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TOPIC: ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."

Equipped with three symbols: a sword symbolizing the court's coercive power; scales representing the weighing of competing claims; and a blindfold indicating the impartiality, Lady Justice（扫下盲，她是谁哦？还是就是抽象的~） regulates the rule of law. Mostly, society remains harmonious as people obey her. However, there are times when the blindfold is taken off, the scale is at an angle（再解释下咯~） and the sword pinks the innocents. That is when people should resist her who no longer represents justice.（你的比喻用得更不错了~）
Lady Justice 正义女神，born in wikipedia,呵呵
the scale is at an angle 正义天平的倾斜

Written in 350 BC, the Greek philosopher Aristotle declared, "The rule of law is better than the rule of any individual." Based on justice, law shapes politics, economics and society in numerous ways and serves as a primary social mediator in relations between people. The problem, however, is the judgment for its justice. For law-making institutions, they try to balance the whole society, taking every aspect into consideration. As a result, this general principle inevitably sacrifices the benefits of some minorities. And as for individuals, they tend to consider more about their own interests. Comparisons with others usually lead to a conclusion of a partiality of law. After all, the fundamental role that law severs is to adjust conflicts rather than eliminating them. As long as Lady Justice maintains a balance, the whole society would be counting on her. Especially for many developing countries, the steady development overwhelms. （你还从个人的角度考虑了下公正与否~我没想过~）

Firmly as we obey justice, resolute we are when it is necessary to overthrow Lady Justice with a tilted balance. "Civil Disobedience", a venerated architectural landmark would then be admired and preserved. In the 1940's it was respected by the Danish resistance, in the 1950's it was cherished by people who opposed McCarthyism, in the 1960's it was influential in the struggle against South African apartheid, and in the 1970's it was discovered by a new generation of anti-war activists. （这堆例子我怎么几乎都不懂~囧）It is without any doubt that people are always ready to pursuit a law which really represents freedom and justice.  Blood and lives we may loose during the fight, but a promising future is waving.（额，我想表达“在召唤”的感觉）
那些年代的例子是我抄一个文章的，名字就是civil disobedience。

However, our Lady Justice may encounter with some embarrassment when the justice is taken advantage of for vicious purpose. Dennis M, one of the leaders of Ku Klux Klan, once came to a TV station company in Kansas, requesting his video named Ethic and Ration to be broadcasted. This video is obvious about racial discrimination. Though such an unexpected request was protected by law in that every citizen is the US share the freedom of speech, the TV station refused to broadcast the sensitive material because it is actually anti-ethic and anti-ration, also in consideration of the feeling of its subscribers. But it is difficult to handle the law with loopholes（没看懂）. At last, the head announced that the company is a private property and he has the right to refuse Dennis's request according to the property law. The TV station company has set an excellent example that civil disobedience is not necessarily connected with protecting justice, even for the justice purpose.
（这个角度很特殊啊~这例子你哪找的？）law with loopholes：有漏洞的法律。这个例子在我上传到我们群里的三本电子书中的例子。3K党的言论自由。

Citizens, would certainly suffer when Lady Justice is absent-minded. But greater pain occurs when we dislodge her. As the builders of society, we should never forget that justice is for our better life. In this case, we choose the less detrimental way, regardless amenable or disobedient to the law.
（你总是能挖到一个很特殊的思考点~厉害~）

呵呵，你也能充分利用金氏家族啊。

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这是昨天的，我没找到你们发的文章就也没发，随便帮我看一眼就行。
221"The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
总观点：从哲学的角度说，任何事物都是普遍性与特殊性的统一体。----越来越同意这句话了。
Entity of the universality and particularity
The speaker considers history tell（两个动词了） us that human beings, as the high grade animal in nature for thousands of years, are significantly different in different periods. I admit that people nowadays are different from their predecessors in some extent. However, I still contend that the basic nature of humankinds are never and will not changed, in other words, each of us is entity of universality and particularity from the philosophical angle.
你可能题目没有看清楚，the speaker是说这个different是个illusion啊。不过稍稍改改就可以了，中心句不错。

