issue144 等 renliyun 的第五次作业

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Issue "In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any woman or man as a hero. The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished."
不同意
(1)        媒体确实在很大程度上影响着大众对一个人的影响。
(2)        虽然公众人物的某些缺点确实会被放大，甚至存在谣言，但是媒体不一定会令一个人名声扫地
(3)         媒体的存在反而会在某种程度上影响人们的行为使得涌现出越来越多的英雄。

Nowadays our society is being greatly influenced by the intensive media coverage ,the publics get myriad informations and news even anecdotes of numerous celebrities who are constantly in the public eyes, it is natural that their flaws and failures are more conspicuous than any others’. However ,these do not necessarily lead to the conclusion that heroes in public eyes who can exemplify in our society would never exist owning to the traits of public media.

The influence of the intensively developed media coverage which is the most popular among public is manipulating the images of people. Blessed by the worldwide power of mass media ,people become know more about the world outside their own confined dome, more people are getting familiar with them ,but the way they  get all the information about these people is beyond their own eyes and ears ,that is their judgment of a person is mainly governed by the evaluation of this people from the media. It is doubtless that the degree that the “media” criticize or approve people  would decide their images in the public eyes.  Thieves  in their  adolescences  may have special reasons for the misdeeds ,they may be  orphans who are too hungry to sustain their life. However, public would show mercy to them if the reports about them emphasis their poor life ,but distain them when their wrongdoings  were repeated.


However,the influence of mass media tend to be so scrutinized that even small fallacy are 放大，the great  positive power of mass media  undeniably contribute a lot to the emerge of numerous heroes in our society .Although the power of the mass media especially those negative facets are fatal for the fame and life of people ,they may even lose their life let alone become heros ,many film stars were dead of reports that root from the mass media in the world even presidents or the leaders of some countries, the worldwide influence of mass media are more likely to set up examples of heroes to the public in the society , we may neglect the greatness of those athletes who won our country great fames, with the help of the mass media their prominence become known by the increased public.We may ignore the feat of common engineers in the construction of our country, by virtue of the media their contribution would remembered by the nation.


Moreover, the intensive coverage of public media would to some extent propel the appearance of heroes in our society. The praise of achievements and feats of our social heroes would be the great drive of the nation to follow their ways of behavior.The public endorsement of volunteers who endeavored to the construction in those  undeveloped regions would provoke more people to concern and contribute to the development of these area.The positive influence of mass media would eventually be the go and energy of the growth of social heroes and more and more people would be examine themselves to keep the pace of the public trends that lead by the mass media.University students may put effort in study for the encourage of the scientists approved by the public in the newspapers and they may finally become the main force in their study field as heroes.

In sum, the worldwide influence of intensive media coverage may be too scrutinized with the flaws and failures of people and even sometimes lethal ,but it is incontrovertible that mass media would retain the reputations and fames of people to act as the drive of the whole society to propel people to contribute more to the society and finally become the heroes of the nation.





Issue144: "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value." *a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
不同意
(1)        艺术家对社会的贡献使不可小视的
(2)        批评家使艺术家闻名于天下，并且为世人提供了了解艺术家的机会。
(3)        批评家也对艺术的发展和进步起了推进作用，实现了文化的多样性和百家争鸣的局面


This statement asserted that it is artists ,but not art critics ,that provide our society long-last value. However, I would like to mention the great meaning and contributions that is granted by both the critics and artists. They are all the power of the magnificent progresses of our cultures and arts which finally lead to the further development of our society.


First of all ,it is undeniable that artists who devoted their gifts to their own feilds are the main propel of the prosperity of the culture and art in our society. As elite of our society ,their wit and talent always have immense influences in the development of the society ,including the social trends and ideology.The best-sellers in this year would become the concentrated topic and stimulate heated discussion of the nation.The opinions and ideas expressed by the authors would give great impact on the thinking pattern of people. In history, many artists take the advantages of their works to reflect the current society, the clan ,momentous movement and their own believes.These works not only have great value in their times but also grant us myriad opptunities to gain an insight of the past.


