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Most companies involving in social activities are wiling to make contributions to our society. They donate money to charities, help people struggling(struggle) in poverty, and help improve the sanitation and so on. However, there comes an argument: whether a company should spend money in supporting art or spend money protecting environment. On this controversial issue, I never remain suspicious that a company should donate money to protect environment based on the following eloquent demonstrations.
First and foremost, it is universally acknowledged that our environment is becoming deteriorating. In my hometown, Taiyuan, an industrial city surrounded by mountains, water pollution and air pollution are severe. The UN, by analyzing statistic, alleges that my hometown is not a proper territory for people to live. My grand father who lives in this city more than 70 years told me that there used to be a brilliant(这个词用的有问题) river called Fen River across my hometown. However, with the rapid development of industry, plants directly discharged polluted water in to the river. Little by little, the whole river was polluted, fish and shrimps vanished, and parents no longer take their children there. This reminds me of a famous speech, "How can you sell or buy the sky": "This shining water that moves in streams in not just water but the blood of our ancestor. The water's murmur(水的抱怨?) is the voice of my father's father." And due to the wide use of coal, the sky is gray. When I open my windows just for 3 hours, there must be some dust in my bedroom. On the other hand, impending seriously over us, global warming generated by green house effect let the ice in South Pole and North Pole melt, which may give rise to a calamity to the whole world. Thus, spending money protecting environment is indispensable.
你很擅长描写~
In addition, we all should be aware of the fact that we live not only for ourselves, but also for our generations. Suppose that we pollute the air and water and damage the forest all over the world in the few decades, how can our kids, or our kids' kids, live? The end of living is the beginning of survival, while the end of surviving is extinct.
Although I advocate that protecting environment is of great importance, I do not deny that art also plays a significant role in our society, for art is capable of enriching our mental world and can contribute to the prosperity of our culture. However, with every aspect taken into consideration, compared with the necessity of protecting environment, the importance of art is inappreciable.
第二个论点太少了,你可以练习下说理,不过高中生写成这样真的很不错~ |
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