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dudujasperUID: 2180289

ISSUE153:
"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

   
OUTLINE:
观点：对所学的一切都持怀疑的态度和仅仅强调怀疑是不可行的。
论证段：P1  肯定：从社会进步的角度肯定怀疑的重要（新理论的出现）
            P2  否定：仅仅强调怀疑是会导致极端的出现
                           对所有都知识都怀疑浪费时间和精力
                           强调怀疑只是进步的过程中的一个环节（接受/怀疑/发展）
            P3  综合：提出自主的学习能形成一个合理的怀疑
                           深入的理解有利于怀疑的开展
                           自主的学习促进适当的怀疑，帮助学生提高学习的热情和拓展创造性
（注P1，P2，P3在这里为意群段，不是自然段）
字数：511


   Although skepticism is a basic element in progression, to accentuate skepticism to students only is not a viable way. Nor will the students have progressed if they question whatever they were taught. Thus, acctive learning is the proper way to sovle this problem.

   Starting from the premise that the contemporary knowledge, limited by the level of human’s technology primarily, is relatively correct. The skepticism is a prerequisite for the society’s progression. Due to a limit understanding about the nature and the world, the concepts and theories, proposed by the previous scientists, are incomplete or even wrong. A theory, for example, prevalent in the fifteenth centry, is that earth is the nucleus of the universe. The younger generations or other scholars who have the skepticism about these defective theories will dedicate their energy completely to promoting or overthrowing them. As the example before, a new theoy-sun is the core of the univese-is a strong substitue for the old one. Thus, a new ideology will be established, and then this course repeats itself. As a result, the society is progressing in this repeating cycle. From this vision, skepticism should be accentuated to students.

    However, it is an extremeness to accentuate the skeptisicm alone to the students. A futile effort on questioning all the knowledge, which they have been taught, can cause a waste of their time and energy. It is unworthy to spend a whole night on thingking the correctness about a fact that one hour contains sixty minutes. Moreover, in the process of learning, the precondition on interpreting their doubts is the profpund comprehension. To prove the skeptisism, one should be accept and assimilate the previous knowledge. Because the process of progression is a circle of acceptance, skepticism and development. Therefore, to doubt everything will induce a vacuity on knowledge.

    To aviod this extremeness, active learning should be empasized. To learn the knowledge actively rather than to accept it passively, more interests will be intrigued. Along with the deeper understanding about the knowledge and theories, students will have a criterion on skeptisicm. To solve a mathematic problem, for example, students usaually do a comprehensive thinking. Then they can propose their question about this problem. An interpretation on this problem will be selected. Once they find another better way, the previous interpretation will be substituted. All this prosess is based on the activeness of the students.

    Furthermore, such kind of activeness can lead a proper skepticism which can nourish a source of creativities and passions of students. To prove the doubts about the problems, students will put their energy completely to adopt some new methods, means and other approaches. Almost everyone has a expirence on spending several days to think about a problem. The basic motive on this behavior, which inpires students' passions, is the desire to seek a solution on the problem. This kind of desire is the activeness.

    A certain skepticism to whatever is an extreme opinion which is far beyond the norm. Thereby a proper skepticism formed in the course of active learning is an effctive compensation about this view.

[ 本帖最后由 dudujasper 于 2006-2-16 03:01 编辑 ]

dzhb644UID: 2127664

ISSUE153 无敌拍场 欢迎来拍拍哦

ISSUE153:
"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

   
OUTLINE:
观点：对所学的一切都持怀疑的态度和仅仅强调怀疑是不可行的。
论证段：P1 肯定：从社会进步的角度肯定怀疑的重要（新理论的出现）
       P2 否定：仅仅强调怀疑是会导致极端的出现
                对所有都知识都怀疑浪费时间和精力
                强调怀疑只是进步的过程中的一个环节（接受/怀疑/发展）
      P3  综合：提出自主的学习能形成一个合理的怀疑
                深入的理解有利于怀疑的开展
               自主的学习促进适当的怀疑，帮助学生提高学习的热情和拓展创造性
（注P1，P2，P3在这里为意群段，不是自然段）
字数：511


