Argument166 大家帮我看看，回拍给连接

qwerty_123UID: 201741

166The following appeared in a local newspaper.

"People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold-Away, both popular over-the-counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor's prescription. Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well-known, unwanted side effect: Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. But the choice should be clear for most health-conscious people: Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex. Clearly, Cold-Away is more effective."
1，        急于概括       
2，        无理假设
3，        因果关系
At first glance, the arguer's reasoning seems to be quite sound. According to his conclusion that Cold-Away is more effective. However, unfortunately, if we make a careful consideration of his evidence, doubt will be cast on and apprehension will be heaped on Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex, and Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness.



In the first place, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. Even if Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex, it does not follow that Cold-Away is more effective. It is highly possible other factors may have contributed to more hospitals using Cold-Away. For instance, it is possible that the price of Cold-Away is less than that of Coldex. Besides, there is no causal relationship between the Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and the Cold-Away is more effective. In addition, the arguer does not provide any solid information concerning the effect of Coledx. Unless the arguer compares the effect of Cole-Away with that of Coldex and point out the evidence of the Cold-Away is more effective than Coldex, which is unknown for this argument, there is guarantee that Cold-Away is more effective. Without ruling out these or other possible factors, the arguer cannot confidently conclude that the Cole-Away is more effective.


In the second place, the arguer falsely depends on gratuitous assumption that the accusing of each brand which is that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness is right. Actually, common sense tells us that competitive company may exaggeratedly point out the flaws of adversary. For example, Coldex may not contribute to existing high blood pressure, however, Cold-Away accuses that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure to diminish the reputation of Coldex. Therefore, this argument is unwarranted without ruling out such possibility.


In the thrd place, when we probe into the result that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness, we may find bigger flaw in this argument. The arguer attempts to establish a causal relationship between the cause that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness and the effect Cold-Away is more effective, which lacks any sound evidence to support this claim. As a matter of fact, the side effect has little relationship with the effect of medicine. There is no evidence to support the causal relationship which the arguer attempts to establish.


In sum, to strength this argument, the arguer should point out more information about the side effect of Cold-Away and Coldex. To better evaluate the recommendation, the arguer should point out more information about the effect of Cold-Away and Coldex and compare the two effects. Otherwise, this argument is unaccepted.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-28 at 12:32 ]

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d_messiahUID: 177468

166The following appeared in a local newspaper.

"People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold-Away, both popular over-the-counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor's prescription. Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well-known, unwanted side effect: Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. But the choice should be clear for most health-conscious people: Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex. Clearly, Cold-Away is more effective."
1，        急于概括        
2，        无理假设
3，        因果关系
要是提纲能再列的详细些就更方便大家交流了

At first glance, the arguer's reasoning seems to be quite不用这么说吧 sound. According to his conclusion that Cold-Away is more effective后面的不是conclusion的同位语吗，那这句话的主语在哪？？？. However, unfortunately这个词用的不是很舒服, if we make a careful consideration of his evidence, doubt will be cast on and apprehension will be heaped on Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex, and Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. 最后这句没看懂，太多的AND了



In the first place, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. Even if Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex, it does not follow that Cold-Away is more effective. It is highly possible 我觉得加个that other factors may have contributed to more hospitals using Cold-Away. For instance, it is possible换个词，上句话刚用完这个词 that the price of Cold-Away is less than that of Coldex. Besides, there is no causal relationship between the Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and the Cold-Away is more effective. In addition, the arguer does not provide any solid information concerning the effect of Coledx. Unless the arguer compares the effect of Cole-Away with that of Coldex and point out the evidence of the Cold-Away is more effective than Coldex, which is unknown for this argument, there is guarantee that Cold-Away is more effective. Without ruling out these or other引下文用的 possible factors, the arguer cannot confidently conclude that the Cole-Away is more effective.


In the second place, the arguer falsely depends on a gratuitous assumption that the accusing of each brand which is that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness is right没有太看懂. Actually, common sense tells us that competitive company may exaggeratedly point out the flaws of adversary. For example, Coldex may not contribute to existing high blood pressure, however, Cold-Away accuses that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure to diminish the reputation of Coldex. Therefore, this argument is unwarranted without ruling out such possibility.和上段的结尾有些重复


In the thrd place, when we probe into好词 the result that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness, we may find bigger flaw in this argument. The arguer attempts to establish a causal relationship between the cause that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness and 晕了，又两个AND the effect Cold-Away is more effective, which lacks any sound evidence to support this claim. As a matter of fact, the side effect has little relationship with the effect of medicine. There is no evidence to support the causal relationship which the arguer attempts to establish.这段感觉花了大量的笔墨在复述原题，而没有深入的分析


In sum, to strength this argument, the arguer should point out more information about the side effect of Cold-Away and Coldex. To better evaluate the recommendation, the arguer这时主语就不是arguer了吧 should point out more information about the effect of Cold-Away and Coldex and compare the two effects. Otherwise, this argument is unaccepted.

