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joythrutearUID: 184670

41. "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
研究界的一些非主流领域，比如星象学、占卜术和意念及超自然探索，在社会中起到了很重要的作用，因为它们满足了人们无法从主流科学获得的需求。

提纲：
1（正）非主流领域有好处，可以安抚人。
2（负）在个人的角度讲，可能导致误导，或者伤害他人。
3（负）在社会角度讲，不利于科技发展，并且可能被坏人利用。


Are nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal essential in society? The speaker claims so, for the reason that these areas can satisfy human needs that are not solved by mainstream science. I concede that nonmainstream areas can help people in some cases. However, in my view, relying on nonmainstream areas might turn out to be more harmful than beneficial.

Admittedly, nonmainstream areas can satisfy certain human need, which mainstream science cannot. For instance, everyday we humans face many choices and have to make various decisions. When it comes to the decisions that are related to one's future, job, and wealth, it is usually hard to decide. Since no kind of mainstream science can tell the consequences that each decision may lead to, one may tend to get help from fortune-tellers. In fact, we will never know the decisions we did not choose is better or worse, however, to a certain extent, fortune-telling do free people from struggling to make decisions.

Nonetheless, nonmainstream areas are not rooted in reason, rendering them actually unreliable. A fortune-teller is not responsible for one's fortune. One will benefit more by collecting information and advice from his or her relatives and friends rather than asking a fortune-teller for help. If a person deeply believes in psychic and paranormal pursuits for a long time, he or she is likely to have many strange ideas, which will result in a poor communication with others. Moreover, facing different opinions, he or she may even hurt others.

On a social level, nonmainstream areas are harmful to mainstream science, as well as society. The popularity of nonmainstream areas will surely impede the development of mainstream science. People will never search for the unknown by a scientific means, but to find indications from stars. People will never need a healthy lifestyle and advanced medical care, but an evidence of afterlife. Moreover, in this case, people are easy to be made use of for evil purposes, such as terrorism and wars.

In sum, I concede that nonmainstream areas can help people feel better when they are in problems that mainstream science cannot address. However, since nonmainstream areas do not stem from logic and reason, people risk in making wrong decisions and do harm to others, as well as society.

tinmasterUID: 2101978

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tinmasterUID: 2101978

Are nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal essential in society? The speaker claims so, for the reason that these areas can satisfy human needs that are not solved[解决的对象不是needs] by mainstream science. I concede that nonmainstream areas can help people in some cases. However, in my view, relying on nonmainstream areas might turn out to be more harmful than beneficial.[开头不错,句式比较好]
Admittedly, nonmainstream areas can satisfy certain human need[加上s], which mainstream science cannot. For instance, everyday we humans face many choices and have to make various decisions. When it comes to the decisions that are related to one's future, job, and wealth, it is usually hard to decide. Since no kind of mainstream science can tell the consequences that each decision may lead to, one may tend to get help from fortune-tellers. In fact, we will never know the decisions we did not choose is better or worse, however, to a certain extent, fortune-telling do free people from struggling to make decisions.[这段语法我没有看,不过我觉得观点还是比较好的,能说出非主流的好处,但是一半老美喜欢admittedly放在最后一段]

Nonetheless, nonmainstream areas are not rooted in reason, rendering them actually unreliable. A fortune-teller is not responsible for one's fortune. One will benefit more by collecting information and advice[应该用被动] from his or her relatives and friends rather than asking a fortune-teller for help. If a person deeply believes in psychic and paranormal pursuits for a long time, he or she is likely to have many strange ideas, which will result in a poor communication with others. Moreover, facing different opinions, he or she may even hurt others. [句子和短语运用得很好,只是最后结尾好像有点问题,因为无论是不是非主流,持相反意见总是或多或小伤害了别人]

On a social level, nonmainstream areas are harmful to mainstream science, as well as society. The popularity of nonmainstream areas will surely impede the development of mainstream science. People will never search for the unknown by a scientific means, but to find indications from stars. People will never need a healthy lifestyle and advanced medical care, but an evidence of afterlife. Moreover, in this case, people are easy to be made use of for evil purposes, such as terrorism and wars.[这一段很好,我觉得,句式用得好,有点抒情,而且连接过渡很好]
In sum, I concede that nonmainstream areas can help people feel better when they are in problems that mainstream science cannot address. However, since nonmainstream areas do not stem from logic and reason, people risk in making wrong decisions and do harm to others, as well as society. [结尾有点问题,因为你的结论的推论是不是主流的科学就是错误的,ets很多人都经常怀疑科学的东西]


[总体来说,你的英语水平很好,句子运用和短语运用都不错,思想也很好,我要向你多多学习,呵呵,只要你注意一些小细节,我觉得就很好了,以后我要向你多多学习,呵呵]

foreveraUID: 202035

Are nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal essential in society? The speaker claims so, for the reason that these areas can satisfy human needs that are not solved by mainstream science. I concede that nonmainstream areas can help people in some cases. However, in my view, relying on nonmainstream areas might turn out to be more harmful than rather thanbeneficial.开头还不错

Admittedly, nonmainstream areas can satisfy certain human need, which mainstream science cannot. For instance, everyday we humans好象有点多余 face many choices and have to make various decisions. When it comes to the decisions that are related to one's future, job, and wealth, it is usually hard to decide.[color=Red] 和主题没有紧密联系的句子最好简洁一点Since no kind of mainstream science can tell the consequences that each decision may lead to 为什么mainstream不能满足人们的需求没有说出来 one may tend to get help from fortune-tellers. In fact, we will never know the decisions we did not choose is better or worse, however, to a certain extent, fortune-telling do free people from struggling to make decisions.

Nonetheless, nonmainstream areas are not rooted in reason, rendering them actually unreliable. A fortune-teller is not responsible for one's fortune. One will 被动benefit more by collecting information and advice from his or her relatives and friends rather than asking a fortune-teller for help. If a person deeply believes in psychic and paranormal pursuits for a long time, he or she is likely to have many strange ideas, which will result in a poor communication with others. Moreover, facing different opinions, he or she may even hurt others. 这一段的论述似乎和这段的TS联系的不紧...你说了那些非主流的are not rooted in reason,下面就应该把为什么是这样说明白.

On a social level, nonmainstream areas are harmful to mainstream science, as well as society. The popularity of nonmainstream areas will surely impede the development of mainstream science. People will never search for the unknown by a scientific means, but to find indications from stars. People will never need a healthy lifestyle and advanced medical care, but an evidence of afterlife. Moreover, in this case, people are easy to be made use of for evil purposes, such as terrorism and wars.

In sum, I concede that nonmainstream areas can help people feel better when they are in problems that mainstream science cannot address. However, since nonmainstream areas do not stem from logic and reason, people risk in making wrong decisions and do harm to others, as well as society.

总体来说勉强可以，不过字数太少..论证的太单薄,缺少必要的例子.扣题也不是很好...语言上还可以, 希望多加努力

我的issue103:
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=319922
我也写过41,你也可以看一下
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=316953
不过41写的比较失败,还是最好看看103吧

naturalbeauUID: 2112291

整体结构比较清楚，条理清晰，语言还算流畅，值得学习，比我的好多了。不过好像字数偏少了一点，每一段的论证可以多加一些分论点，会更丰富一些。