[这里最好顶格写，正规的格式会给考官留下好印象] Although skepticism is a basic element in progression, to accentuate skepticism to students only[把only放在前面看起来通顺一些] is not a viable way. Nor[neither….. nor……单独一个nor感觉怪怪的] will the students have progressed if they question whatever they were taught. Thus, acctive[笔误active] learning is the proper way to sovle[solve] this problem. [最后一句感觉有点不连贯，thus后边是上句的结果，而这里提出active learning 这个新的概念，感觉有点突然]

Starting from the premise that the contemporary knowledge, limited by the level of human’s technology primarily, is relatively correct. The skepticism is a prerequisite for the society’s progression. Due to a limit understanding about the nature and the world, the concepts and theories, proposed by the previous scientists, are incomplete or even wrong. A theory, for example, prevalent in the fifteenth centry[sentury], is that earth is the nucleus[center 地心说:geocentricism] of the universe. The younger generations or other scholars who have[had] the skepticism about these defective theories will [would]dedicate their energy completely to promoting or overthrowing them. As the example before, a new theoy[theory]-sun is the core of the univese[universe]-is a strong substitue[substitute] for the old one. Thus, a new ideology will be established, and then this course repeats itself. As a result, the society is progressing in this repeating cycle. From this vision, skepticism should be accentuated to students.

However, it is an extremeness to accentuate the skeptisicm [skepticism] alone to the students. A futile effort on questioning all the knowledge, which they have been taught, can cause a waste of their time and energy. It is unworthy to spend a whole night on [in]thingking the correctness about a fact that[whether]one hour contains sixty minutes.[这个例子有点不切实际,不太好,只要说明过分的质疑是没有用的就可以了] Moreover, in the process of learning, the precondition on interpreting their doubts is the profpund [profound]comprehension. To prove the skeptisism [skepticism], one should be[删去] accept and assimilate the previous knowledge. Because the process of progression is a circle of acceptance, skepticism and development. [如果这个circle包括development,上面的例子最好也要提到]Therefore, to doubt everything will induce a vacuity on knowledge.

To aviod [avoid] this extremeness, active learning should be empasized [emphasized]. To learn the knowledge actively rather than to accept it passively, more interests will be intrigued. Along with the deeper understanding about the knowledge and theories, students will have a criterion on skeptisicm [skepticism]. To solve a mathematic problem, for example, students usaually [usually] do a comprehensive thinking. Then they can propose their question[questions] about this problem. An interpretation on this problem will be selected. Once they find another better way, the previous interpretation will be substituted. All this prosess [process] is based on the activeness of the students.[passive acceptance and active acceptance的具体体现是什么,以及与 skepticism 之间的关系要说明才好]

Furthermore, such kind of activeness can lead[加上to] a proper skepticism which can nourish a source of creativities and passions of students. To prove the doubts about the problems, students will put their energy completely to adopt some new methods, means and other approaches. Almost everyone has a[an] expirence[experience] on spending several days to think [spend time in doing sth]about a problem. The basic motive on this behavior, which inpires[inspires] students' passions, is the desire to seek a solution on the problem. This kind of desire is the activeness.[总是感觉在打擦边球,与skepticism若即若离的,例子最好紧紧扣住主题,要是主要说明activeness的化,就一定要说明它与skepticism 之间的关系]

A certain skepticism to whatever is an extreme opinion which is far beyond the norm. Thereby a proper skepticism formed in the course of active learning is an effctive[effective] compensation about this view.



Dudujesper 的这篇文章一定是没有放在word里纠错就发了吧,呵呵
你的提纲写的挺好,可是到文中就没有扣的很紧,逻辑是关键,加油啊
dzhb644
2006-2-19

dudujasperUID: 2180289

5555就是啊，怎么会错那么多~
一点就点到我的缺点了，每次想说的东西都表达不出来的感觉55
谢谢你~

cooldog811UID: 2150882

ISSUE153:
"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

   
OUTLINE:
观点：对所学的一切都持怀疑的态度和仅仅强调怀疑是不可行的。
论证段：P1  肯定：从社会进步的角度肯定怀疑的重要（新理论的出现）
            P2  否定：仅仅强调怀疑是会导致极端的出现
                           对所有都知识都怀疑浪费时间和精力
                           强调怀疑只是进步的过程中的一个环节（接受/怀疑/发展）
            P3  综合：提出自主的学习能形成一个合理的怀疑
                           深入的理解有利于怀疑的开展
                           自主的学习促进适当的怀疑，帮助学生提高学习的热情和拓展创造性
（注P1，P2，P3在这里为意群段，不是自然段）
字数：511


