8.11作业

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之前练过一题差不多的（题库72），求狠拍
Agree or disagree with the following statement: it is more important to award students for effort (trying or hard working) than for achievement (good grades)5 [0 x6 X0 L3 k7 a+ A. {

Nowadays, there is a hot and crucial debate over the topic what is the criteria when awarding students. A considerable proportion of people believe that it is more important to award students for their effort, while others oppose that standpoint; they deem that others criteria, for example, their achievement, should be better. If facing the problem, I would probably vote for the latter opinion. Among countless reasons or facts that can strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most consequential and conspicuous ones here.

First of all, achievement of a student, in most cases, is related to his effort. It is hard to imagine someone achieve a high grade without effort. Take my own experience for example. When I was in high school, my classmates who were awarded every year ascribed their achievement to their hard working. It does not come singly but in pairs that statistical reports conducted by experts have demonstrated that those who obtain outstanding grades always devote themselves to their studies. Therefore, those students deserve their awards.

Furthermore, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that effort is extremely difficult to evaluate, while evaluation of grades is much easier. Should a student studies all day long but doesn't get a good grade be awarded? Not really. He is diligent enough, however, perhaps he doesn't use the right method to study; or even worse, he just pretends to be industrious to be awarded. On the contrary, students who get high scores probably have found appropriate ways to gain what should be learned. Hence, it is more reasonable to award the students who get high grade instead of those who just work hard.





结尾没写出来，因为实在不会写。帮我改的人也一起帮我想想改写个怎样的结尾。

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Agree or disagree with the following statement: it is more important to award students for effort (trying or hard working) than for achievement (good grades)
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Nowadays, there is a hot and crucial debate over the topic what is the criteria when awarding students. A considerable proportion of people believe that it is more important to award students for their effort, while others oppose(两者并不是完全相反的观点) that standpoint; they deem that others criteria, for example, their achievement, should be better. If facing （Faced with）the problem, I would probably vote for the latter opinion.Among countless reasons or facts that can strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most consequential and conspicuous ones here.（最后这句无关痛痒的话不用这么长～）
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First of all, achievement of a student, in most cases, is related to his effort. It is hard to imagine someone achieve a high grade without effort. Take my own experience for example. When I was in high school, my classmates who were awarded every year ascribed their achievement to their hard working. It does not come singly but in pairs that statistical reports conducted by experts have demonstrated that those who obtain outstanding grades always devote themselves to their studies. Therefore, those students deserve their awards.3
Furthermore, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that effort is extremely difficult to evaluate, while evaluation of grades is much easier. Should a student studies all day long but doesn't get a good grade be awarded? Not really. He is diligent enough, however, perhaps he doesn't use the right method to study; or even worse, he just pretends to be industrious to be awarded. On the contrary, students who get high scores probably have found appropriate ways to gain what should be learned. Hence, it is more reasonable to award the students who get high grade instead of those who just work hard.

结尾建议总结论述的两点要点，说出结论即可。

请帮忙改改我的作文，谢了～

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Nowadays, there is a hot and crucial debate over the topic what is the criteria when awarding students. A considerable proportion of people believe that it is more important to award students for their effort s, while others oppose that standpoint; they (珊了直接接deem)deem that others criteria, for example, their achievement s, should be better. If facing the problem, I would probably vote for the latter opinion. Among countless reasons or facts that can strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most consequential and conspicuous ones here.

开头不错哈！ 很有XDF的味道呢First of all, achievement of a student, in most cases, is related to his effort. It is hard to imagine someone achieve a high grade without effort. Take my own experience for example. When I was in high school, my classmates who were awarded every year ascribed their achievement to their hard working. It does not come singly but in pairs that statistical reports conducted by experts have demonstrated that those who obtain outstanding grades always devote themselves to their studies. Therefore, those students deserve their awards.

Furthermore, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that effort is extremely difficult to evaluate, while evaluation of grades is much easier. Should a student studies(study) all day long but doesn't (don’t )get a good grade be awarded? Not really. He is diligent enough, however, perhaps he doesn't use the right method to study; or even worse, he just pretends to be industrious to be awarded. On the contrary(conversely更好哈 ), students who get high scores probably have found appropriate ways to gain what should be learned. Hence, it is more reasonable to award the students who get high grade instead of those who just work hard.6*

achievement可以量化effort 不能 很好

结尾，你可以总结你的两个观点achievement is associated with hard work,and the accomplishment can be evaluated easily due to the evident outcome rather than effort may 你的观点…….

