小白求拍ISSUE240第一次写完，希望大家猛拍

二战英雄UID: 2686845

TOPIC: ISSUE240 - "Although it is easy to respond positively to the work of another person or group, it is far more worthwhile to give negative feedback."
WORDS: 495          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2009-8-22 11:02:38

Is respond negative to the work of another person more worth than positively? In some case, I think so. It will be easy to agree with somebody else than give an another opinion. Since you have to give a strong support of your own idea and convince others negative feedback always considered an active of brave. However, sometimes, it is better to compromise the work than totally reject .

First of all, giving an negative feedback is good for the perfect of the work. Because the more flaws you find before the work is finally completed, the better the work will be. In another words, negative will help the process of the development of one work. For example, before every software of Microsoft came into the market, they will put the Beta version online, and ask the feed back from the users, then, if the user are all giving the positively feedback, then they will not give any improvement of the software. And that is a bad thing for the programmers and the company.

Moreover, a negative feedback from you means that you were really thinking about the problems or the idea. It may not means to much  the comment itself, however, thinking critically means your were really cares about that, and you will make efforts to make it better. For instance, my professor Mr.Li, he will highly speak the students  who dare to question about his points of view, maybe the questions which the student came up with is not so right or there still a better solution of it, however, the attitude of the student about learning is worth to praise, because he was not just listening to what the professor has said but think deeply about it.  

However, sometimes, compare with give the negative feedback, To settle by concessions is a better idea. Not an idea has its own reason,  sometime when the divarication came out, one should the think the reason from other's angle,not stick on the opinion made by yourself. Even if the work of other was wrong, there still better solutions than give the negative feedback directly. Sometimes the moral of the group is much more important. Like me, when I was doing an experiment with my totur, I made an mistake during the procesure, which made the result totally reversed, however, my tutor did not criticize me imidietaly but wait until I finished the experiment. She could ,but she did not. After that, she told me, without seeing the result by my own eyes I will not 100 percent sure about how could that happened. It is a better idea to convince other people to agree his/her opinion firstly and then give a better makeup.

In sum,  it is brave to give an negative feedback to respond the work of another person since the courage and the sprite of the critiriszm, however, sometimes, we should take a better way to give the advice to make the work perfect.

二战英雄UID: 2686845

自己顶一下~

小笨蚂蚁UID: 2688279

我哭死，我花了一个半小时给楼主改作文，结果……没有了！！！！！
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小笨蚂蚁UID: 2688279

发错了~~~

小笨蚂蚁UID: 2688279

TOPIC: ISSUE240 - "Although it is easy to respond positively to the work of another person or group, it is far more worthwhile to give negative feedback."
WORDS: 495          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2009-8-22 11:02:38

Is respond negative to the work of another person more worth than positively? In some case, I think so. It will be easy to agree with somebody else than give an another opinion. Since you have to give a strong support of your own idea and convince others negative feedback always considered an active of brave. However, sometimes, it is better to compromise the work than totally reject .（however后面是论述的重点，而下文明显对这个观点论述不够多。而且这里刚说了折衷更好，底下怎么紧接着论述negative feedback的好处了？而且接连说了两段……）

First of all, giving an negative feedback is good for the perfect of the work. Because the more flaws you find before the work is finally completed, the better the work will be. In another words, negative will help the process of the development of one work. For example, before every software of Microsoft came into the market, they will put the Beta version online, and ask the feed back from the users, then, if the user are all giving the positively feedback, then they will not give any improvement of the software. And that is a bad thing for the programmers and the company.（例子不能这么用。如果大家都说好，那说明这个软件确实不错啊，为什么对程序设计员和公司反而不好呢？你可以说微软把软件的测试版放到网上让大家挑毛病，挑完以后对软件进行改进再投放到市场上。如果大家不挑毛病，软件就不能改进了。）

