IMPULSE作文小组----19811010316-第14,15次作业

19811010316UID: 2220703

第14次作业
Do you agree or disagree. The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone.

No matter what professions you engage in and how characteristics you possess, it is necessary for you to spend some time on relaxing yourself not only your mood but also your bodies. And there are clearly two ways to release pressure: enjoy yourself or spare your time with friends. some people believe that spending time alone relaxing is better than with other people, for me, join a group and spend leisure time with them is best way to relieve my pressure.

First of all, nature is great place for us to release my stress. However, if I go out alone and travel in a broad natural environment, I will be afraid of come across any bad guys and it reversely add my stress rather than release it. Government agency published a recent report and showed that the crime rate has increase by 50% during past one year. Moreover, it said that criminals are inclined to injure single persons. I am scared to encounter with bad persons and damaged by them; therefore, I prefer to have trips with friends in nature.

Secondly, even if I just cost my leisure time on my living city, lingering around some landscapes and buying my daily need commodities singly is bad thing for me because It is easy to involve in a traffic accident due to overcrowded city. When I walk through a street road, I need to look over the road in order to avoid to be knocked down by cars because there are full of cars in roads. However, it is not enough because I can't attend the traffic of all directions at the same time. On the contrary, if I am shopping or appreciate landscapes with several friends, the condition will be changed. We all concern about the traffic condition of different roads respectively and it is sure that will be safe when travel through roads all times.
  

The last but not the least, other than leisure time, I merely have time to communicate with our friends or family members. But talking or entertainment with them will be good approaches to relieve myself from working stress. The problems that I am confronted with in my working may have been experienced by my friends or family members. By communicating between us, I will obtain a best solution to these problems and then my stress will be gone. For example, last week, I was bored by my physics assignment for a whole week until the weekend. The reason is that I didn't know how to do my physics assignment, thus I am extremely stressed. However, I am entirely released at the weekend when I tell my friend john about the problem and he help me deal with the difficulty. In a word, gathering together with friends is a fascinating way to relieve myself from working stresses.

To sum up, spending my time with friends while I am spare is best way for me to relieve stresses. At the same time, I believe that accompanied by my friends can let me completely relax through enjoying my trips and shopping. Hence, killing my leisure time with other persons is the best to relax.

第15次作业题
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to truly understand event, we must get news from newspaper; television cannot provide enough information. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the age of knowledge explosion, we have diverse ways to acquire information about our society, living environment and human development. However, which approach is powerful for us to gather enough and comprehensive knowledge? From my point of view, we can’t obtain efficient information from either television or newspaper but from internets.

First of all, both newspaper and television are manipulated by big corporations and they are prone to reflect their own benefits, therefore, it is not possible for them to transmit comprehensive information about one event if that one has to do with their corporations. For example, if one wealthy corporation sell some junk food which has great healthy risk to people and these food was investigated by government agency. But we absolutely don't even know a little about these events because corporations will spend money peace all the things. In order to sustain, television and newspaper corporations will regard them as nothing has happened. Thereby, it is not possible for people to acquaint with the truths of these things.

Secondly, we can acquire many true and thorough plots of everything which have happened around us and even on other nations because internet is a mutual communicating plat. We know can all things about their initial reasons, developmental process and the results. For one thing, if the same thing as stated above is breaking out, someone who is familiar with the event will upload information to some website and then many people will concern about it, finally, more and more people will complement fresh information to that. Accumulating all these information which uploaded by different people together, we can see a comprehensive and clear story about that event.

In conclusion, we can acquire more enough and thorough information about events through internet than newspapers and televisions because Internet is a opening platform. Thus, I maintain that we are unable to get enough and comprehensive information about events unless plugging into internet.

[ 本帖最后由 19811010316 于 2008-7-11 17:55 编辑 ]

rebeccavenUID: 2140456

1. No matter what professions you engage in and how characteristics you possess, it is necessary for you to spend some time on relaxing yourself (not only your mood but also your bodies. 是什么成分?)
2.some people believe that spending time alone (relaxing去掉) is better than (SPENDING TIME)with other people, (这里应该是另外一个句子)for me,(TO) join a group and spend leisure time with them is(ARE) best way to relieve my pressure.
这是一个典型的RUN-ON SENTENCE,2个句子用的逗号连接.

3.nature is great place for us to release my stress.代词不一致. US-OUR

4.I will be afraid of come(ING) across

5. it reversely add(S) my stress rather than release(S) it.

6. I am scared to encounter with bad persons and damaged(HURT) by them

7. 那个政府安全报告,好古怪啊...也没有说明是在哪个地方的, 也没说明是否郊外就更不安全, 因为你说的是NATURE, 所以总觉得和年突兀...:rolleyes:

8. even if I just cost (SPEND)my leisure time on(IN?) my living city(THE CITY WHERE I LIVE), lingering around some landscapes and buying my daily need commodities singly is (ARE) bad thing (S) for me because(小写) It is easy to involve in a traffic accident due to overcrowded city. 这个句子虽然长, 但是有很多错误.

9. When I walk through a street road (去掉一个,重复)

10. because there are full of cars in roads.  搭配错误, becasue the streets are full of cars.

11. because I can't attend the traffic of all directions at the same time.    attend the traffic 　我第一次看见这个搭配．．．

12. and it is sure that will be safe when travel (ING) through roads all times.

１３．For example, last week, I was bored by my physics assignment for a whole week (until the weekend删除）

14. I am entirely released at the weekend when I tell my friend john about the problem and he help me deal with the difficulty. 因为是回忆的例子，所以应该是过去时．

１５．　spending my time with friends （while I am spare删除） is best way for me to relieve stresses.

１６．　killing my leisure time with other persons is the best to relax.
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　the best relaxing to me.

你这篇文章是什么时候写的，　感觉你当时状态好象不太好．．．:handshake

19811010316UID: 2220703

是不够专心啊。语法还要好好注意一下阿我。谢谢你的指出。

rebeccavenUID: 2140456

不客气, 也谢谢你的修改啊!