B1、B2感觉不错
B3少深入的分析

开头有些复杂了，为了追求长句，可不能把若干句话用and连起来啊

qwerty_123UID: 201741

谢谢啊，校友
我会注意的，我刚开始写，所以可能写的不是很好！

AlexandraUID: 185174

Argument166 大家帮我看看，回拍给连接

166The following appeared in a local newspaper.

"People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold-Away, both popular over-the-counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor's prescription. Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well-known, unwanted side effect: Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. But the choice should be clear for most health-conscious people: Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex. Clearly, Cold-Away is more effective."
1，        急于概括        
2，        无理假设
3，        因果关系
At first glance, the arguer's reasoning seems to be quite sound. According to his conclusion that Cold-Away is more effective. However, unfortunately, if we make a careful consideration of his evidence, doubt will be cast on and apprehension will be heaped on Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex, [嘿  兄弟，你的句式 有进步哦。]  and Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness.  [ 不过，你在重述 题意 时， 你还不能够完美转述表达， 有抄题之嫌。  还有， 小建议， 直接表达题目 unconvincing]


In the first place, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. Even if Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex, it does not follow that Cold-Away is more effective. It is highly possible other factors may have contributed to more hospitals using Cold-Away. [ 这个句式不错，不一样] For instance, it is possible that the price of Cold-Away is less than that of Coldex. Besides, there is no causal relationship between the Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and the Cold-Away is more effective. [这一点 放在这个位置，我感觉不良好]  In addition, the arguer does not provide any solid information concerning the effect of Coledx. Unless the arguer compares the effect of Cole-Away with that of Coldex and point out the evidence of the Cold-Away is more effective than Coldex, which is unknown for this argument, there is guarantee that Cold-Away is more effective [什么意思啊， 没头没尾的一句] . Without ruling out these or other possible factors, the arguer cannot confidently conclude that the Cole-Away is more effective.
[我感觉 在这里，你好像 都把人家的错误数落完了？？/]


In the second place, the arguer falsely depends on gratuitous assumption [ 好象不是假设啊 兄弟， 看清楚。这一点 我可是想了很久了的 ] that the accusing of each brand which is that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness is right. Actually, common sense tells us that competitive company may exaggeratedly point out the flaws of adversary. For example, Coldex may not contribute to existing high blood pressure, however, Cold-Away accuses that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure to diminish the reputation of Coldex. Therefore, this argument is unwarranted without ruling out such possibility.[我原来 也考虑 这一点。但是 后来我发现，这一点不能做为一整段的攻击点。 因为 人家都说了causing some well-known, unwanted side effect，是well-known了， 不是没有理由的。]

In the thrd [ 什么单词啊， 你别学我打字哦] place, when we probe into the result that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness, we may find bigger flaw in this argument. The arguer attempts to establish a causal relationship between the cause that Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness and the effect Cold-Away is more effective, which lacks any sound evidence to support this claim. As a matter of fact, the side effect has little relationship with the effect of medicine. There is no evidence to support the causal relationship which the arguer attempts to establish.
[问题 很严重哦 ]

In sum, to strength this argument, the arguer should point out more information about the side effect of Cold-Away and Coldex. To better evaluate the recommendation, the arguer should point out more information about the effect of Cold-Away and Coldex and compare the two effects. Otherwise, this argument is unaccepted.
总结： 校友， 你的问题，从我的角度来看， 一， 在题意 复述的时候，你要 学会 多用些 同义词， 换句式， 给人不一样的感觉，尽管 是一个意思。 二， 你的逻辑错误的攻击方式，我不知道怎么说， 比如，ABC 对象，是要分别说A错哪B，C怎样，还是 要用ABC 都怎样怎样？  你考虑考虑。
三， 结尾 ， 没有自己的个性的东西，我觉得 你的 开头，就 不一样哦。

个人意见，当作 讨论 吧

继续努力吧。

[ Last edited by Alexandra on 2005-7-30 at 19:30 ]