argument188 药物在男女上的效用

sallyxinduUID：2131253

188A new report suggests that men and women experience pain very differently from one another, and that doctors should consider these differences when prescribing pain medications. When researchers administered the same dosage of kappa opioids—a painkiller—to 28 men and 20 women who were having their wisdom teeth extracted, the women reported feeling much less pain than the men, and the easing of pain lasted considerably longer in women. This research suggests that kappa opioids should be prescribed for women whenever pain medication is required, whereas men should be given other kinds of pain medication. In addition, researchers should reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women.
Outline
1，        不温不热的慢性疼痛并不一定比剧烈的短期疼痛好
2，        28男20女不平均，而且没说明是随机选取的，所以不能代表普遍性。
3，        这些人之前的状况是一样的吗？也许男的本来就要差些
4，        kappa opioids不具有代表性，所以不能因此而得出研究者应该重申所有药物在男女上的不同。

正文
The argumentation seems to be reasonable at first glance, but when we have a careful and second thought, other concealed but imperative facters betray the disguise of the argumentation. All these factors will be presented in the following section to demonstrate the groundless reasoning of the report.

At the first place, it’s hard to definate what is the good effect of painkillers in detail. Is it the chronic and comparatively slight aching feeling or the instant acute and torturous feeling before compelete recovery? If it’s the first one, it cannot be denied that Kappa opioids receive its better property in women than that in men. Neverthless, if the definatiion of painkillers’ good effect is the latter one, kappa opioidas conversely have exerted more efficacious effect on men, consequently, it’s absurd to avoid prescribing this medicine in men but instead in women. We have to first make certain what’s the substaintial result patients want to gain from the medicien should we reach the conclusion that kappa opioids is better carried out in women.

Furthermore, the inverse proportion of 28 men versus 20 women is not scientific per se in that the experienced populations are not even distributed. Let’s make a hypothesis here, if 10 out of 28 men are having chronic but relatively slight pain after taking the medicine while the rest 18 have strong but shortly ended pain. Meanwhile, 10 women receive lasting slight pain and another half 10 are suffered from instante acute pain. As a result, the final number 10 of slight pain suffered man is smaller than that of women, 14. But can we draw the conclusion from the plausible bigger amount of lasting slight pain suffered people in women than that in men? Of course not, the result is neither persuasive nor well-grounded because the total populations of men and women are different in size respectively. In addition to the uneven dispersed quantity of people, 28 and 20 are not typical or representative per se  since the numbers are not big enough to cover all the potential sick people. The research and investigation may just put into action in a group where women feel less pain than men after the extraction.

Also, the auguer unjustifiably suggested Kappa opioids should be prescribed to women whenever the medicine is required, based on the research result, however, have those investigators taken physical and psychological conditions into consideration when doing the research. There is inextricablly high possiblity that those experienced men have weaker physique than women, some of them may just finisned having a surgeon while others may have certain innate disease. In this sense, it’s nature that they suffer a lot after the extraction of wisdom teeth.

Eventually, we should point out that kappa opoids is no panacea and even kappa opoids plays an unsuccessful influence on men, we cannot reach the conclusion that all medicine have worse effect on men and therefore researchers should reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women.

没计时间．忘了，初稿没修改，错误态度别骂我，呵呵，berlinbear　帮我看仔细点哈．
嘿嘿，我交作业交的最早，今天下午没课就赶紧写了

[ Last edited by 11yaoyao on 2005-12-6 at 20:02 ]

BerlinbearUID：207694

正文
The argumentation seems to be reasonable at first glance, but when we have a careful and second thought, other concealed but imperative facters (factors) betray the disguise of the argumentation. All these factors will be presented in the following section to demonstrate the groundless reasoning of the report.

At the first place, it’s hard to definite (define) what is the good effect of painkillers in detail.(从句语序：what the good effect of painkillers is ) Is it the chronic and comparatively slight aching feeling or the instant acute and torturous feeling before complete(complete) recovery? If it’s the first one, it cannot be denied that Kappa opioids receive its better property in women than that in men. Neverthless(Nevertheless), if the definatiion(definition) of painkillers’ good effect is the latter one, kappa opioidas conversely have exerted more efficacious effect on men, consequently, it’s absurd to avoid prescribing this medicine in men but instead in women. We have to first make certain what’s the substaintial(substantial) result patients want to gain from the medicien (medicine) should we reach the conclusion that kappa opioids(?) is better carried out in women.

Furthermore, the inverse proportion of 28 men versus 20 women is not scientific per se in that the experienced populations are not even distributed. Let’s make a hypothesis here, if 10 out of 28 men are having chronic but relatively slight pain after taking the medicine while the rest 18 have strong but shortly ended pain. Meanwhile, 10 women receive lasting slight pain and another half 10 are suffered from instante(instant) acute pain. As a result, the final number 10 of slight pain suffered man is smaller than that of women, 14. But can we draw the conclusion from the plausible bigger amount of lasting slight pain suffered people in women than that in men? Of course not, the result is neither persuasive nor well-grounded because the total populations of men and women are different in size respectively. In addition to the uneven dispersed quantity of people, 28 and 20 are not typical or representative per se  since the numbers are not big enough to cover all the potential sick people. The research and investigation may just put into action in a group where women feel less pain than men after the extraction.

Also, the auguer(arguer) unjustifiably suggested Kappa opioids should be prescribed to women whenever the medicine is required, based on the research result, however, have those investigators taken physical and psychological conditions into consideration when doing the research.(后半句应该是个问句吧？标点问题) There is inextricablly (inextricably) high possiblity (possibility) that those experienced men have weaker physique than women, some of them may just finisned (finish情态动词后跟动词原型) having a surgeon while others may have certain innate disease. In this sense, it’s nature that they suffer a lot after the extraction of wisdom teeth.

Eventually, we should point out that kappa opoids is no panacea and even kappa opoids plays an unsuccessful influence on men, we cannot reach the conclusion that all medicine have worse effect on men and therefore researchers should reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women.

文中一些拼写方面的错误稍微多了点，检查一下就可以避免了，呵呵。
另外，个人觉得写作时可以尝试更多变的句型，丰富文章。

sallyxinduUID：2131253

我简直就是错别字大王，惭愧，谢谢组长，呵呵

sallyxinduUID：2131253

下次天使用彩色给我改了哈，眼睛都看痛了，难找啊

BerlinbearUID：207694

好的哈~~~不好意思~~
呵呵，我都忘了这篇有已经改完贴上来了，刚检查作业时还吓了一跳，以为自己没带好头呢~~