句式 语法都很好!小猪很不错哦

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从别人那新学了个模板，第一次用写的不好请见谅。（貌似说的完全没有什么逻辑）
The professor argues that he didn’t agree the theory of how the moon formed have criticized, which differs from the main idea that moon and earth weaken the giant-impact theory in the text.

First of all, the professor holds that the giant crash took place more than 4 billion year, So there had been any impact between the earth and a space rock and it may be disappeared long ago However, the reading material believes that cause so far no trace of a giant impact has been found on the surface of earth, so validity of the giant-impact theory is in doubt

Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading that the rock on the moon contain few volatile substances such as water if the theory is right .the professor consider that when moon form out of the collision of space rock, it have high temperature, the high temperature make the water evaporated and gone off into space . So it is not surprised that there is a little water among the rock of moon.

Finally, the professor states that because the moon is the part of the earth’s surface. It has a low density compared to the terrestrial planet the moon was originally part of he earth’ s surface , not the earth’s core, its density should be consistent with the density of the earth’s surface, which directly confutes what the reading indicates, namely that the density of the moon is lower than that of the earth.

As mentioned above, it's easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading material is in doubt.

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The professor argues that he didn’t(doesn't) agree the theory of how

the moon formed have(has) criticized, which differs from the main idea

that moon and earth weaken the giant-impact theory in the text.

First of all, the professor holds that the giant crash took place more

than 4 billion year(ago), So there had been any impact between the

earth and a space rock and it may be disappeared long ago However, the

reading material believes that cause so far no trace of a giant impact

has been found on the surface of earth, so validity of the giant-impact

theory is in doubt.

Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading that the rock on

the moon contain few volatile substances such as water if the theory is

right .the professor consider(considers) that when moon form(forms) out

of the collision of space rock, it have(has) high temperature, the high

temperature make the water evaporated and gone off into space . So it

is not surprised that there is a little water among the rock of moon.

Finally, the professor states that because the moon is the part of the

earth’s surface. It has a low density compared to the terrestrial

planet the moon was or surface , not the

earth’s core, its density should be consistent with the density of the

earth’s surface, which directly confutes what the reading indicates,

namely that the density of the moon is lower than that of the earth.
这段的长句太长了，条理不太清晰（估计是自己的理解能力有问题），总之用几
句分句会更清楚。

As mentioned above, it's easy to make a summary that what stated in the

reading material is in doubt.

总评：小猪的新模板很有条理，推荐使用，我也很喜欢。文章的遣词造句很好，

        但是时态的问题比较多，应该注意，写完后，有时间要多检查。

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The professor argues that he didn’t (一般现在时就好)agree the theory of how the moon formed have(has) been criticized, which differs from the main idea that moon and earth weaken the giant-impact theory in the text.

First of all, the professor holds that the giant crash took place more than 4 billion year ago, So there had been any(?不太懂意思，就一次啊) impact between the earth and a space rock and it may be disappeared long ago. However, the reading material believes that cause（because） so far no trace of a giant impact has been found on the surface of earth, so validity of the giant-impact theory is in doubt 感觉要强调professor对reading material 的反驳，你只把双方的根据列出来了，缺少衔接。5 e* X" o9 ^2 s, `, K/

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Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading that the rock on the moon contain few volatile substances such as water if the theory is right .the professor consider that when moon form out of the collision of space rock, it have high temperature, the high temperature make the water evaporated and gone off into space . So it is not surprised that there is a little water among（in） the rock of moon.这段不错5 ]# y$ I% c!

