Issue52 未限时 感觉有点跑题，大家给看看吧

dingzjUID：2101797

【题目】：
52"Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."
【翻译】：
教育鼓励学生们提出问题和进行批判，所以无助于促进社会的和谐。
2段 教育的作用,给社会带来的好处
3段，不可避免地，教育会鼓励人们进行提问
4段，是否有助于社会的和谐呢？要分情况讨论

Education is the main ways for our modern people to understand the unknown and gain knowledge, as well as how to learn them by oneself. Generally, educators, mostly in schools and universities, often teach people, especially students to view everything which never expose to them with a doubt, even to question or criticize boldly. However, is it beneficial that education encourages students to do so for promoting social harmony? I take a moderate point of view on it for the following reasons.
As we all know, each person was born with no idea about this beautiful but complicated world. Fortunately, we all have the curious nature and willing to explore everything surrounding with us. At first, parents are our beginning teachers, who tell us many basic skills and elementary introduction. And then, schools and universities are the common places for people to acquire more knowledge and receive more education. Best educationalists and best students are all gathering here teaching and learning the soul of human beings, such as the history, culture, business, and science. Consequently, large number of students after well teaching becomes the elites of our society--sociologists, entrepreneurs, politicians, scientists, who make great effort to impel human civilization and better people’s life condition, driving the development of the whole world farthest and greatest. Unquestionably, it’s the education that has such power to impel human’s development and progress of society.

It is not only dispersing knowledge to students for an educationalist’s responsibility, but also important to teach them how to learn new information. As a Chinese proverb saying, “Best way is to teach one how to fish, rather than give fish”. An efficient way, often adopted by teachers, is that masters suggest the students analyze new problems by questioning them step by step to reach thoroughly answers. Furthermore, even if the classic theory and authorities transmitting by professors are deserved to inquire more, or even rebut. Therefore, knowing how to question or criticize something is a crucial ability that people especially students should have mastered. For example, if Isaac Newton did not ask the question “why apples drop down to earth, rather than up to sky?”, we couldn’t know the law of gravity discovered by him; If Nicolaus Copernicus didn’t disbelieve and challenge the geocentric system of the universe, our astronomy would be progressed more promptly. Obviously, only through proposing new questions can we really focus our concentration on what the problems exactly are and comprehend them better by answering these questions. When we face new issues, we will question them and study them; finally we adopt them or criticize them. Inevitably, education has well taught us to question and criticize others in most situations, such as when we were learning how to learn.

However, mere education is not the last aim. Undeniably, we should utilize the skills and knowledge through education to serve for people, so as to our society. Not only knowledge in many special fields such as electrics and medicine are useful for human, but also many skills are helpful and important in people’s daily life, such as how to communicate with others, even how to self-construct one’s personality, value system, and world views, etc. Generally, most of these skills and knowledge, gained through education, are very beneficial to human society as well as society harmony. However, some people believe that the ability of question and criticism will bring nothing even bad effect to society harmony. It occurs to me that a case-by-case standpoint is more reasonable. Mostly, from one person’s progress to coalition of different culture or corporations, it’s possible that many kinds of questions or criticism flood in these processes, but it’s normal and profitable. However, it’s also likely that too much criticism will make one be a cynic and individuals disbelieve reciprocally. When it happens, more understanding and comprehension, which can also be acquired from education, are needed and deserve more care. Moreover, people should make question and criticism concerning problems, rather than people, and make efforts to settle the problems, rather than let them alone. Thought these methods, we could decrease the side-effect resulting from questions and criticism and bring more harmony to our society.

To sum up, it’s education that drives our world to be more prosperous, developed and civilized, worthy of each government to highly care about and invest in. Although education encourage students and people to question and criticize, and thus may bring nothing or even bad effect to our society, we could reduce these if properly deal with.