As a saying said that history repeats itself in the large because human nature never changes. The essential nature of humankinds is constantly the same for centuries. Fearing of death, striving for better life, desiring of freedom, unlimited expanding desire and the like are the nature of human kinds, even including most of other animals in the world. Though it is known to all that death is an irreversible part of life, just like we have the right to pursue our dreams in a democratic society, we also have the “right” to died, most of people cannot accept it positively. Further more, people who lived（这句话怎么改能通顺一些） from prehistory to modern society ----（lfrom prehistory to modern society， people ）never stopping to work hard for a better life, though the level is varying with time, their solitary goal-better their present life, which is another human nature, has never changed. In addition, just look bank those wars about slavers in history, one can better understand that it is also human nature to be freedom; the statue of liberty embodies the spirit of freedom in contemporary society. The most important essential nature is human unlimited desire, whether physical plane or spiritual plane, largely promoting the process of human history. Just review those great inventions such as automobile, telephone, computer, and all kinds of art, we(为什么不能用逗号？) can feel the allure of human desire. May be it is the realistic reason why there so many people are pursing wealth day and night; so many students are working hard for getting the first-rate education. They all have dreams, though difference, but have one purpose in mind, to satisfy their desire.

However, history also tells us that people in different period have different task, human beings changed the world rapidly, at the same time, and they(为什么要加and才可以) are changed by the whole word. 这句话如果直接说changed的话就是否定上面一段了，要加个限定词，比如表面行为之类的。Humanity has progressed over hundreds of thousands of years, especially in the civilization level, which can be embodied by the history building, from Great Wall to Bird’s nest in China; ability to manage the society, which can be illustrate by those famous manager in all fields; and also human thoughts, there are so many research outcome in humanity, increasing papers published in Nature or Economics everyday.

Therefore, we have to admit that the history vividly tell us the people in different times not only difference, but also have similarity from the dialectical angle. In a word, human beings are constantly variable and relatively stable in the long process of history.

一：思路不粗，说本质是不变的，这里最好举一下例子来对比。全文是说理啊，那当然难写了，写点例子就轻松些。
二、语法错误太多了，关键是谓语不清楚，写的时候注意动词的形式。
三、逻辑没有写严谨，你前面说不变，后面又说变，我明白你的意思，但是你没有在文章里说清楚。要注意变和不变的对比和解释。这样可以写出第三大段。

wk4aUID: 2616910

TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history." WORDS: 549          TIME: 00:57:53          DATE: 2009-8-7 9:56:19你的限时永远是我的追求的指标 Being fascinating, history always plays as a magnet for thousands of scholars or common people. It is a mirror, reflecting the past, present, and the future. The process of learning it creates a boon for human society. where is your topic sentence？ Retrospect to history, human beings waved "good-bye" for the primitive days very long ago. We fly into the sky, stepped onto the moon, and dived deeply into the ocean.这句话好熟悉啊 So arrogant are many of us 这句也是that they regard themselves as the difference, total surpassing their ancestors. However, history serves to demonstrate that the humanity of people varies so little from one period to another. 藏的可隐蔽了What the reality is that human beings are never free of our complex emotions: joy, rage, jealousy, love, lust, and so forth. Opening our history scroll, we discover that wars and conflicts never vanish from this planet from the old days to the present. Only knowing this, human beings would be humbled to appreciate the brilliant ant gorgeous heritage left by our forerunners. 其实本来觉得这样写是很好的，但是发现似乎每个人都是这样写的，我们还是寻找个新的思路吧，考官肯定不会喜欢千篇一律。不是说你这段不好的意思。 Obvious learning history breaks down the illusion that people are significantly different from the ones who in the past你才写到这里就这些说结论了，我看着很吓一跳。 but we should bear in mind that the study of history should not be distorted by attributing the present-day thoughts to the old days. History has pasted, lying there, and waiting for us to open it. For every period had its unique characters, if we are led by the thoughts of today, we may probably reach a wrong destination: the societies in the past resembles so much of that of today, or they became difficult to understand. What should we do is to unveil the origins of history from the people in present.加上in order to... 这一段写的不粗，就是升华的有点快，毕竟你就用了一段来证明。 If so, then there are a lot more meanings of learning history. Thanks to it, we are able to avoid so many mistakes from the miseries. Without history, the road ahead us is filled with darkness. Take China for instance. Hundreds of years ago, China was so self-contented that she refused to communicate and cooperate with outside. While she was lavishing her seemingly abundant resources, the West went through the Industrial Revolution which made them more and more strong and powerful. Finally, the explosion of the bombs awaked the Chinese, but it was too late: many regions became the colonies of the West. Learning from all the failures, Chinese government carried out the "Reform and Opening up" policies thirty years ago, aiming to reconstruct the nation and bringing prosperity back. Furthermore, history sometimes helps us predict the future. Thirty years ago, the United States was bogged down in the financial crisis; thirty years later, another economic crisis is sweeping over almost every country. From the history, we are certain that we would weather the storm undoubtedly; but we are also told that without proper guidance and strict monitoring regulations, the next crisis is just at the corner. 这一段写历史的其它作用，不过要强调下这些是不是chief benefits呢？ Taking into account what has been discussed above learning history illuminates that our humanity changes so little along the long course of history. Additionally, history tells more than that: it teaches us lessons and sometime gives prediction about tomorrow in order to guide us to the right direction and avoid making the same mistakes. But in the first place, on no account could we afford to impose our thoughts of present onto the study of history. 木有点题，说说那个illusion。

