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发表于 2005-7-19 14:28:24 |显示全部楼层
Issue43  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧!
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To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
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Whether or not an effective leader should maintain the highest ethical and moral standard is one of the intensive controversy problems in the political realm. While I agree with the speaker that the moral standard is necessary and essential to both common people and leaders, the statement that the ethical and moral standard should be regarded as the highest level to judge a leader is open to doubt.

To begin with, having ethics and morality is the basic request to everyone, let alone the leader who has the responsibility to serve the mass. Only if the man can achieve the public standard of moral and ethic, can he gain the respect of others, which is one of the prerequisites of being a leader. The example of Ronald Reagan, one of the greatest presents in American history, can aptly illustrate this point. He gained his reputation and achieved his fruition largely because he honestly and deeply believed in the core principles that he espoused and advocated during his presidency, and his constituency senses that genuineness and responded favorably to it. Therefore, the ethical and moral standard is the first step to achieve for anyone, especially who wants to be a leader later.

What's more, without ethical and moral standard to comply with, the leader may to some extent be an extremist not considering any criterion. History is replete with such example that the government is eventually in failure because the leader's lacking of morality. To be more specifically, Let's recall what had happened in the World War Two, the egregious leader of German, Hitler, regardless of the public interests, pursued his own ideal world, and acted a murderous carnage of innocent. Consequently, the world at that time had been totally in a mass, and people had suffered the one of the ferocious calamity ever happened in the world. And definitely, it is the ignorance of the public morality that leads Hitler to his downfall.

However, we should recognize that the effective leader are all human beings after all, they are not god so that they cannot always hold the "highest" ethical and moral standard. In other words, they might make some mistakes, yet given these mistakes are not so unforgivable we may condone them. For example, the marital indiscretion Kennedy, but few would agree that these personal moral choices adversely affected his ability to lead.

However, although the morality is vital to maintain for a public official who what to be a leader, it can be concluded as the most important factor that influences the effectiveness of a leader, there are also many other ingredients, like the ability, talent, braveness, and so forth. After all, to be a leader is not such kind of easy stuff, and to be moral is the necessary but not the only qualification to be a excellent leader.

All in all, to maintain the ethical and moral plays an indispensable role in everyone especially in the leading career of a leader, However, we should not too strict to these leader in moral standard, after all it is not the only factor one should hold to be effective.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-19 at 17:07 ]
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发表于 2005-7-20 12:20:38 |显示全部楼层
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
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Whether or not an effective leader should maintain the highest ethical and moral standard is one of the intensive controversy problems in the political realm. While I agree with the speaker that the moral standard is necessary and essential to both common people and leaders, the statement that the ethical and moral standard should be regarded as the highest level to judge a leader is open to doubt.

To begin with, having ethics and morality is the basic request to everyone, let alone the leader who has the responsibility to serve the mass. Only if the man can achieve the public standard of moral and ethic, can he gain the respect of others, which is one of the prerequisites of being a leader. The example of Ronald Reagan, one of the greatest presents in American history, can aptly illustrate this point. He gained his reputation and achieved his fruition largely because he honestly and deeply believed in the core principles that he espoused and advocated during his presidency,(这句话在语意上是否有些重复) and his constituency senses that genuineness and responded favorably to it. Therefore, the ethical and moral standard is the first step to achieve for anyone, especially who wants to be a leader later.

What's more, without ethical and moral standard to comply with, the leader may to some extent be an extremist not considering any criterion. (History is replete with such examples that the government is eventually in failure because of the leader's lacking of morality) (这句活和前面有些连不上 such指代了前面提到的he leader may to some extent be an extremist not considering any criterion 然后又跟了that 作解释 这两个意思不能划等号。是否应该单起一句或者调整一下这两句的顺序)To be more specifically, Let's recall what had happened in the World War Two, the egregious leader of German, Hitler, regardless of the public interests, pursued his own ideal world, and acted a murderous carnage of innocent. Consequently, the world at that time had been totally in a mass, and people had suffered the one of the ferocious calamity (用个最高级是不是更好)ever happened in the world. And definitely, it is the ignorance of the public morality that leads Hitler to his downfall.

However, we should recognize that the effective leaders are all human beings after all, they are not God so that they cannot always hold the "highest" ethical and moral standard. In other words, they might make some mistakes, yet given these mistakes are not so unforgivable we may condone them. For example, the marital indiscretion Kennedy, but(有点突然,前面没有句子) few would agree that these personal moral choices adversely affected his ability to lead.

However,(这里再用however好像不太合适因为并不与上段构成转折关系) although the morality is vital to maintain for a public official who what to be a leader, it (witch)can be concluded as the most important factor that influences the effectiveness of a leader, there are also many other ingredients, like the ability, talent, braveness, and so forth. After all, to be a leader is not such kind of easy stuff, and to be moral is the necessary but not the only qualification to be an excellent leader.

All in all, to maintain the ethical and moral plays an indispensable role in everyone especially in the leading career of a leader, However, we should not too strict to these leader in moral standard, after all it is not the only factor one should hold to be effective.


我觉得你这第一篇写得很好,第一次就限时成功,而且用词很丰富。能不能介绍点经验。我的issue特别烂,就写了一篇都不知道写了几个小时,还有十几天就考了着急啊。也因此,我的修改水平有限,可能也不一定对,希望对你有帮助。
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发表于 2005-7-20 13:35:18 |显示全部楼层
这不是第一篇了,只是那个倒计时软件无论第几篇他只会显示是第一篇:(
差不多是第6,7篇的样子了

第二段的例子是叙述的罗嗦了,还有第四段“but" 得语法错误以后一定注意
至于倒数第二段的however, 我觉得还是去掉好了,谢谢:)

另外,你还有十几天呢,肯定来得及的,我觉得多看范文还有自己总结可以用到的观点还有例子是短期比较有效的方法,当然只是个人之见了, anyway, 加油加油!!!

我还有9天了上午写了一篇又超时了,急。。。。。

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发表于 2005-7-26 11:01:45 |显示全部楼层
一直没看见你的回复, 你也是要考8月托福吧 大家加油!
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