issue121 Fantasy8.23作业(附提纲) 拍必回哦!

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issue121
提纲:
1.表明观点,不同意此说法
2.承认物种的消失在以前的确是进化的作用
3.现在物种消失绝大部分原因是因为人类对环境的改变远远超过了物种可进化的速度,人们应对物种的消失负责
4.科研需要也应该尽全力保护保护物种
5.总结,重复我的观点

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At various times in the geological past, many species have become extinct as a result of natural, rather than human, processes. Thus, there is no justification for society to make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.
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Various species, developed from the very begining of the earth's originality, are playing important roles in balancing the relationshipsof the natrue that many of them are being threatened to distinct toady. Is it only the result of naturue? Does this due to any other but more serious factors? Should people make extrordinary effors to protect the spicies in great danger? Answers vary considerablely amongst different people. As for me,  there is much to be done to save the endanger animals however  hard may be.

I do not deny that some nature catasophy happended thoughout history accounts for  the distinction."Nature selects the strong and discards the weak." THis is the main opionion according to Darlwin's Revolution Theoery. Many spicies disappeared because of their own disability to adopt the naturue ( such as climate and enimies ).The distinction of earth largest species which is ever known as disonaur is also the result of nature rather than huan's processes. However, with a further inspaction to the cliam that no need for human to protect the animals which are in danger ,we will find how fallicious it is. In terms of substantive level, the reasons mentioned below semm to be advisable and deserve more consideration.

The essential point for my propensity is that the rate of environmental changes has reached a more fast speed than ever before, and much of it based on human's progresses. The deforestation for farming, unrecycle waste dropped into the sea, buring more fossils than the earth could bear all have made the changing velosity too fast for species to follow or adopt. A survey , recently, issued by environmental department in the University of Pennsylvennia suggests until today, 90.4% of distinct spicies on the earth were disappeared in the last two decays whilst 87.9% of them suffer from the changing environment. They also pointed out acoording to their 7 years continuos researching program, the real killer of the species is the high speed in changing which is 10 times more than 7 years before. Today 3.7 kinds of animals and plants could never be found every minutes.  For instance, swimming bees, a special spicies of bees living beside the lakes in China died out in the year 1996 because people fill all the lakes in the West in order to develop ecnomics, which iwas the last land for the tiny animals to survive. Losing the lakes leaded to the defastration of their homes and food resources. No matter how well they could perform in the chain of living, those changes made by men would hardly be adopted. Therefore, human beings have the resposibility to adjust themselves in the way of processing to save the species.

What is more, scientists devote to find the laws of nature and the improvements of human's health conditions need old aged animals to do the research. In China, gigaint pandas are well protected not only because they are the symbol of the nation but also they are precious representative species in ancient times.How they survive in the long time revolutions? What did they possess after thousands of years living? Could human being progress in a more efficient way by learning from our ancesters? From them researchers may be able to answer these questions and thus they would investigate living habits or the clues of human's originality.

By presenting all the factors above, I strongly buttress the ideal that extraordinary efforts  for saving species is in great need.


用了70分钟, 566words, 速度还得加油!

大家纷纷指出这篇文章的错字太多,本人已总结教训,以后的习作每次自己用word修改了再传上来,绝对再不会让大家费好大的力气读完文章以后只记得满篇的错字了:p

[ Last edited by flealda on 2005-8-23 at 23:06 ]

michel_shaoUID: 204704

Various species, developed from the very begining of the earth's originality, are playing important roles in balancing the relationships of the natrue that many of them are being threatened to distinct toady. Is it only the result of naturue（是不是拼错了啊）? Does this due to any other but more serious factors? Should people make extrordinary effors to protect the spicies in great danger? Answers vary considerablely amongst different people. As for me,  there is much to be done to save the endanger animals however  hard may be。

I do not deny that some nature catasophy happended thoughout history accounts for  the distinction."Nature selects the strong and discards the weak." THis is the main opionion according to Darlwin's Revolution Theoery. Many spicies disappeared because of their own disability to adopt the naturue ( such as climate and enimies ).The distinction of earth largest species which is ever known as disonaur is also the result of nature rather than huan's processes. However, with a further inspaction to the cliam that no need for human to protect the animals which are in danger ,we will find how fallicious it is. In terms of substantive level, the reasons mentioned below semm （SEEM？）to be advisable and deserve more consideration.

The essential point for my propensity is that the rate of environmental changes has reached a more fast speed than ever before, and much of it based on human's progresses. The deforestation for farming, unrecycle waste dropped into the sea, buring more fossils than the earth could bear all have made the changing velosity too fast for species to follow or adopt. A survey , recently, issued by environmental department in the University of Pennsylvennia suggests until today, 90.4% of distinct spicies on the earth were disappeared in the last two decays whilst 87.9% of them suffer from the changing environment. They also pointed out acoording to their 7 years continuos researching program, the real killer of the species is the high speed in changing which is 10 times more than 7 years before. Today 3.7 kinds of animals and plants could never be found every minutes.  For instance, swimming bees, a special spicies of bees living beside the lakes in China died out in the year 1996 because people fill all the lakes in the West in order to develop ecnomics, which iwas the last land for the tiny animals to survive. Losing the lakes leaded to the defastration of their homes and food resources. No matter how well they could perform in the chain of living, those changes made by men would hardly be adopted. Therefore, human beings have the resposibility to adjust themselves in the way of processing to save the species.（数据很翔实啊）

What is more, scientists devote to find the laws of nature and the improvements of human's health conditions need old aged animals to do the research. In China, gigaint pandas are well protected not only because they are the symbol of the nation but also they are precious representative species in ancient times.How they survive in the long time revolutions? What did they possess after thousands of years living? Could human being progress in a more efficient way by learning from our ancesters? From them researchers may be able to answer these questions and thus they would investigate living habits or the clues of human's originality.