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Finally, the professor states that because the moon is the part of the earth’s surface. It has a low density compared to the terrestrial planet the moon was originally part of he earth’ s surface , not the earth’s core, its density should be consistent with the density of the earth’s surface, which directly confutes what the reading indicates, namely that the density of the moon is lower than that of the earth. well done too

As mentioned above, it's easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading material is in doubt.
小猪整体写的很不错，模版用起来也很简洁，只要把第一点再修饰一下就好了，继续加油啦

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继续使用这个新模版，把它练练熟。
The listening material refutes all three reasons, which bolster the reading material’s thesis.
The professor argues agree that methane gas is an explosion for the Tunguska, which is the largest impact event in recent history, which differs from the main idea that this thing explosion was caused by an asteroid, and the event was most likely the result of a “swamp gas” in the text.

First of all, the professor holds that asteroid fragment doesn’t mean the mean the asteroid didn’t hit Tubnguska. Any trace left at the impact site would have been destroying by the forces of nature.
However, the reading material believes that so Far neither its fragment nor any impact craters have been discovered

Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading that the asteroid didn’t have to crash into earth as an intact rock.
When an asteroid explodes in the lower atmosphere, the asteroid exploded into many small fireballs. So there is no trace. The professor consider that the impact on land would have cause a huge crater if the a large asteroid crush the earth.
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Finally, the professor states that the huge fireball would not have concentrated on one spot in this event. In fact the single was the more result in an asteroid rather than swamp gas, which directly confutes what the reading indicates, namely that the truth is ,comets and meteors do not explode when encountering earth’s atmosphere
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As mentioned above, it’s easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading material is in doubt.

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The listening material refutes all three reasons, which bolster the reading material’s thesis.,The professor argues agree (这里是不是应该是agreement还是什么~用agree貌似不对劲~) that methane gas is an explosion for the Tunguska, which is the largest impact event in recent history, which differs from the main idea that this thing explosion was caused by an asteroid, (连用两个which~可以换掉一个吧~~) and the event was most likely the result of a “swamp gas” in the text.
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First of all, the professor holds thatasteroid fragment doesn’t mean the mean (笔误~) the asteroid didn’t hit Tubnguska. Any trace left at the impact site would have been destroying by the forces of nature. However, the reading material believes that so Far neither its fragment nor any impact craters have been discovered. (没有碎片又怎样了呢？是不是应该把这句话说完呀~)
Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading thatthe asteroid didn’t have to (直接have就成吧~) crash into earth as an intact rock (完整岩石~我死也没听出来……)., When an asteroid explodes in the lower atmosphere, the asteroid exploded into many small fireballs. So there is no trace. The professor consider that the impact on land would have cause a huge crater if the a large asteroid crush the earth. (小猪听力很强悍啊……听这么全~我完全不知道她说了什么细节~)

Finally, the professor states that the huge fireball would not have concentrated on one spot in this event. In fact the single was the more result in an asteroid rather than swamp gas, which directly confutes what the reading indicates, namely thatthe truth is ,comets and meteors do not explode when encountering earth’s atmosphere (这段貌似不够全面了~虽然我也没听全，但是看小猪写的两句肯定是没囊括了听力的要点~)


As mentioned above, it’s easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading material is in doubt., i

呵呵，模板用的还是很不错的，条理清晰，说的也很全面~~
语法毛病我可能挑不出来，内容上也没问题~~就是再加油联系抓住听力要点吧！

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The listening material refutes all three reasons, which bolster the reading material’s thesis. The professor argues that he don’t find the argument that many people doubt about prescribed fire, which differs from the main idea that Scientists have the following doubt the is prescribed burning a sound practice to protect the lives and property of our residents living near forestlands in the text.

First of all, the professor holds that Prescribed fire can make logs and leaves into ashes, reducing the hazard of a forest fire. Also, it can thin the forest leaves and permit more sunlight pass through, which is healthy to the growth of trees. And prescribed can reduce the wildfire dangerous if a big wildfire hazard. However, the reading material believes that prescribed burning of prairie releases a lot of smoke, causing serious air pollution and global warming.

Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading that prescribed fire can be unpredictable and dangerous, the professor consider that because all the people participating are well trained, it lead to the prescribe burning has been employed for a long time and it is safe.

Finally, the professor states that cost of prescribed burning is small. When there is a big wildfire, it will cost ten times higher than entailed by prescribed fire, let alone the damages to homes and families, which directly confutes what the reading indicates, namely that prescribed fire to achieve forest management objectives is unaffordable to government cause it calls for a lot of money.