However, critics who possessed more appreciation abilities which are distinctive from anyone else to evaluate the value of those great works attributed a further and deeper understand of the contribution of artists. Common people may lack the capabilities to give full understand of art owning to the different education background. They are probable to just recognize the superficial meaning of great works but neglect those deeper meanings expressed by the artists. A painting from Picasso seems to be a piece of doodle and meaningless ,however, it is critics that can tell us the profound meaning of the painting and discern the passion and feeling of him. Without art critics ,artists would feel like lose the understanding from others and their works may stand less chance to last in history ,let alone appreciated by their descendants. Critics who provide the society more opportunities to understand the greatness of artists by virtue of their  distinctive talent and special appreciation skills contribute most to the better understanding and respect for the artists from the society.


Moreover,not only critics granted us more chances to discern the true value of a work but they also propel the further and deeper development of art by maintaining the diversity of art and cultures. The evaluations of critics towards different works of art may contain their own criteria of the valuable works ,their ideology and even their education background,thus their inclination of art works would be different from each other. It is their different preferences that maintained the diverse patterns of art and culture. Imaging a world without critics ,the special traits of some art which might be the main composite of our culture may be ignored and finally be disappeared from our culture.The painting  genres  Impression in the Europe would never be formed without the different evaluation of art critics at that time. It is controversies from different art critics that spotlight the distinguishing art流派-Impression.
  

To sum up ,it is undeniable that art criticts and artists are equally important in the development of art and culture.
Critics are endowed with great talent of art apparciation abilities which are the main approach for the better and deeper understanding of the inside meaning of art work.And it is their distinctive views that push the formation of the diversity of the art and culture in our society.They can give great impact to the long-lasting development of art as artists do.

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Argument 145
(1)        所收集的数据并不一定具有可靠性，也并不能以局限于部分人的调查结果来下普遍性的结论
(2)        由于夜间呼吸不畅而引起睡眠质量下降从而引起锻炼减少的分析，并不具有合理性
(3)        所有打呼噜的人都应该比正常人少吃多锻炼的建议不具有合理性。


The argument asserted that people who snore stand more chances to get fat than those who do not. In order to support the conclusion the new study collect some data and provide the analysis that those who snore have the inclination to eat more but exercise less owning to the interruptions in sleeping caused by snoring . the argument flawed in several critical respects.


First ,the author try to quote some recently collected  data to support the argument . However, the reliability of these data is failed to be demonstrated and there is no suggestion can be discerned of a correlation between snoring and weight gain.Moreover the data that provided might be less representative of the overall population. There may be other reasons or habits that affect their body weight during the research time.It is too assertive to draw the firm conclusion that snoring can finally lead to the gaining of weight basing on such unreliable study.


Although snoring at night would cause the frequent sleeping stop as sleeping apnea, it is to assertive to adequately draw the conclusion that sleeping apnea would cause the gaining of weight among the general population. First , there is no clear warrant to show that snoring at night would surely cause the sleeping apnea frequently, thus the conclusion that it is sleep apnea drive the snorers to gain weight. Second , many other traits rooting from snoring would be the probable reasons to affect the increasing weight of snorers but not necessarily the sleeping apnea. Without the steadfast back-up of the relationship between the frequent sleeping stop and weight gain ,I would not be convinced by the arguer that snores should do more exercise but less food.


Assuming that sleeping apnea would be the reason that snores would gain weight ,it is still unwarranted to show that the snores should exercise more but eat less. The given reason by the arguer that snores are too tired in the daytime to do exercise can not convince me to support the final suggestion , lackness of exercise would have many other reasons as the snores have no spare time to do exercises owning to their work .Moreover ,it is possible that laking exercise is because of the bad habit of a person but not necessarily a problem of snoring or sleep apnea . To make the argument  more  convcing necessary warrants of the correlation between the sleeping apnea and the lackness of exercises.


In sum ,the argument that the snorers should exercise more but eat less is failed to be proved as a reasonable one. To lend credibility to this advice the speaker should line out more evidence that the recent collect data could reflect the general people and the specific relationship between the sleeping apnea and weight gaining.

