argument67 Spring-第五次作业

林周孟UID: 2341714

    Argument 67 The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a newspaper serving the villages of Castorville and Polluxton.
    "Both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton have experienced sharp declines in the numbers of residents who pay property taxes. To save money and improve service, the two villages recently merged their once separate garbage collection departments into a single department located in Castorville, and the new department has reported few complaints about its service. Last year the library in Polluxton had 20 percent fewer users than during the previous year. It follows that we should now further economize and improve service, as we did with garbage collection, by closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville to serve both villages."

    Word:443   time:80mins  date:2007-11-24

    In this argument,the author suggest closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville to serve both villages in order to further economize and improve service.To support this suggestion,the author cites an example that the two villages recently merged their once separate garbage collection departments into a single department located in Castorville, and the new department has reported few complaints about its service.The author also points out that last year the library in Polluxton had 20 percent decline in the number of users than during the previous year.Through careful scrutiny,this argument flawed in several critical respects.

    In the first place,the author assume that combination of the two libraries will further economize and improve service,or that the residences will satisfy with the policy.However ,it is too hasty to draw such an assumption without providing any justifiable evidence.It is equally possible that Polluxton’s residents will have to walk a relatively longer way to the library in Castorville,which in turn perhaps not only wastes their valuable time but also increases the complaints of the service of the library in Castorville.Moreover,some of the workers in both libraries may have to lose their jobs due to the coalition,which might render other more serious problems in the societal level.

    In the second place,the argument lacks any evidence to substantiate that the fee for the service of the library will decrease due to the combination of both libraries.It is entirely possible that the fee for the service will increase for the sake that people of both villages have not other choices but to go to the exclusive library,which will also weaken the author’s suggestion.

    In the third place,the coalition of both libraries may not necessarily achieve the some goal as the combination of both garbage collection departments.As we know,the library and the garbage collection department are totally different things.It is entirely possible that the combination of the latter will accomplish more and more achievement,while the coalition of the former will fail to gain the prospective goal due to the difference of the respect consumers,nature of working,problems they faced,and other aspects.

    To sum up ,the argument is not convincing as it stands.To strength the suggestion,the author should provide evidence to illustrate that the combination of both libraries will do further economize and improve service.Besides ,the author should offer a statistic survey to show the general view of residences of both villages about the combination of the libraries.In addition ,I also need to know the similarity of the overall conditions of the two libraries and the two garbage collection departments in order to decide whether it is reasonable to imitate the experience of the mergence of both garbage collection departments.

    感觉逐渐写顺手了，但是字数却大大缩水，不解！！！

hongdanUID: 2228730

In this argument,the author suggest（suggests） closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville to serve both villages in order to further economize and improve service.To support this suggestion,the author cites an example that the two villages recently merged their once separate garbage collection departments into a single department located in Castorville, and the new department has reported few complaints about its service.The author also points out that last year the library in Polluxton had 20 percent decline in the number of users than during the previous year.Through careful scrutiny,this argument flawed in several critical respects.

    In the first place,the author assume(assumes) that combination of the two libraries will further economize and improve service,or that the residences (residents)will satisfy with the policy.However ,it is too hasty to draw such an assumption without providing any justifiable evidence.It is equally possible that Polluxton’s residents will have to walk a relatively longer way to the library in Castorville,which in turn perhaps not only wastes their valuable time but also increases the complaints of the service of the library in Castorville.Moreover,some of the workers in both libraries may have to lose their jobs due to the coalition,which might render other more serious problems in the societal level.

    In the second place,the argument lacks any evidence to substantiate that the fee for the service of the library will decrease due to the combination of both libraries.It is entirely possible that the fee for the service will increase for the sake that people of both villages have not other choices but to go to the exclusive library,which will also weaken the author’s suggestion.（这段没说清楚为什么费用会上升）

    In the third place,the coalition of both libraries may not necessarily achieve the some（same） goal as the combination of both garbage collection departments.As we know,the library and the garbage collection department are totally different things.It is entirely possible that the combination of the latter will accomplish more and more achievement,while the coalition of the former will fail to gain the prospective goal due to the difference of the respect consumers,nature of working,problems they faced,and other aspects.(感觉分析不够)

    To sum up ,the argument is not convincing as it stands.To strength the suggestion,the author should provide evidence to illustrate that the combination of both libraries will do further economize and improve service.Besides ,the author should offer a statistic survey to show the general view of residences of both villages about the combination of the libraries.In addition ,I also need to know the similarity of the overall conditions of the two libraries and the two garbage collection departments in order to decide whether it is reasonable to imitate the experience of the mergence of both garbage collection departments.

本文的结构很清晰，整体来说很不错。但本人感觉有的段落错误分析不足，而且感觉分析不具信服力。继续努力了。