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Perhaps you have ever been fed up with a tedium lecture of an outdated teacher in schoolroom during high school time. Or you maybe have ever consumed much energy on a large number of so-called mutual activities and team games in an English training class. However, it is probably the ever experience that you are pleasantly surprised and profoundly arrested by a seasoned teacher with his substantial lecture and stimulating communications of students. The combination of these two settings will rescue us from the insipid study and empty verbiage.

It is necessary of the major talking and guidance of a teacher in a class. Teachers usually take much time to prepare their lectures with distinct themes involving in every kinds of relative knowledge before class, although some of them are presented with a tedium tune or a dull style. It is by these subjects that students learn what they actually demanded to be armed for the future. Therefore, without a teacher' centered lecture, students acquire nothing but single excitement after a class finished. Additionally, a wonderful lecture will be certainly more helpful for abstracting students.

Nevertheless, if teachers involve all of the talking without any response in a classroom, they will make the students departure from the lectures and not realize if they grasp the knowledge provided. If students state their own opinions diversified in a class, it will stimulate their interest in studying and time quickly skip. And if there is completely no students' feedback of applause or opposite, teachers will go straight his lecture, and then students feel drowsy without their own participation. Therefore, the student' voice is another magic medicine to a tedium course.

A perfect class requires wonderful lectures from teachers and also enthusiastic response from his listeners. Both of these two sides are of equally significance for a course.


[ 本帖最后由 mercy123 于 2007-8-1 20:15 编辑 ]

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Perhaps you have ever been fed up with a tedium(tedious) lecture of an outdated teacher in schoolroom during high school time. Or you maybe have ever consumed much energy on a large number of so-called mutual activities and team games in an English training class. However, it is probably the ever experience that you are pleasantly surprised and profoundly arrested by a seasoned teacher with his substantial lecture and stimulating communications of students. The combination of these two settings will rescue us from the insipid study and empty verbiage.(第一段观点应该更明确一点会更好)

(On the one hand)It is necessary of the major talking and guidance of a teacher in a class(这句话有点问题,个人觉得应该改成.XXX is necessary,or it is necessary for sb to do sth.). Teachers usually take much time to prepare their lectures with distinct themes involving in every kinds of relative knowledge before class, although some of them are presented with a tedium(tedious/boring) tune or a dull style. It is by these subjects that students learn what they actually demanded(demand) to be armed for the future(armed .这个用法请确认). Therefore, without a teacher'(s) centered lecture, students acquire nothing but single excitement after a class finished. Additionally, a wonderful lecture will be certainly more helpful for abstracting students.

Nevertheless, if teachers involve all of the talking without any response in a classroom, they will make the students departure from the lectures and not realize if they grasp the knowledge provided. If students state their own opinions diversified(ly) in a class, it will stimulate their interest(s) in studying and time quickly skip(s)(time quickly skips其实与主题无关可以不要). And if there is completely no students' feedback of applause or opposite, teachers will go straight his lecture, and then students feel drowsy without their own participation. Therefore, the student' voice is another magic medicine to a tedium course.

A perfect class requires wonderful lectures from teachers and also enthusiastic response from his listeners. Both of these two sides are of equally(equal) significance for a course.

comments:
1.先说优点,词汇使用不错,一些我都不怎么认识:(,结构安排也比较合理
2.缺点:感觉对题目理解有一定的偏差,你的观点是要老师全部讲与学生参与结合,其实这就是同意第二个观点,学生也应该do some of the talk, 这个导致第二段有点离题了,题目中讲的并没有说不让老师lecture..
3.结尾段可以再写好的点.

建议还是尽量少见折中型的文章,以上仅是个人建议,有问题欢迎交流,共同进步:)