   Although skepticism is a basic element in progression, to accentuate(用动名词)skepticism to students only(这个词应该放句首吧) is not a viable way. Nor will the students have progressed if they question whatever they were taught. Thus, acctive learning is the proper way to sovle this problem. (开头简练,而且结合了提纲,不错)

   Starting from the premise that the contemporary knowledge, limited by the level of human’s technology primarily, is relatively correct.(这句话好像有点问题,前提怎么能是现在的知识都正确呢?) The skepticism is a prerequisite for the society’s progression. Due to a limit understanding about the nature and the world, the concepts and theories, proposed by the previous scientists, are incomplete or even wrong. A theory, for example, prevalent in the fifteenth centry, is that earth is the nucleus(center) of the universe. The younger generations or other scholars who have the skepticism about these defective theories will(时态) dedicate their energy completely to promoting or overthrowing them. As the example before, a new theoy-sun is the core of the univese-is a strong substitue for the old one. Thus, a new ideology will(时态不对吧) be established, and then this course repeats itself. As a result, the society is progressing in this repeating cycle. From this vision, skepticism should be accentuated to students.(论证有点混乱,不过基本上表达了意思,注意中心句最好要明确的表达本段的意思)

    However, it is an extremeness to accentuate the skeptisicm alone to the students. A futile effort on questioning all the knowledge, which they have been taught, can cause a waste of their time and energy.(这个观点不错,值得学习) It is unworthy to spend a whole night on thingking the correctness about a fact that one hour contains sixty minutes.(呵呵,这个有点过了) Moreover, in the process of learning, the precondition on interpreting their doubts is the profpund comprehension. To prove the skeptisism, one should be accept and assimilate the previous knowledge. Because the process of progression is a circle of acceptance, skepticism and development. Therefore, to doubt everything will induce a vacuity on knowledge.(说理说得还不错:),讲了怀疑的坏处,不过好像观点有点散)

    To aviod this extremeness, active learning should be empasized. To learn the knowledge actively rather than to accept it passively, more interests will be intrigued. Along with the deeper understanding about the knowledge and theories, students will have a criterion on skeptisicm. To solve a mathematic problem, for example, students usaually do a comprehensive thinking. Then they can propose their question about this problem. An interpretation on this problem will be selected. Once they find another better way, the previous interpretation will be substituted. All this prosess is based on the activeness of the students.(观点比较新颖,说理也比较清晰,比较好的一段,如果跟skepticism联系更紧就好了)

    Furthermore, such kind of activeness can lead a proper skepticism which can nourish a source of creativities and passions of students. To prove the doubts about the problems, students will put their energy completely to adopt some new methods, means and other approaches. Almost everyone has a expirence on spending several days to think about a problem. The basic motive on this behavior, which inpires students' passions, is the desire to seek a solution on the problem. This kind of desire is the activeness.(还是跟怀疑联系不紧)

    A certain skepticism to whatever is an extreme opinion which is far beyond the norm. Thereby a proper skepticism formed in the course of active learning is an effctive compensation about this view.(结尾简练,值得学习)

提纲的结构不错,层次比较清楚,所以文章的论证层次没什么问题,就是注意一下每一段都要扣题,中心突出.
语言还不错,不过看得出来有一些刻意使用的难句子用的不太恰当:)刚开始都这样,还不如换成简单句.
拼写错误不少,我也有这毛病,呵呵
水平有限,只能说这么多了,共同提高吧

dudujasperUID: 2180289

呵呵，非常谢谢你的修改哦~现在已经改进了不少了~这个是好久以前的作业了
现在自己看的都恶心哈哈~

.(这句话好像有点问题,前提怎么能是现在的知识都正确呢?) --- relatively correct是相对的正确，不是都正确呵呵~
to accentuate(用动名词)----这里想强调为了什么的意思，所以用TO开的头
only(这个词应该放句首吧)----楼主貌似喜欢把它放句首，俺习惯放句尾鸟~
~诶~俺现在还是觉得自己的句子看的不爽，现在看这篇文章真的好烂~

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