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issue 151（传媒类）；"High-speed electronic communications media, such as electronic mail and television, tend to prevent meaningful and thoughtful communication."
(1)        高速的电子通讯媒介缩短了人们之间的空间距离。使得人与人之间的交流更加密切而不受时间和空间的限制。（people can communicate with others dispite the confine of time and space,we can talk although we are in different places even different country,we can change our mind no matter how busy we are）
(2)        高速的电子通讯媒介使人们能够更多更有意义的信息，可以在极大程度上提高人们的思维能力和判断力从而促进有益的交流和沟通。(With the help of the high-speed electronic communication can provide people with a great amount of information and news to help people get to knoe more about the world and to propel their communication with others more meaningful and thoughtful)
(3)        高速的电子通讯媒介可以使人们有机会与更多的交流和沟通从而使沟通变的更有意义(many friends even never know how they look like eavh other but the electronic communication grant them myriad chances to communicate with each other,thus people could get more communication and their horizon will become widen )



issue 218（艺术类）；艺术作品要有价值，无论是电影、文学、雕塑还是歌曲，都必须让大多数人能够理解。
（1）        艺术作为表达人们思想情感的代表应该让更多人理解
（2）        但并不是所有的艺术都必须人大多数人理解，因为人们的对艺术价值的理解是不同的。(to understand the works of Picasso by the majority of people might be difficult owning to the different education background of people ,But  how can you assert that his work is something that lack the value of art
（3）        也并不是所有的人都能够理解艺术的价值，因为艺术是具有创造性的，有时候是超出人们所能理解的范围的。(the noble painting of Van Gogh :sunflower seems to be too commen to possess any art value in the eyes of some people ,however it is distinctive and the reflection of the emotion of artists )

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argument 200：
（1）        牙医所提供的数据不一定具有完全性和普遍性
（2）        在接受治疗时昏倒并不一定是由于痛楚导致的，其他因素也可能导致昏厥，比如，个人对牙病的敏感
（3）        在男性对疼痛的敏感和广告定位于男性患者之间没有明确的关系。




argument131：。
（1）        tria岛鱼类数量下降的原因很有可能是多种因素综合作用的结果，并不单纯是过度扑捞的原因
（2）        tria岛和omni岛情况可能有很多不同而不具有可比性
（3）        采用omni岛的措施并不能保证trai岛鱼类减少的状况



argument 174：
（1）        由学生会所组织的调查不一定具有说服力，也并不能代表真实的情况
（2）        单独的调查并不具有普遍性也不能说明大多数校友希望学校成
（3）        并没有明确的证据证明男女混校会使学生的品行下降或是失去校友的资助

[ 本帖最后由 renliyun 于 2006-7-19 21:34 编辑 ]

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Issue "In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any woman or man as a hero. The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished."
不同意
(1)        媒体确实在很大程度上影响着大众对一个人的影响。
(2)        虽然公众人物的某些缺点确实会被放大，甚至存在谣言，但是媒体不一定会令一个人名声扫地
(3)         媒体的存在反而会在某种程度上影响人们的行为使得涌现出越来越多的英雄。

Nowadays our society is (being不要) greatly influenced by the intensive media coverage ,the publics get myriad informations and news even anecdotes of numerous celebrities who are constantly in the public eyes, it is natural that their flaws and failures are more conspicuous than any others’. However ,these do not necessarily lead to the conclusion that heroes in public eyes who can exemplify in our society would never exist owning to the traits of public media.

The influence of the intensively developed media coverage which is the most popular（？the most popular influence?不如把这个修饰放前面吧，顺些，做从句的话后面是不是该再加个one？） among public is manipulating the images of people. Blessed by the worldwide power of mass media ,people become （不能直接接动词know，改为分词） more about the world outside their own （confined dome这个修辞有意思）, more people are getting familiar with them ,but the way they  get all the information about these people is beyond their own eyes and ears ,（that is在这里是什么意思？不要吧） their judgment of a person is mainly governed by the evaluation of this people from the media. It is doubtless that the degree that the “media” criticize or approve people  would decide their images in the public eyes.  Thieves  in their  adolescences  may have special reasons for the misdeeds ,they may be  orphans who are too hungry to sustain their life. However, public would show mercy to them if the reports about them emphasis their poor life ,but distain them when their wrongdoings  were repeated.


