备考小组1.3作文by Amber

Amber0926UID: 2555355

1.3日作业 It is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor （06.12.16 & 08.1.5）

people without friends are like flowers without sunshine, while friends without sense of humor is like fish without water. A great many of people hold the opinion that we had better make friends with intelligent people than with a humorous friends, for smart person will make us learn more skills from them and inspire us thought profoundly. Contrary to the opinion of numerous people, is my heartfelt  agreement with the idea that make friends with people who have a sense of humor is indispensable.

It is goes without saying that we saty with a humorous person, who will bring a great amount of enjoyment and rapture. They even can courage us in some special manner. we can take a glance at a common example, my intimate, Mark who is fill with humorous cells at every pore and I always willing to accompanying with him due to he can make me forget diverse troubles and tedious trivias with his homorous talent. Like last time, I was falling to a chemistry examination and felt so depressed. while nothing was taking to me , he just acted as a cock and voicing: brave birds you can get achievement if you stick on flying. With his interesting encouragement, I as rebirth and obtain new couragement in my chemistryl study. In short, I am fortunate have a hormous friends as Mark, my life is full of sunshine and never have depression.

Another point worthy mentioning is a friend with the sense of humor is just express that who with a intelligence ability. As we know, pople who  have a amusement capacity reveals they have a agile brain to get to know various areas. Virtually, while humorous people make others laughing invariably is unconsciously, the gift that is they innately endowed with. They could easy translate all the problems or some boring things into a light-hearted manner and always construct enjoyable atmosphere by their expceptional intelligence. It is no exaggerating to say that friends with sense of humor equals with even more intellgence.

considerable though the advantages of make friends with interesting people enjoy are, it doesn't mean we can live under the illusion that make friends with intelligent people have nothing to us, if their wise thought and deal with things ability are taken into consideration. To some extent, make friends with intelligent people might be also bring some benefits to us.

Though there may be one or two merits of intelligent friends, i believe that the benefits from make friends with sense of humor epople is more obvious, for pradise is just a place where we can get on with humorous friends eternal.

[ 本帖最后由 Amber0926 于 2009-1-4 00:42 编辑 ]

hustly0415UID: 2407456

people without friends are like flowers without sunshine, while friends without sense of humor is like fish without water(赞一个！). A great many of people hold the opinion that we had better make friends with intelligent people than with a humorous friends, for smart person will make us learn more skills from them and inspire us thought profoundly. Contrary to the opinion of numerous people, is my heartfelt  agreement with the idea that make friends with people who have a sense of humor is indispensable

It is goes without saying that we saty with a humorous person, who will bring a great amount of enjoyment and rapture. They even can courage us in some special manner. we can take a glance at a common example, my intimate, Mark who is fill with humorous cells at every pore and I always willing to accompanying with him due to (提醒一下due to后面应该接名词性短语，不要接从句，很多人用错这个，注意注意！！想接表原因的从句可以用as、for、since) he can make me forget diverse troubles and tedious trivias with his homorous talent. Like last time, I was falling to a chemistry examination and felt so depressed. while nothing was taking to me , he just acted as a cock and voicing: brave birds you can get achievement if you stick on flying. With his interesting encouragement, I as rebirth and obtain new couragement in my chemistryl study. In short, I am fortunate have a hormous friends as Mark, my life is full of sunshine and never have depression.

Another point worthy mentioning is a friend with the sense of humor is just express that who with a intelligence ability. As we know, pople who  have a amusement capacity reveals they have a agile brain to get to know various areas. Virtually, while humorous people make others laughing invariably is unconsciously, the gift that is they innately endowed with. They could easy translate all the problems or some boring things into a light-hearted manner and always construct enjoyable atmosphere by their expceptional intelligence. It is no exaggerating to say that friends with sense of humor equals with even more intellgence.

considerable though the advantages of make friends with interesting people enjoy are, it doesn't mean we can live under the illusion that make friends with intelligent people have nothing to us, if their wise thought and deal with things ability are taken into consideration. To some extent, make friends with intelligent people might be also bring some benefits to us.

Though there may be one or two merits of intelligent friends, i believe that the benefits from make friends with sense of humor epople is more obvious, for pradise is just a place where we can get on with humorous friends eternal。

文章当中有些常见拼写错误和语法错误，已经标示出部分，这些也是我要加强的。

另外，作者使用了一些变化的句式，这很好，值得我学习。

从论证的角度讲，两个论证段都不错，不过第二个论证段感觉需要加强。你选的分论点很好，但是发展得不够，个人意见，仅供参考。

[ 本帖最后由 hustly0415 于 2009-1-4 19:40 编辑 ]

45678amUID: 2530095

people without friends are like flowers without sunshine, while friends without sense of humor is like fish without water. A great many of people hold the opinion that we had better make friends with intelligent people than with a humorous friends(people), for smart person will make us learn more skills from them and inspire us(our) thought profoundly. Contrary to the opinion of numerous people, is my heartfelt  agreement with the idea that make friends with people who have a sense of humor is indispensable.
It is goes without saying that we saty with a humorous person, who will bring a great amount of enjoyment and rapture. They even can (en)courage us in some special manner. we can take a glance at a common example, my intimate, Mark who is fill(ed) with humorous cells at every pore and I (am)always willing to accompanying with him due to he can make me forget diverse troubles and tedious trivias with his homorous talent. Like last time, I was falling(fail) to a chemistry examination and felt so depressed. while nothing was taking to me , he just acted as a cock and voicing: brave birds you can get achievement if you stick on flying. With his interesting encouragement, I as rebirth and obtain new couragement in my chemistryl study. In short, I am fortunate have a hormous friends as Mark, my life is full of sunshine and never have depression.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE `M)?UB%l-] k
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句子变化较多，结构也较复杂，另外例子也挺生动的，都是很好的加分点，有些错误我指出来了，不过我能力也有限，有些地方我也不知道对还是不对。。。