As mentioned above, it’s easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading material is in doubt.

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The listening material refutes all three reasons, which bolster the reading material’s thesis. （好模板~~）The professor argues that he don’t find the argument that many people doubt about prescribed fire, which differs from the main idea that scientists have the following doubt the prescribed burning is a sound practice to protect the lives and property of our residents living near forestlands in the text.

First of all, the professor holds that prescribed fire can make logs and leaves into ashes, reducing the hazard of a forest fire. Also, it can thin the forest leaves and permit more sunlight pass through, which is healthy to the growth of trees. And prescribed can reduce the wildfire dangerous if a big wildfire hazard. 此处的关联值得学习啊~However, the reading material believes that prescribed burning of prairie releases a lot of smoke, causing serious air pollution and global warming.* \) g: [* }/ k
这一部分我没听好，有写单词没反应过来

Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading that prescribed fire can be unpredictable and dangerous, the professor consider that because all the people participating are well trained, it lead to the prescribe burning has been employed for a long time and it is safe.( z' x; N!
是不是简单了？他还讲了根据一些因素去 “点火”

Finally, the professor states that cost of prescribed burning is small. When there is a big wildfire, it will cost ten times higher than entailed by prescribed fire, let alone the damages to homes and families, which directly confutes what the reading indicates, namely that prescribed fire to achieve forest management objectives is unaffordable to government cause it calls for a lot of money.此处标点是否有问题，建议改一改啊
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As mentioned above, it’s easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading material is in doubt.回应的好！
向你学习，这个模板，还有表达方式，加油！
不太会用寄托的帖子编辑  教教我啊~  传了doc

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The listening material refutes all three reasons, which bolster the reading material’s thesis(这个一般不用来说观点). The professor argues that he don’t find the argument that many people doubt about prescribed fire, which differs from the main idea that Scientists have the following doubt the is prescribed burning a sound practice to protect the lives and property of our residents living near forestlands in the text(这句话好混乱，我没看懂…简洁点吧).

First of all, the professor holds that prescribed fire can make logs and leaves into ashes, reducing the hazard of a forest fire. Also, it can thin the forest leaves and permit more sunlight pass through, which is healthy to the growth of trees. And prescribed can reduce the wildfire dangerous(danger) if a big wildfire hazard. However, the reading material believes that prescribed burning of prairie releases a lot of smoke, causing serious air pollution and global warming.

Second, Contradicting what is stated in the reading that prescribed fire can be unpredictable and dangerous, the professor consider(considers) that because all the people participating are well trained, it lead(leads) to the prescribe burning has been employed for a long time and it is safe(lead to后面不能跟从句了吧，再说，这个也不是因果关系啊).

Finally, the professor states that cost of prescribed burning is small. When there is a big wildfire, it will cost ten times higher than entailed by prescribed fire, let alone the damages to homes and families, which directly confutes what the reading indicates, namely that prescribed fire to achieve forest management objectives is unaffordable to government cause it calls for a lot of money.

As mentioned above, it’s easy to make a summary that what stated in the reading material is in doubt.
写的不错，听力细节很全，但是注意语法。你的长句很多，但是有点混乱。如果语法不太明确的话，还是用短句吧

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谢谢二位了。我会再接再厉的

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9.1作业
In the rapid development of society, competition becomes more and more intense among people. We have to spend more time thinking what we should do next and how to make a schedule, so an increase number of decisions have to make by us to regular our steps. Therefore, all of us find ourselves constantly confront a question that is:” Who can make the decision?” Maybe it is really hard to the majority of people to answer; however, according to me, the answer is the decisions can be better if they are made by some people who have more experience than we have.
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First of all, as I mentioned before, find someone is older than you or got more experience in some certain field is better for us to help us make decision. Because they know life better than we do, these senior people can know what we need do now, rather than just decide by intuition like youth might do. In the common life, we can always face numerous dilemma choices between different schools or careers; have some time conflicts between something we need to do and cannot decide which one is more important; in school, we might get some emergency which have not happen before in our own experience, like cannot register for a course or have some problem with our roommates…All of these above difficult moments we are likely to experience, so a right person who has experienced the same stage can indicates us is truly useful.
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Admittedly, friends are an integral part of an adolescent . The adolescents, they always study together, they sometimes play sports hand in hand and also share entertainments with each other. So the ways their friends study, the tactics their friends adopt during sports and the values their friends accept all inevitably affect the young adults themselves. My sister, a high school student, often adjusts herself according to her friends attitudes toward what to wear, how to play and where to release. She is already a copy of her friends. So this result can unshakably shows youth need other people to help them because they do not have experience about this decision.