However,the influence of mass media tend to be so scrutinized that even small fallacy are 放大（我用的maximize，不知道恰当不？），the great  positive power of mass media  undeniably contribute a lot to the emerge of numerous heroes in our society .Although the power of the mass media especially those negative facets are fatal for the fame and life of people ,they may even lose their life （let alone become heros不是很懂啊，而且一个句子里不能有2个原形动词啊，要用分词连接或者连词） ,many film stars were dead of reports that root from the mass media in the world even presidents or the leaders of some countries, the worldwide influence of mass media are more likely to set up examples of heroes to the public in the society , we may neglect the greatness of those athletes who won our country great fames, with the help of the mass media their prominence become known by the increased public.We may ignore the feat of common engineers in the construction of our country, by virtue of the media their contribution would remembered by the nation. （这段看起来是在说虽然公众人物的某些缺点确实会被放大，甚至存在谣言，媒体却帮助大众记住那些英雄，建议在加一句话说明对其名声不会有影响，因为你提纲是这样写的，也会扣题更紧些）


Moreover, the intensive coverage of public media would to some extent propel（推进？驱使的意思吗？这里是想表达这个意思吗？连起来不通啊） the appearance of heroes in our society. The praise of achievements and feats of our social heroes would be the great drive of the nation to follow their ways of behavior.The public endorsement of volunteers who endeavored to the construction in those  undeveloped regions would provoke more people to concern and contribute to the development of these area.The positive influence of mass media would eventually be the go and energy of the growth of social heroes and more and more people would be examine themselves to keep the pace of the public trends that lead by the mass media.University students may put effort in study for the encourage of the scientists approved by the public in the newspapers and they may finally become the main force in their study field as heroes.

In sum, the worldwide influence of intensive media coverage may be too scrutinized with the flaws and failures of people and even sometimes lethal ,but it is incontrovertible that mass media would retain the reputations and fames of people to act as the drive of the whole society to propel people to contribute more to the society and finally become the heroes of the nation.

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Issue144: "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value." *a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
不同意
(1)        艺术家对社会的贡献使不可小视的
(2)        批评家使艺术家闻名于天下，并且为世人提供了了解艺术家的机会。
(3)        批评家也对艺术的发展和进步起了推进作用，实现了文化的多样性和百家争鸣的局面
看提纲没有谈到lasting value啊，我觉得这是个关键词，到底是谁给社会留下了lasting value是我们应该讨论的东西吧？而不仅仅是重要性和作用。

This statement asserted that it is artists ,but not art critics ,(that不要) provide our society long-last(ed) value. However, I would like to mention the great meaning and contributions that is granted by both the critics and artists. They are all the power of the magnificent progresses of our cultures and arts （which改为that） finally lead to the further development of our society.


First of all ,it is undeniable that artists who devoted their gifts to their own feilds（fields） are the main propel of the prosperity of the culture and art in our society. As elite of our society, their wit and talent always have immense influences in the development of the society, including the social trends and ideology. The best-sellers(best sellers) in this year would become the concentrated topic and stimulate heated discussion of the nation. The opinions and ideas expressed by the authors would give great impact on the thinking pattern of people. In history, many artists take the advantages of their works to reflect the current society, the clan, momentous movement and their own believes. These works not only have great value in their times but also grant us myriad opptunities (opportunities) to gain an insight of the past.


However, critics who possessed more appreciation abilities which are distinctive from anyone else to evaluate the value of those great works attributed a further and deeper understand of the contribution of artists. Common people may lack the capabilities to give full understand of art owning to the different education background. They are probable to just recognize the superficial meaning of great works but neglect those deeper meanings expressed by the artists. A painting from Picasso seems to be a piece of doodle and meaningless, however, it is critics that can tell us the profound meaning of the painting and discern the passion and feeling of him. Without art critics, artists would feel like lose the understanding from others and their works may stand less chance to last in history, let alone appreciated by their descendants. Critics who provide the society more opportunities to understand the greatness of artists by virtue of their distinctive talent and special appreciation skills contribute most to the better understanding and respect for the artists from the society.


