anger and riot in piles of countries like Indonesia, Cuba and even the US. Any effective government should never ignore any immediate social problems.

However, to ensure a promising future, society should rely more on solving prospective problems which determines the destiny of the whole society. A delicately drew blue print usually helps the government to anticipate probable problems and prepare solutions for them. Energy problem, as one of the most vital one, has been the core work of almost every government. Many urgent problems like war, hunger and poverty are generated from lacking of energy（lack做动词名词都有，前者就直接lack sth，后者就是a lack of sth，感觉你用混了）. If this significant issue is well solved, human beings can predict a steady and harmonious society. What's more, those derived immediate problems could be easily taken care of.（这个观点好！） But if the government is bogged down in a morass of daily issues and leave along（alone） all the anticipated ones, the society would never have a breathing moment in the both endless urgent social crisis and coming problems. Finally, without doubt, such a society steps into devastation.

Anyway, the most fundamental responsibility for a government, as a matter of fact, is to ensure sustainable development of its society. Though it is of great importance to handle urgent problems appropriately that can keep the society functioning for the present minute, how to go through the next hour is much more essential. To seek development, foresight and sagacity is so crucial because blindly growth is too dangerous for the whole human race. The view is still alive in people's memory what the huge mushroom cloud caused by the first atom bomb aroused and expanded to sky straight forwardly. Such terrible force generated by incorrect scientific development has left so much pain in public and relatively less benefits. As we can see, the government can never be too careful to handle anticipated problems.

As the rising complexity and diversity of nowadays society, it would be fatal to ignore immediate social problems for they might cause irredeemable results and at the same time, more attention should be paid to anticipated ones, for proper layout and preparation would bring us a superior future.（结尾好）

文章思路很清晰，语言也没什么问题。
如果我写这篇文章，我会先把Obama的Election Speech再搬出来看一遍。发展问题嘛~

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

16# lele77521
你用什么东西改的~好怪的~一堆html标记~

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

43篇我词穷了~
看wk4a的文章总结了几个同义
highest-upright-superior-topmost-decent
maintain-fulfill-stick to

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12# wk4a
蓝色的是我加上去的，这样应该切题应该ok吧~

这一段的描写很生动，美中不足的就是没有描写zhou的丰功伟绩来体现他的effective。不过这个似乎不好写，印象中也只知道他的为人好！
Not only being an effective leader, Premier Zhou also won numerous respects from all over the world; many countries’ leaders were his friends privately. Under Premier Zhou, China established the diplomatic relations with many countries and recovered its legal seat in United Nations.

这个似乎不是moral merits吧？也缺少effective的表现。
他很自律啊，不多当总统~挺高尚我认为
After four years, he obeyed the law and left the position. During his term in office, many Generals vowed to devoted themselves to the nations.