Moreover, a negative feedback from you means that you were really thinking about the problems or the idea. It may not means to much  the comment itself, however, thinking critically means your were really cares about that, and you will make efforts to make it better. For instance, my professor Mr.Li, he will highly speak the students  who dare to question about his points of view, maybe the questions which the student came up with is not so right or there still a better solution of it, however, the attitude of the student about learning is worth to praise, because he was not just listening to what the professor has said but think deeply about it.  
（例子到底是要表扬教授还是要表扬学生？看不出来。而且论述的时候不要用第二人称。而且，这个例子貌似只是对前一句论述的再次重复……）
However, sometimes, compare with give the negative feedback, To settle by concessions is a better idea. Not an idea has its own reason,  sometime when the divarication came out, one should the think the reason from other's angle,not stick on the opinion made by yourself. Even if the work of other was wrong, there still better solutions than give the negative feedback directly. Sometimes the moral of the group is much more important. Like me, when I was doing an experiment with my totur, I made an mistake during the procesure, which made the result totally reversed, however, my tutor did not criticize me imidietaly but wait until I finished the experiment. She could ,but she did not. After that, she told me, without seeing the result by my own eyes I will not 100 percent sure about how could that happened. It is a better idea to convince other people to agree his/her opinion firstly and then give a better makeup.
（我喜欢这个例子。但是你这样的表述看不出tutor采取了折衷的方式。你可以说tutor发现你的错误后马上指出来，但是你不认为你错了，于是tutor没有强硬的让你非改过来，而是采取了折衷的方式，让你继续做下去，于是结果出来后你自己心服口服。）
为啥接连说了两段negative feedback的好处之后，你就突然说要concession呢？不狠狠的批评一下negative feedback的坏处，偶们为什么要放弃negative feedback呢？而且如果你同意的是compromise，你就要多多的论述它啊！
In sum,  it is brave to give an negative feedback to respond the work of another person since the courage and the sprite of the critiriszm, however, sometimes, we should take a better way to give the advice to make the work perfect.
（无论是brave,还是courage， sprit，你都没有论述啊，怎么在总结中突然就出来了？而且，a better way是什么呢？）
阿拉喜欢你这种一段论述一个例子的方式，但是例子一定要跟论述紧密的扯上关系，不然例子堆在那里发挥不出作用来。拼写错误很多呀，时态也经常有点毛病。哎，本来偶详细的给你改了，可惜啊，就那么没了，只好简略的这么说一说了。有意见再交流啊！
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二战英雄UID: 2686845

5# 小笨蚂蚁
谢谢楼上的，你的帖子我打不开，一点就是“对不起，您无权编辑他人发表的帖子，请返回。”
什么时候有时间帮忙指出一下我的语法和句型错误，因为我自己发现不了……

xueyiUID: 2647060

TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
WORDS: 488
TIME: 00:41:22
DATE: 2009-8-24 11:17:08

It can not guarantee that a professor who take part in professions work while spending time in the academic field will provide a better instruction to college students, though it may be helpful to work outside the acdemic world. The best way to improve the quality of instruction in the college, however, is to ensure that faculty are experienced,patient and enthusiastic when a student are confused.

A working professor is benefical for students to some extent. By getting a job in professions relevant to the courses they teach, faculty certainly can gain some practical experience, knowing both which kind of knowledge are most important when students are working and which courses students should take in order to work in a particular field. Also, professors could help introduce their students to employers if they are admired for their great work, thus give students a hand when they are hunting jobs. On the other hand, if professors are always exposed to the only acdemic world, they would not know what are happening in today's rapdily-changing world, neither they would not know whether their teaching content are out of date, and then caused a negative effect to their students for they are not given the latest information.

However, a good-qualatied instruction are not guaranteed by taking a job in the pratical world. Time and energy are both limited, if professor spent too much time on working, they would not pay enough attention to their students. They may not care about what their students are needing, desiring and dreaming of. Thinking about their job, professors may got a hasty conlusion about what courses a student should take, yet those courses may be useless to the student's interest or particular need. Those not well-considered instruction would be really harmful to a young man who do not really know what future will be. What's more, a bad intruction may totally ruin a student's faith to the faculty, and then the student would just do what he preferred, which might have potential and succesive drastic influences.

So, in order to improve the instruction's quality, faculty are required to be familiar with students' needs, thought and dreams, as well as be enthusiastic and patient. Knowing what college students are needing, thinking and dreaming of, combining with adults' experiences,instructions given by faculty would be really insightful and helpful, and could be more easily accepted and welcomed by students. Being enthusiastic and patient, faculty could inquire a student who is seeking instruction carefully, and then analyze the sitution togeter with the student. As a result, the instruction given would certainly have a better quality. Other qualities, such as responsibilty would help produce a good instruction, too.

In sum, what a good instruction need is personal qualities such as patience, enthusiasm, and responsibility of a faculty, not just acdemic knowledge and practical experience. And, faculty must be trained in a specific way to ensure a qualified instruction.

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有点像是在讲条件，⊙﹏⊙b汗