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TOPIC: ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
WORDS: 549          TIME: 00:57:53          DATE: 2009-8-7 9:56:19你的限时永远是我的追求的指标还早呢~刚写了一篇55分钟才450个字。

Being fascinating, history always plays as a magnet for thousands of scholars or common people. It is a mirror, reflecting the past, present, and the future. The process of learning it creates a boon for human society.
where is your topic sentence？

Retrospect to history, human beings waved "good-bye" for the primitive days very long ago. We fly into the sky, stepped onto the moon, and dived deeply into the ocean.这句话好熟悉啊 用过的话用过的例子就一直用啊，其实我都有点烦。So arrogant are many of us 这句也是that they regard themselves as the difference, total surpassing their ancestors. However, history serves to demonstrate that the humanity of people varies so little from one period to another. 藏的可隐蔽了What the reality is that human beings are never free of our complex emotions: joy, rage, jealousy, love, lust, and so forth. Opening our history scroll, we discover that wars and conflicts never vanish from this planet from the old days to the present. Only knowing this, human beings would be humbled to appreciate the brilliant ant gorgeous heritage left by our forerunners.
其实本来觉得这样写是很好的，但是发现似乎每个人都是这样写的，我们还是寻找个新的思路吧，考官肯定不会喜欢千篇一律。不是说你这段不好的意思。
完蛋，我现在已经很习惯从人性来挖掘了，只要和历史社会沾点边的都会想到。
Obvious learning history breaks down the illusion that people are significantly different from the ones who in the past你才写到这里就这些说结论了，我看着很吓一跳。 but we should bear in mind that the study of history should not be distorted by attributing the present-day thoughts to the old days. History has pasted, lying there, and waiting for us to open it. For every period had its unique characters, if we are led by the thoughts of today, we may probably reach a wrong destination: the societies in the past resembles so much of that of today, or they became difficult to understand. What should we do is to unveil the origins of history from the people in present.加上in order to...
这一段写的不粗，就是升华的有点快，毕竟你就用了一段来证明。

If so, then there are a lot more meanings of learning history. Thanks to it, we are able to avoid so many mistakes from the miseries. Without history, the road ahead us is filled with darkness. Take China for instance. Hundreds of years ago, China was so self-contented that she refused to communicate and cooperate with outside. While she was lavishing her seemingly abundant resources, the West went through the Industrial Revolution which made them more and more strong and powerful. Finally, the explosion of the bombs awaked the Chinese, but it was too late: many regions became the colonies of the West. Learning from all the failures, Chinese government carried out the "Reform and Opening up" policies thirty years ago, aiming to reconstruct the nation and bringing prosperity back. Furthermore, history sometimes helps us predict the future. Thirty years ago, the United States was bogged down in the financial crisis; thirty years later, another economic crisis is sweeping over almost every country. From the history, we are certain that we would weather the storm undoubtedly; but we are also told that without proper guidance and strict monitoring regulations, the next crisis is just at the corner.
这一段写历史的其它作用，不过要强调下这些是不是chief benefits呢？写的时候也考虑过这问题，不过后来觉得这个chief不chief完全没法判断啊。嗯，其实我就该说没有chief与否，也没有必要去区分。

Taking into account what has been discussed above learning history illuminates that our humanity changes so little along the long course of history. Additionally, history tells more than that: it teaches us lessons and sometime gives prediction about tomorrow in order to guide us to the right direction and avoid making the same mistakes. But in the first place, on no account could we afford to impose our thoughts of present onto the study of history.
木有点题，说说那个illusion。接受~

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写的时候也考虑过这问题，不过后来觉得这个chief不chief完全没法判断啊。嗯，其实我就该说没有chief与否，也没有必要去区分。

自己要判断啊，然后证明之。不然怎么叫issue？