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"Thediscovery of distinctively shaped ceramic pots at variousprehistoric sitesscattered over a wide area has led archaeologists toask how the pots werespread. Some believe the pot makers migrated tothe various sites and carriedthe pots along with them; others believethe pots were spread by trade and theirmakers remained in one place.Now, analysis of the bones of prehistoric humanskeletons can settlethe debate: high levels of a certain metallic elementcontained invarious foods are strongly associated with people who migrated to anewplace after childhood. Many of the bones found near the pots at a fewsitesshowed high levels of the metallic element. Therefore, it must bethat the potswere spread by migration, not trade."
在广泛区域分散分布的很多史前遗迹发现的形状独特的陶壶导致考古学家提出疑问:这些壶是如何流传的?有些人相信壶的制造者迁移到别的地方并把壶随之带来;另一些人相信壶是通过贸易流传的,而他们的制造者留在一个地方。现在,对于史前人类骨骼的分析可以解决这个争论:在多种食物中都含有的某种金属元素的高含量与那些成年后移居到新地方的人有很高的关联性。在一些遗迹的壶附近发现的很多骨头都显示出这种金属元素的高含量。因此,这些壶肯定是通过迁徙而不是贸易来流传的。

【提纲】
1)bones near the pots were not belonged to people from the same area.
2)bonds and pots had different owners.
3)other possibilities of the spreading of pots.
【正文】
Inthis argument, the author drew the conclusion that pots were transported bymigration, based on the facts that many bones found near the pots with highlevels of a metallic element which strongly associated with people who migratedto a new place after childhood. Although this argument sounds logical at thefirst glance, it is in fact highly doubted for several reasons as follows.

First,the author fails to convince us that the bones near the pots belonged to the people from the same area.There is no evidence that this metallic element in the bones is only found inone place. If this element was also found at many other places, it is totallypossible that these bones belong to people fromdifferent places rather than people transferfrom one place. Even more, the same food cangrow at different place, and people who eat them would definitely accumulatethe same element. Without this information, it is hardly to make people believethese bones belong to people who migrate fromthe same place.

Inaddition, even if these bones were indeed of immigrants',there is no evidence showing that these bones and the pots were shared by the same owners. As theauthor states, only at a few sites, the bonds near the pots had a high level ofthe element. Perhaps at other places, those bonds near the pot did not containthis element at all. Furthermore, even at these few sites where the bonds werefound, just some bones near the pots showed high levels of metallic element. Inshort, lacking of the information that all the bonds near the pots at most ofthe sites showed high level of the metallic element, the author's implicit argument that the pots are the migrates' isstrongly doubted.

Finally,the arguer does not take into account other possibilities of the spreading ofthe pots. Hunting and travelling are thepossible reasons that people showed up at the place out of where they wereborn. Even we can assume that the pots were very welcome by the local people, this technology learned by the local people, and they madeout these pots. Therefore, it is unwarrantedto deduce that the pots were spread by migration.

Insum, the argument for the pots must be transported by migration seems logicalat first. However, before any conclusion is made, the author needs to provide more convincingevidence to support his/her vague claim.


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https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=908604&extra=page%3D1





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