Moreover, not only critics granted us more chances to discern the true value of a work but they also propel the further and deeper development of art by maintaining the diversity of art and cultures. The evaluations of critics towards different works of art may contain their own criteria of the valuable works, their ideology and even their education background, thus their inclination of art works would be different from each other. It is their different preferences that maintained the diverse patterns of art and culture. Imaging a world without critics ,the special traits of some art which might be the main composite of our culture may be ignored and finally be disappeared from our culture. The painting  genres  Impression in the Europe would never be formed without the different evaluation of art critics at that time. It is controversies from different art critics that spotlight the distinguishing art流派(school)-Impression.
  

To sum up ,it is undeniable that art criticts (critics)and artists are equally important in the development of art and culture.
Critics are endowed with great talent of art apparciation (appreciation) abilities which are the main approach for the better and deeper understanding of the inside meaning of art work. And it is their distinctive views that push the formation of the diversity of the art and culture in our society. They can give great impact to the long-lasting development of art as artists do.
不错的文章！

[ 本帖最后由 ketchup 于 2006-7-28 16:52 编辑 ]

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argument 200：
这个argument其实有很多小错误，但是实际操作起来很棘手，不好一个一个的全写出来，个人觉得那些什么麻醉技术和职员对患者的敏感度提出的很唐突，没有根据。

argument131：
个人觉得2、3两点并成一点，因为是提纲，所以不是很清楚第2点具体是要说什么。

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The argument asserted that people who snore stand more chances to get fat than those who do not. In order to support the conclusion the new study collect some data and provide the analysis that those who snore have the inclination to eat more but exercise less（作者其实没有说打鼾的人有吃多的倾向啊，知识说他们有很累的现象） owning to the interruptions in sleeping caused by snoring . the argument flawed in several critical respects.


First ,the author try to quote some recently collected  data to support the argument . However, the reliability of these data （is 不要）failed to （be demonstrated不用被态吧） and there is no suggestion can be discerned of a correlation between snoring and weight gain.Moreover the data that provided might be less representative of the overall population. There may be other reasons or habits that affect their body weight during the research time.It is too assertive to draw the firm conclusion that snoring can finally lead to the gaining of weight basing on such unreliable study.


Although snoring at night would cause the frequent sleeping stop as sleeping apnea, it is to（too） assertive to adequately draw the conclusion that sleeping apnea would cause the gaining of weight among the general population. First , there is no clear warrant to show that snoring at night would surely cause the sleeping apnea frequently, （thus the conclusion that it is sleep apnea drive the snorers to gain weight这句话是不是没说完啊？只有主语部分）. Second , many other traits rooting from snoring would be the probable reasons to affect the increasing weight of snorers but not necessarily the sleeping apnea. Without the steadfast back-up of the relationship between the frequent sleeping stop and weight gain ,I would not be convinced by the arguer that snores should do more exercise but less food.


Assuming that sleeping apnea would be the reason that snores would gain weight ,it is still unwarranted to show that the snores should exercise more （but改为and） eat less. The given reason by the arguer that snores are too tired in the daytime to do exercise can not convince me to support the final suggestion , lackness of exercise would have many other reasons as the snores have no spare time to do exercises owning to their work .Moreover ,it is possible that laking exercise is because of the bad habit of a person but not necessarily a problem of snoring or sleep apnea . （To make the argument  more  convcing necessary warrants of the correlation between the sleeping apnea and the lackness of exercises.这句似乎没有谓语这样改看是不是你原来的意思啊：To make the argument  more  convcing，necessary warrants of the correlation between the sleeping apnea and the lackness of exercises are needed.）


In sum ,the argument that the snorers should exercise more but eat less is failed to be proved as a reasonable one. To lend credibility to this advice the speaker should line out more evidence that the recent collect data could reflect the general people and the specific relationship between the sleeping apnea and weight gaining.