Admittedly, of course, try to deal with some situations we have not experience before is a precious chance to get a lot out of these difficulties. These troubles can help us to build strong character, such as independence, persistence and courage; they can also let us master essential skills, like problem-solve skills and organized skills. If the decision is made by our own, we can find a definite goal and motivate us work hard toward the goal. And in the procession of solving problem, we will communicate with others if this step is needed, we can not only enlarge the circle of friends, but build the social connection as well.
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However, for my part, make decision by some right person who have more experience and know us well is better for our future, because they can consider further consequences. Or a better choice is to make decision with our parents and instructors that can both develop our ability and choose the best decision

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赫赫，小猪，你又落在我手里了，看我怎么动刀吧，磨刀霍霍向猪羊

In（With） the rapid development of society, competition becomes more and more intense among people. We have to spend more time thinking what we should do next and how to make a schedule, so an increased number of decisions have to be made by us to regular (?这里想说什么)our steps. Therefore, all of us find ourselves constantly confront a question that is:” Who can make the decision?”（such question like this 怎么样） Maybe it is really hard to the majority of people to answer; however, according to me, the answer is the decisions can be better if they are made by some people who have more experience than we have.(最后必须加一句拉回来，so most people prefer to make their own decisions on their own,用作文题的论题就一定不跑题)x. ^  K7 C1 {7 Y
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First of all, as I mentioned before, find someone is older than you or got more experience in some certain field is better for us to help us （自己帮自己？）make decision（语法错误，改为It is a wise approach to turn to those who have more experience and knowledge than us for help ）. Bleecause they know life better than we do, these senior people can know what we need do now, rather than just decide by intuition like youth might do. In the common life, we can always face numerous dilemma choices between different schools or careers; have some time conflicts between something we need to do and cannot decide which one is more important; in school, we might get some emergency which have not happen before in our own experience, like cannot register for a course or have some problems with our roommates…All of these above difficult moments we are likely to experience, so a right person who has experienced the same stage can indicates us (can give us feasible suggestions and make decisions over these issues for ourselves)is truly useful.小猪做的很不错，可以用事例来辅助说理/ U0 |1 B1 ]+ w  ]$ R

Admittedly, friends are an integral part of an adolescent（主题句必须直指主题，你可以说朋友很珍贵，相处时可以互相体谅，在不涉及原则的问题上让别人做决定） . The adolescents, they always study together, they sometimes play sports hand in hand and also share entertainments with each other. So the ways their friends study, the tactics their friends adopt during sports and the values their friends accept all inevitably affect the young adults themselves. My sister, a high school student, often adjusts herself according to her friends attitudes toward what to wear, how to play and where to release. She is already a copy of her friends. So this result can unshakably shows youth need other people to help them because they do not have experience about this decision.（如果这段以这个思路写，需要并入正文第一段，the youth没有决断力，需要有经验的人指导）, R% X6 ^6 `) y& Cout
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Admittedly, of course, try to deal with some situations we have not experience before is a precious chance to get a lot out of these difficulties. These troubles can help us to build strong character, such as independence, persistence and courage; they can also let us master essential skills, like problem-solving skills and organization skills. If the decision is made by our own, we can find a definite goal and motivate us to work hard toward the goal. And in the procession of solving problem, we will communicate with others if this step is needed, we can not only enlarge the circle of friends, but build the social connection as well小猪的思路好开阔，这段写的真好 F. N. G4 r+ _
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However, for my part, make decision by some right persons who have more experience and know us well is better for our future, because they can consider further consequences. Or a better choice is to make decision with our parents and instructors that can both develop our ability and choose the best decision
小猪写的不错，文笔也很流畅
注意我上面的批改，有问题QQ聊