issue 196 awonder(Toheart)第一次作业。拍拍拍，一顿乱拍！

awonderUID: 200778

196"Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."

提纲：
We cannot deny that technology creates problems that may threaten or damage the quality of life. But the overall advantages of technology overwhelm its disadvantages.
1. Evevrybody is sharing the advantages the modern technology brings to us.
2. Though the innovation of technology betters our life, it also creates problems some even threaten or damage the quality of life.
3. Old technology will replaced by new ones. And the problems created by old ones will be solved by new ones.


The break-neck speed of technological innovation gives us a world of high quality of life. But sometimes, we may suffer from the negative effects brought about the modern technology. That’s why someone says technology is a double-edged weapon. However, the overall advantages of technology overwhelm its disadvantages.
Everybody is sharing the advantages the modern technology brings to us. With the development of technology, life becomes more and more convenient and airplanes can transport passengers to a long distance in short time. Businessman just needs to press on some buttons on the phone then can communicate with customers a few seconds later. Without walking out home students can read books in the library of the schools in the other side of the globe through internet. How can all this happen to us without the innovation of technologies?
A coin always has two sides. As we are sharing the advantages of technology, we also have to face the problems created by it. TVs, cell phones, computer displays, and all the possible devices may be radioactive .Modern people, especially those city dwellers are annoyed by the traffic noise and air pollution. As the technology is also used in wars, the damage made by advanced bombs, missiles or even atomic bombs is much more serious than ever before. Comparing with 100 years ago, when the technology was not as advanced as today, people were enjoying the pastoral peace, and didn’t have to worry about these interruptions.
However, it is a developing world. Technology is also developing in a high speed we cannot mature, those obsolete technology and products would be replace by more advanced ones, which is a constant regulation. Problems brought about by technology could be eventually solved by technology itself.  As an illustration, the traditional, CRT television and computer displays, which are disliked because of its inborn radiation, is being replaced by some more advanced products, such as liquid crystal displays without any radiation. In recent years, scientist are researching some more clean and efficient energy, such as nuclear power, solar power and electricity to take the place of the pollute traditional resources including petrol and natural gas, which may be depleted sooner or later. Moreover, the legislation of computer-crime law indicates that laws and regulations could restrict some illegal activities using high- technology.
To put all in a nut shell, we have to ask ourselves what will happen if this increasing power of the twofold use of technology continues, but we could be more tolerant based on all of its contributions, The world is in progress while the technology is still developing, it could, eventually, solve most of the problems it creates, although not all of them.

sudongpoUID: 2125302

The break-neck speed of technological innovation gives us a world of high quality of life. But sometimes, we may suffer from the negative effects brought about the modern technology. That’s why someone says technology is a double-edged weapon. However,(in my view 个人觉得应该点明是自己的观点这样比较好) the overall advantages of technology overwhelm its disadvantages.

Everybody is sharing（enjoying 更合适） the advantages the modern technology brings to us. With the development of technology, life becomes more and more convenient and（and用的有点逻辑问题，后面是支持前面的例子，应该用引出例子的吧）airplanes can transport passengers to a long distance in (a) short time. Businessman just needs to press on some buttons on the phone then (they) can communicate with customers a few seconds later. Without walking out home students can read books in the( library of the schools )(简单写成schools’ library 更通顺)in the other side of the globe through internet. How can all this happen to us without the innovation of technologies?

A coin always has two sides（Every coin has two sides 不过这句话都用烂了，小心雷同哟）. As we are sharing the advantages of technology,（这句话和前面有一句完全一样，其实可以换其他的表达方式更好） we also have to face the problems created by it.（为什么所有的例子前都没有任何连接词呢，这样很生硬的） TVs, cell phones, computer displays, and all the possible devices may be radioactive（radioactive 了又怎样呢？是否应该说明是harm to health） .Modern people, especially those city dwellers are annoyed by the traffic noise and air pollution. As the（the 在这指代不明，可以用some certain ） technology is also used in wars, the damage made by advanced bombs, missiles or even atomic bombs is much more serious(这个词感觉有点怪) than ever before. Comparing with 100 years ago, when the technology was not as advanced as today, people were enjoying the pastoral peace, and didn’t have to worry about these interruptions.