你对米国总统了解可真细致啊！这一段论据写的好，还有排比，应该很受rater欢迎。
只是略知一点~写作文时查Wiki~

lele77521UID: 2672123

20# emily_feifei
哦我用word改的。下次换个方式和你们一致

wk4aUID: 2616910

15# lele77521

[cau1]这句话读起来感觉怪怪的，你确定句型没问题就好
我写错了，动词形式……



[cau2]这个词应该是修饰正面特征的时候多一些吧
不一定


[cau3]One of +复数吧
读起来感觉不地道，或是我没见过

是我写错了

[cau4]一般都和from组成短语，

这个没问题，可以

[cau5]这个短语可以放在句尾？

这个没问题，可以


[cau6]你确定有这个用法就行

可以，范文里有类似用法。

wk4aUID: 2616910

17# emily_feifei


As human beings, people never stop desiring for more and better merits, including hoping that every official leader could be upright, brilliant and even good-looking as well（我也得呵呵两下）. Actually, although irreproachable as common public to have this wishful thinking, it is never necessary for an effective leader to fulfill the highest and moral standards.
Admittedly, it is of great advantage for officials to maintain being morally and ethically outstanding. The public need a trustworthy government which to rely on, pay tax to and give authority to. In too many films, the government has played a secret villain, found companies against public freedom and rights. Such an artistic expression reveals the deep concern and disbelieve toward government and the desire for a decent one. If, to some extent, most public officials are amiable and well-known for their superior ethical and moral standards, the public would cooperate with most policies more readily, and the employers in government department would perform their jobs more efficiently, for all of them are optimistic to create a better future under the trustworthy government. Setting an excellent example, officials could achieve their tasks with much more efficiency.（这个例子我并没感到excellent啊）--------的确没写充分--------
（这段论述不错）
However, beneficial as public officials stick to highest ethical and moral standards, it is not necessary, sometimes even detrimental to follow these fixed standards, to effectively obtain profit and solve social problems. As the complexity and diversity of nowadays society are raising（rising）-----raising 主动语态，应该是对的吧。rise是被动的感觉。------ rapidly, competitions are correspondingly more challenging. Every country around the world is struggling to maintain their own energy resources and at the same time glare like a tiger at others'. Government officials, more often than not, have to take some unconventional means to take some advantages of their opponents. It may sounds immoral, but all these are for their own society’s good, because there are only lasting profit rather than moral standards and friendship between countries(呵呵，丘吉尔的话貌似，他原话怎么说的？最好查个准确的说话，用上去地道)------查准确了会不会被判抄袭啊？这样援引大意是不是也算抄袭？----- Also, since nobody could be perfect while mass media usually likes to spot and magnify public figures’ flaws, officials have to cover their disadvantages in order to keep their popularity and support to continually make more contributions to the society.
(ok~当利益和道德相冲突~你选择了前者)------呵呵------
Actually, there are really no written standards to demand a public official. If there is any,（if any） that should be a request（这个词是不是后面虚拟，加should do？）-----不必----- that officials to be effectively conductive to the society. To fulfill the need, the most valuable part is having the ability to improve the society. As long as the fundamental goal is reached, other qualities are just like more flowers on the brocade（锦上添花？是不是这么用的啊？你确定下） rather than fuel in snowy weather（这也是，雪中送炭）---我上网查到的，应该是chiglish-------. Although people never give up in expecting a society based on morality management, human nature is far from reliable. Only just, detailed and strictly carried out law system could ensure every single part of the whole society functioning as expected. Whimsical as human beings are, we need regulations to help restrain our behaviors and keep safe as well. Thus, public should expect less on officials' moral merits but their professional quality.
（这段的观点很好，提到了法律）
Without doubt, it is perfect to have officials with both decent moral and ethical standards and excellent professional skills working for the public. But if we have to choose between the merits, the ability to ensure the profit of society is always the most important. After all, a vibrant society is what common public truly need. （我觉得这个结尾不太好，感觉犯了argument中false dilemma的错误，为什么要从merits中选择呢？）----能不能说细点，我听argu的课基本没感觉-----

wk4aUID: 2616910

19# emily_feifei

Throughout history, every society is combined with various urgent problems. Although most of these social problems are never eliminated or even alleviated, the overall social development trend is vibrant and promising. What really determines the destiny of a society is the way in which prospective problems rather than burning ones are treated.(我没太看懂，怎么解释？)

Admittedly, there exist numerous immediate problems which seemingly threatening the maintenance of society. Many of these urgent problems take most time and sources of government departments as they are so troublesome and stubborn. Unemployment, for example, has always been difficult due to the collaboration between rapid population growth and occasional economic crisis. Although people without jobs would not be unable to survive for the moment, their support for the government has been damaged and their enthusiasm of devotion is greatly broken, and many new problems, such as violence and starvation, would emerge along with it. As a result, society would be a giant machine without fuel, heavy and powerless to carry out any policy to stimulate economy and maintain the function of society. Being out of job has caused so many anger and riot in piles of countries like Indonesia, Cuba and even the US. Any effective government should never ignore any immediate social problems.

However, to ensure a promising future, society should rely more on solving prospective problems which determines the destiny of the whole society. A delicately drew blue print usually helps the government to anticipate probable problems and prepare solutions for them. Energy problem, as one of the most vital one, has been the core work of almost every government. Many urgent problems like war, hunger and poverty are generated from a lack of energy（lack做动词名词都有，前者就直接lack sth，后者就是a lack of sth，感觉你用混了）. If this significant issue is well solved, human beings can predict a steady and harmonious society. What's more, those derived immediate problems could be easily taken care of.（这个观点好！） But if the government is bogged down in a morass of daily issues and leave along（alone） all the anticipated ones, the society would never have a breathing moment in the both endless urgent social crisis and coming problems. Finally, without doubt, such a society steps into devastation.

Anyway, the most fundamental responsibility for a government, as a matter of fact, is to ensure sustainable development of its society. Though it is of great importance to handle urgent problems appropriately that can keep the society functioning for the present minute, how to go through the next hour is much more essential. To seek development, foresight and sagacity is so crucial because blindly growth is too dangerous for the whole human race. The view is still alive in people's memory what the huge mushroom cloud caused by the first atom bomb aroused and expanded to sky straight forwardly. Such terrible force generated by incorrect scientific development has left so much pain in public and relatively less benefits. As we can see, the government can never be too careful to handle anticipated problems.

