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The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.


There is much controversy presently over the issue of whether video camera can take the place of the traditional record method, writing. As far as I concerned, I would sustain that video camera can never replace written records as the main form of documentation.

Admittedly, video camera can provide a method of marking down the affair happening more vivid and visible even with the sound around the recorder. With the expeditious development of the modern technology, many new ways are available to record the contemporary life nowaday, one of which is video camera. Since it appears, video camera has changed a majority of people's opinions toward recording. Instead of using a pen which they used to mark things down, a number of people start to make use of video camera when they decide to memorize some things. Imagining that if you can use a tool, which you can see what you have recorded immediately after you finish recording with an accurate and vivid sound-recording system, will you still stick on using a pen? The answer may be "no".

The video camera, however, limited by the time and space, can never superseded written records’ dominated place of documentation. According to the video camera structure, it must contain some kind of carrier to preserve the records, such as tape, CD burner or DVD burner. No matter what did it use to preserve the records, there is a maximum of it. And what's more, the carriers reachable nowaday is relatively expansive referring to the counterparts of written records, which will refrain the video camera from broadly adopting as the main form of documentation. On the contrary, written records, a competitive way to video camera, can obtain the carrier, paper, more easier and cheaper, which consolidate its primary status as the most important and prevalent way of documentation.

It is, apparently, wise to use the video camera, accompanying with written records, to note down the things taking place around us. A coin has two sides. Everything in the real world has it own advantages and drawbacks and both video camera and written record can’t step out of the list as exceptions. So, it is sane that we use both of the two ways to take down the things or moment we want to leave to the posterity.

In summary, there are, withal, multifarious other aspects relevant to the issue under discussed, which, unfortunately, I do not have enough time to demonstrate in detail. But, the above-discussed reasons may to a great extent warrant my claim that the dominated method of documentation is still belonging to written records although video camera is appearing as a cogently vying form of contestant.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-26 at 12:47 ]

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能给点意见吗??

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在使用例证方面还可以进一步加强。

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There is much controversy presently over the issue of whether video camera can take the place of the traditional record method, writing. As far as I concerned, I would sustain that video camera can never replace written records as the main form of documentation. (第一个句子写的有点奇怪，我觉得不如直接晾出观点，或者先陈述下作者观点，然后用一让步转折，否则逻辑关系上有点突兀)

Admittedly, video camera can provide a method of marking down the affair(加个s吧) happening more vivid and visible even with the sound around the recorder. With the expeditious development of the modern technology, many new ways are available to record the contemporary life nowaday, one of which is video camera. Since it appears, video camera has changed a majority of people's opinions toward recording. Instead of using a pen which they used to mark things down, a number of people start to make use of video camera when they decide to memorize some things(改为events affairs 等等会比较合适 things 这个词似乎太抽象 不够具体化). Imagining that if you can use a tool, which you can see what you have recorded immediately after you finish recording with an accurate and vivid sound-recording system, will you still stick on using a pen?(修锐说避免用you，我觉得也不太好，这似乎是中文里的习惯，总是一句一个你的，让老外看上去会很不舒服的吧，换个代词好了) The answer may be "no".

The video camera, however, limited by the time and space, can never superseded written records’ dominated place of documentation. According to the video camera structure, it must contain some kind of carrier to preserve the records, such as tape, CD burner or DVD burner. No matter what did it use to preserve the records, there is a maximum of it. And what's more, the carriers reachable nowaday is relatively expansive referring to the counterparts of written records, which will refrain the video camera from broadly adopting as the main form of documentation. On the contrary, written records, a competitive way to video camera, can obtain the carrier, paper, more easier and cheaper, which consolidate its primary status as the most important and prevalent way of documentation.(这个观点不错 赞一个:))

It is, apparently, wise to use the video camera, accompanying with written records, to note down the things(events) taking place around us. (As正如)A coin has two sides. Everything in the real world has it own advantages and drawbacks and both video camera and written record can’t step out of the list as exceptions. So, it is sane that we use both of the two ways to take down the things or moment we want to leave to the posterity.

In summary, there are, withal, multifarious other aspects relevant to the issue under discussed, which, unfortunately, I do not have enough time to demonstrate in detail. (好像不大必要这样来一句吧 感觉怪怪的 像是抱怨ets给的时间太短了:D)But, the above-discussed reasons may to a great extent warrant my claim that the dominated method of documentation is still belonging to written records although video camera is appearing as a cogently vying form of contestant.

语言挺好的 尤其是后面几段 相比之下 开头和正文第一段逊色一些 建议再改改:)

我也写了一篇issue7 帮我看看吧 感觉你语言比我好 帮忙提提建议 谢谢啦
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