However, it is a developing world. Technology is also developing in a high speed we cannot mature, those obsolete technology and products would be replace by more advanced ones, which is a constant regulation. Problems brought about by technology could be eventually solved by technology itself.  As an illustration, the traditional, CRT television and computer displays, which are disliked because of its inborn radiation, is being replaced by some more advanced products, such as liquid crystal displays without any radiation. In recent years, scientist are researching some more clean and efficient energy, such as nuclear power, solar power and electricity to take the place of the pollute traditional resources including petrol and natural gas, which may be depleted sooner or later. Moreover, the legislation of computer-crime law indicates that laws and regulations could restrict some illegal activities using high- technology.
(先支持，再反对，再支持，似乎逻辑上不适很分明，最好避免)

To put all in a nut shell, we have to ask ourselves what will happen if this increasing power of the twofold use of technology continues, but we could be more tolerant based on all of its contributions, The world is in progress while the technology is still developing, it could, eventually, solve most of the problems it creates, although not all of them.（最好再点一下你的论点）

总的来说不错了，不过语法上有些小问题自己多注意，加油呀！:victory:

awonderUID: 200778

谢谢sudongpo 的指导，说得很中肯，大家一起加油！

lw841107UID: 2163001

嗬嗬，2楼改过的我就不改了。我也是新手，孤陋寡闻请见谅，不过是认真改了：）。
The break-neck speed of technological innovation gives us a world of high quality of life. But sometimes, we may suffer from the negative effects brought about by the modern technology. That’s why someone says technology is a double-edged weapon.(总觉得应该加上In my opinion或 I disagree with the speaker类的字样) However, the overall advantages of technology overwhelm its disadvantages.(为什么觉得overwhelm有掩盖的意思？是不是应该说更多或者如后所言解决？)Everybody is sharing the advantages the modern technology brings to us. With the development of technology, life becomes more and more convenient such as airplanes can transport passengers to a long distance in short time. Businessman just needs to press on some buttons on the phone then can communicate with customers a few seconds later. Without walking out home students can read books in the library of the schools in the other side of the globe through internet. How can all this happen to us without the innovation of technologies?
A coin always has two sides. As we are sharing the advantages of technology, we also have to face the problems created by it. TVs, cell phones, computer displays, and all the possible devices may be radioactive .Modern people, especially those city dwellers are annoyed by the traffic noise and air pollution. As the technology is also used in wars, the damage made by advanced bombs, missiles or even atomic bombs is much more serious than ever before. Comparing with 100 years ago, when the technology was not as advanced as today, people were enjoying the pastoral peace, and didn’t have to worry about these interruptions.
However, it is a developing world. Technology is also developing in a high speed we cannot mature, those obsolete technology and products would be replace by more advanced ones, which is a constant regulation.(感觉太肯定了，似乎用过去时更为恰当，谁能预测未来呢？) Problems brought about by technology could be eventually solved by technology itself.  As an illustration, the traditional, CRT television and computer displays, which are disliked because of its inborn radiation, is being replaced by some more advanced products, such as liquid crystal displays without any radiation. In recent years, scientist are researching some more clean and efficient energy, such as nuclear power, solar power and electricity to take the place of the pollute traditional resources including petrol and natural gas, which may be depleted sooner or later. Moreover, the legislation of computer-crime law indicates that laws and regulations could restrict some illegal activities using high- technology.
To put all in a nut shell, we have to ask ourselves what will happen if this increasing power of the twofold use of technology continues, but we could be more tolerant based on all of its contributions, The world is in progress while the technology is still developing, it could, eventually, solve most of the problems it creates, although not all of them.
（Technology creates more problems than it solves，嗬嗬，这里的solves包不包括文中所说得它自己产生的呢？也就是说，题目似乎已经提到了technology能够解决一些问题（包括它自己产生的），但关键是more or less.似乎应该着重论证。嗬嗬，仅供参考。）