As the rising complexity and diversity of nowadays society, it would be fatal to ignore immediate social problems for they might cause irredeemable results and at the same time, more attention should be paid to anticipated ones, for proper layout and preparation would bring us a superior future.（结尾好）

文章思路很清晰，语言也没什么问题。
如果我写这篇文章，我会先把Obama的Election Speech再搬出来看一遍。发展问题嘛~
我都没仔细看，看来还是得看看，当时考托福都没看，汗。

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

25# wk4a
抄丘吉尔的话怎么会是抄袭呢~
false dilemma就是非得在AB中选来选去，其实明明可以都选或都不选或选个C~感觉你后面就是非得在利益和道德中选一个

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25# wk4a  
抄丘吉尔的话怎么会是抄袭呢~
false dilemma就是非得在AB中选来选去，其实明明可以都选或都不选或选个C~感觉你后面就是非得在利益和道德中选一个
emily_feifei 发表于 2009-7-28 08:13

早啊，就是引用名人名言要注明吧？这样觉得好麻烦。不过像你那样写：which i paraphrazed……倒是蛮好。
哦，我应该说两者结合会更好，但是A其实是不必要的。
恩！今天把第二贴搞定吧。

wk4aUID: 2616910

22# emily_feifei

12# wk4a
蓝色的是我加上去的，这样应该切题应该ok吧~

这一段的描写很生动，美中不足的就是没有描写zhou的丰功伟绩来体现他的effective。不过这个似乎不好写，印象中也只知道他的为人好！
Not only being an effective leader, Premier Zhou also won numerous respects from all over the world; many countries’ leaders were his friends privately. Under Premier Zhou, China established the diplomatic relations with many countries and recovered its legal seat in United Nations.

这个写的很好，膜拜下你的知识


这个似乎不是moral merits吧？也缺少effective的表现。
他很自律啊，不多当总统~挺高尚我认为
After four years, he obeyed the law and left the position. During his term in office, many Generals vowed to devoted themselves to the nations.

还是觉得这个和体制啊，价值观啊什么的有关系，光自律不足以概括。加的这一句是什么意思呢？对比？


你对米国总统了解可真细致啊！这一段论据写的好，还有排比，应该很受rater欢迎。
只是略知一点~写作文时查Wiki~

你一般还查哪些工具？我用百度知道，和手机字典。

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."
WORDS: 543          TIME: 01:03:39          DATE: 2009-8-6 10:49:24

Retrospect to history, countless nations sprang up and then faded; many were sparking for a certain time, but few managed to survive and thrive for a long period. Tracing the origins of the former ones’ vanishing, we discover that what they had in common is that they failed to handle the potential problems in the future and urgent issues of today.

Admittedly, no wonder that the immediate problems of today are so conspicuous that it is hard for any government to ignore. If not, it is very possible that such government would be bogged down in perils. For instance, once insurrection broke out, the government must gather all its power to defeat the rebel army. Otherwise, the government has to be faced with the fate of being overthrown. In Chinese history, every dynasty was born by overthrowing its former one. Other relatively mild problems like unemployment, pandemic diseases, and natural disasters should also be emphasized by the government. Think of the 5.12 WenChuan earquake which happened in 2008 in Sichuan Province, China, which took thousands of lives and left countless disable and homeless. The Chinese government reacted to the catastrophe as soon as possible: it gathered its military army to seek for lives, manufactured new tents to shelter the survival, called on donations from the society. Though many lives past away in the catastrophe, thanks to the quick response of Chinese government, more lives and broken hearts were able to live. From this angle, if a government failed to solve the urgent problems, we have reason to doubt whether it is able to govern the whole nation.

Nevertheless, being myopic to overlook the potential problems, a nation's strength could be undermined and sometimes its wheels may spin out of control. Enjoying the plenty and lavishing the natural resources, a nation could have to face the shortage of energy generations latter. What should the contemporary people do for their children and children's children: continue squander to leave a barren nation or harness the sun and winds to fuel the cars and run factories? Any government which wants a long-term prosperity would choose the latter one a thousand times. Additionally, how to guide the science and technology to the rightly direction is crucial for the future of the nation and even the world. Frankenstein is not welcome not only in today but also in tomorrow. Certainly, we do not want our children suddenly encounter with someone else who is a cloning of them. Nor do we wish our nuclear weapons created by ourselves destroyed our own children.

More importantly, a nation, whether a wealthy one or a developing one, should never forget to past the mutual value upon which the successes of the nation rely to its descendants, which include honesty and hard work, hope and persistence, courage and curiosity, and loyalty and patriotism. Without the spirits, the future generations could neither preserve the gorgeous and brilliant heritage from their ancestors nor continue making contributions to their mother land.

Taking into account what has been discussed above the long-run bliss of a nation rests in a balance in solving the immediate problems and the potential ones. Without either one, the government would be entangled in great difficulties just as losing one leg for a man.