By presenting all the factors above, I strongly buttress the ideal that extraordinary efforts  for saving species is in great need.

楼主写的很好啊，在我看来，语言很流畅的。
关于数据的那一段，想问一下，在考试中可能不会记得那么确切啊？
还有相比起第一段，最后一段似乎太短了一点点

总之，我觉得不错的了
想问楼主语言是怎么积累的啊？

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[ Last edited by michel_shao on 2005-8-23 at 21:11 ]

flealdaUID: 2118390

楼上的兄弟?

michel_shaoUID: 204704

那时候在帮你看

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flealdaUID: 2118390

好感谢你尽心尽力的看这么长的文章!
来一一回答你的问题哈:)
1.数据全是编的(不要打我哦 呵呵),不过看起来还比较真,看来编论据有点效果了
2.不光是最后一段有点短,而且越往后的段落就越短,这是因为时间问题,是不是有点头重脚轻的感觉?:O
3.刚考完托福,现在才开始写作文,语言没怎么积累也没看什么材料,就是把句子拉长拉长再拉长就行了,再:D就是不要一个词反复用:)

[ Last edited by flealda on 2005-8-23 at 18:23 ]

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Various species, developed from the very begining of the earth's originality, are playing important roles in balancing the relationshipsof the natrue that many of them are being threatened to distinct toady. Is it only the result of naturue? Does this due to any other but more serious factors? Should people make extrordinary effors to protect the spicies in great danger? Answers vary considerablely amongst ((?)) different people. As for me,  there is much to be done to save the endanger animals however  hard may be.

I do not deny that some nature catasophy happended thoughout history accounts for  the distinction."Nature selects the strong and discards the weak." THis is the main opionion according to Darlwin's Revolution Theoery. Many spicies disappeared because of their own disability to adopt the naturue ( such as climate and enimies ).The distinction of earth largest species which is ever known as disonaur is also the result of nature rather than huan's processes. However, with a further inspaction to the cliam that no need for human to protect the animals which are in danger ,we will find how fallicious it is. In terms of substantive level, the reasons mentioned below semm to be advisable and deserve more consideration.

The essential point for my propensity is that the rate of environmental changes has reached a more fast     ((much faster))        speed than ever before, and much of it based on human's progresses. The deforestation for farming, unrecycle waste dropped into the sea, buring more fossils (烧化石!!!!???coals or petrol))than the earth could bear all have made the changing velosity too fast for species to follow or adopt. A survey , recently, issued by environmental department in the University of Pennsylvennia suggests until today, 90.4% of distinct spicies on the earth were disappeared in the last two decays whilst (这是英国用法!!!who is ets?)87.9% of them suffer from the changing environment. (不错,即使是编的看起来也很真实)They also pointed out acoording to their 7 years continuos researching program, the real killer of the species is the high speed in changing which is 10 times more than 7 years before. (high speed is real killer???)))Today 3.7 kinds of animals and plants could never be found every minutes.  For instance, swimming bees, a special spicies of bees living beside the lakes in China died out in the year 1996 because people fill all the lakes((填湖?first to increase the area)) in the West((of China)) in order to develop ecnomics, which ***iwas the last land for the tiny animals to survive. Losing the lakes leaded to the defastration of their homes and food resources. No matter how well they could perform in the chain of living, those changes made by men would hardly be adopted. Therefore, human beings have the resposibility to adjust themselves in the way of processing to save the species.

What is more, scientists devote to find the laws of nature and the improvements of human's health conditions need old aged animals to do the research. In China, gigaint pandas are well protected not only because they are the symbol of the nation but also they are precious representative species in ancient times.How they survive in the long time revolutions? What did they possess after thousands of years living? Could human being progress in a more efficient way by learning from our ancesters? From them researchers may be able to answer these questions and thus they would investigate living habits or the clues of human's originality.

By presenting all the factors above, I strongly buttress the ideal that extraordinary efforts  for saving species is in great need.
中间一段太长,最好在后段加个example
引高人的观点
1、  从自然演化的角度来看，每一年都会有相当数量的物种因为无法适应环境以及其他自然原因导致灭绝，无论人类是否对其进行了影响。如果人类花费大量的金钱和努力来试图阻止自然演变的过程，不光不会有很大的收效同时成为人类沉重的包袱，同时也对整个自然界没有好处

2、  没有人能够否认人类对于自然的污染导致了大量的无辜生物灭绝。随着人类工业的发展……

3、  投入金钱和努力将人类对于自然的影响减少到最小是有必要的。一方面，自然界的生物之间有食物链，破坏了就完蛋

4、  保持地球上物种的多样性同样有利于人类认识自然并促进科技的进步。比如鸟帮助人类发明飞机

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ldarobinUID: 2120017

注意 此地有熊熊出没！！

flealdaUID: 2118390

"high speed is real killer"?我的意思是环境的急剧变化是real killer
怎么表述呢?high speed in changing the environment是real killer可以吧?
buring more fossils (烧化石!!!!???coals or petrol))这里是错的有点搞笑:)

写第2个理由想了半天只有大熊猫的例子,挤不出来牙膏了:(  还有什么例子啊?

高人的观点
1、  从自然演化的角度来看，每一年都会有相当数量的物种因为无法适应环境以及其他自然原因导致灭绝，无论人类是否对其进行了影响。如果人类花费大量的金钱和努力来试图阻止自然演变的过程，不光不会有很大的收效同时成为人类沉重的包袱，同时也对整个自然界没有好


怎么说理呢?

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ldarobin不要闹了,提点意见吧

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谢谢LG的支持!

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