是不是引入主题比较罗嗦？而且有点偏？ 恳请大家给点意见

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-29 at 00:39 ]

GladysryUID：198609

啊，终于找到一篇没有改滴，先占上啊。一会儿过来盖。

GladysryUID：198609

Education is the main ways for our modern people to understand the unknown and gain knowledge, as well as how to learn them by oneself. Generally, educators, mostly in schools and universities, often teach people, especially students to view everything which never expose to them with a doubt, even to question or criticize boldly. However, is it beneficial that education encourages students to do so for promoting social harmony? I take a moderate point of view on it for the following reasons.觉得你以怀疑题中对立的观点开头，有点点别扭。
As we all know, each person was born with no idea about this beautiful but complicated world. Fortunately, we all have the curious nature and [are] willing to explore everything surrounding with us. At first, parents are our beginning teachers, who tell us many basic skills and elementary introduction. And then, schools and universities are the common places for people to acquire more knowledge and receive more education. Best educationalists and best students are all gathering here teaching and learning the soul of human beings, such as the history, culture, business, and science. Consequently, large number of students after well teaching becomes the elites of our society--sociologists, entrepreneurs, politicians, scientists, who make great effort to impel human civilization and better people’s life condition, driving the development of the whole world farthest and greatest. Unquestionably, it’s the education that has such power to impel human’s development and progress of society.

It is not only dispersing knowledge to students for an educationalist’s responsibility是不是去掉那个for ? 要么就把教育者作为主语，会通顺一些。, but also important to teach them how to learn new information. As a Chinese proverb saying你这里的saying是名词么？是的话，后面应该有动词，不是的话，应该用现在时态。, “Best way is to teach one how to fish, rather than give fish”. An efficient way, often adopted by teachers, is that masters suggest the students analyze new problems by questioning them step by step to reach改为obtain吧？否则翻译成什么呢？“达到详尽的答案”？ thoroughly answers. Furthermore, even if the classic theory and authorities transmitting by professors are deserved to inquire more, or even rebut.不举个例子么？为什么需要？后面的那个哥白尼可以提到这里。嗯，牛顿的例子提到你上面那句话后面（获得详尽的答案） Therefore, knowing how to question or criticize something is a crucial ability that people especially students should have mastered. For example, if Isaac Newton did not ask the question “why apples drop down to earth, rather than up to sky?”, we couldn’t know the law of gravity discovered by him; If Nicolaus Copernicus didn’t disbelieve and challenge the geocentric system of the universe, our astronomy would be progressed more promptly. Obviously, only through proposing new questions can we really focus our concentration on what the problems exactly are and comprehend them better by answering these questions. When we face new issues, we will question them and study them; finally we adopt them or criticize them. Inevitably, education has well taught us to question and criticize others in most situations, such as when we were learning how to learn.

However, mere education is not the last aim这句话什么意思？教育不是最终目的？所以提到后面的应用？你在前面丝毫未提教育交给了你这些应用的技能，现在就直接说这些技能有哪些好处了？. Undeniably, we should utilize the skills and knowledge through education to serve for people, so as to our society. Not only knowledge in many special fields such as electrics and medicine are useful for human, but also many skills are helpful and important in people’s daily life, such as how to communicate with others, even how to self-construct one’s personality, value system, and world views, etc. Generally, most of these skills and knowledge, gained through education, are very beneficial to human society as well as society harmony.为什么不展开一下阿？直接用不定式与前面对应就可以阿，刚刚看到了希望，又来一个however However, some people believe that the ability of question and criticism will bring nothing even bad effect to society harmony. It occurs to me that a case-by-case standpoint is more reasonable. Mostly, from one person’s progress to coalition of different culture or corporations, it’s possible that many kinds of questions or criticism flood in these processes, but it’s normal and profitable. However, it’s also likely that too much criticism will make one be a cynic and individuals disbelieve reciprocally.恩？？？这两句话有联系么？(however&When) When it happens, more understanding and comprehension, which can also be acquired from education, are needed and deserve more care. Moreover, people should这些都应该是你对客观的分析，而不是你认为应该怎么样。 make question and criticism concerning problems, rather than people, and make efforts to settle the problems, rather than let them alone. Thought these methods, we could decrease the side-effect resulting from questions and criticism and bring more harmony to our society.这一段好像是要唤出对harmony的肯定作用，怎么看过这后感觉很混乱？我看到这里为止还不知道你到底是什么观点（因为你的第一段就表示的很奇怪）
To sum up, it’s education that drives our world to be more prosperous, developed and civilized, worthy of each government to highly care about and invest in. Although education encourage students and people to question and criticize, and thus may bring nothing or even bad effect to our society, we could reduce these if properly deal with.结尾还是不知道你的观点。好像你整篇是在说教育会对社会带来坏处，但是更多的是好处。那么，这是题目希望看到的教育是否有助于社会和谐么？你彻底的藐视了“和谐”二字，转为论述好处。我的感觉是，你真的跑题了。绝对要重新写。

:L其实我写这篇的时候也很不爽地说，一直在重复~
你再写一遍，我们探讨探讨。:p