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dinddind2003UID: 196353

TOPIC：ISSUE 208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
WORDS：513          TIME：1:04:15          DATE：2006-1-22

It is true that sometimes influenced by some elements, the way some people look, dress, and act do not reveals their attitudes and interests, needless to say that it can tell about a society’s ideas and values, however, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its ideas and values. Moreover, in most cases we can get a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

Admittedly, sometimes the way people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests because of some limits. So by observing them we can not get a society’s ideas and values correctly. In a prosperous society, there is always a group of poor people, although they are not well dressed, we can not conclude that they do not want to live a wealthy life, nor can we judge the prosperity of the society through these people. In a society which is putting more and more high value on environment, people can not operate every heavy industry factory without any pollution. Although people have to produce some waste which is dangerous to the nature, we can not conclude that they are willing to destroy their environment, nor can we see how much emphasis the society put on to protect nature.

However, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its ideas and values. After all, people would like to dress what they prefer to, do what they like. For example, although there are always a group of poor people in a wealth society, the majority of the society is wealthy, who dress expensively, put on garish make-up, their look, dress certainly tell us their luxury. Although many heavy industries have to pollute the earth, they are trying their best to find a way to produce without or with little pollution, their action betrays their wish to protect the nature and the high value the society put on the environment.

Furthermore, sometimes the appearance and behavior of people in a society can betray some common ideas and values of the society. Influenced by some elements, people in a society may share some attitudes which we can see through their look, dress and act.. With the society becoming busier and busier, nearly every people racing with time, they dress to make them look much more efficiently, they prefer reading newspaper when eating breakfast, listening to a workman when walking on a street, listening to the radio when doing housework. They will be worried if they meet a traffic jam which is considered a waste of time, they will be happy in the night before sleep if recommending that they have achieved a lot of work in the day. We may hardly understand how much emphasis this society put on time unless we observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

In sum, although some people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests and a society’s ideas and values, if we survey enough members of the society carefully, we can get ideas and values of a society correctly.

forever远UID: 2177600

TOPIC：ISSUE 208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
WORDS：513          TIME：1:04:15          DATE：2006-1-22

It is true that sometimes influenced by some elements, the way some people look, dress, and act do not reveals their attitudes and interests, needless to say that it can tell about a society’s ideas and values, however, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its ideas and values. (与上逻辑关系不清:confused:)Moreover, in most cases we can get a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

Admittedly, sometimes the way people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests because of some limits. So by observing them we can not get a society’s ideas and values correctly. In a prosperous society, there is always a group of poor people, although they are not well dressed, we can not conclude that they do not want to live a wealthy life, nor can we judge the prosperity of the society through these people. (主语多)In a society which is putting more and more high value on environment, people can not operate every heavy industry factory without any pollution. Although people have to produce some waste which is dangerous to the nature, we can not conclude that they are willing to destroy their environment, nor can we see how much emphasis the society put on to protect nature.

However, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its ideas and values. (修饰关系不太清
)After all, people would like to dress what they prefer to, do what they like. For example, although there are always a group of poor people in a wealth society, the majority of the society is wealthy, who dress expensively, put on garish make-up, their look, dress certainly tell us their luxury. Although many heavy industries have to pollute the earth, they are trying their best to find a way to produce without or with little pollution, their action betrays their wish to protect the nature and the high value the society put on the environment. (为什么要于上段例子重复?对应么?我觉得换个比较好.)

Furthermore, sometimes the appearance and behavior of people in a society can betray some common ideas and values of the society. Influenced by some elements, people in a society may share some attitudes which we can see through their look, dress and act.. With the society becoming busier and busier, nearly every people (person)racing with time, they dress to make them look much more efficiently, they (略去)prefer reading newspaper when eating breakfast, listening to a workman (walkman)when walking on a street, listening to the radio when doing housework. They will be worried if they meet a traffic jam which is considered a waste of time, they will be happy in the night before sleep if recommending? that they have achieved a lot of work in the day. We may hardly understand how much emphasis this society put on time unless we observing (obverse)the appearance and behavior of its people.

In sum, although some people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests and a society’s ideas and values, if we survey enough members of the society carefully, we can get ideas and values of a society correctly.(结论有点突然,因上文一直在举反例)

(第二段,三段不构成转折,四段也并为进一步说明,我认为能反映和不能反映最好各一段,然后再说如果人数足够多可以说明,再下结论,个人之见,仅供参考.

下为我的第四次作业:(希望帮改改,多谢)
177. "The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes."
  

I totally agree with the argument that the study of different disciplines will change our view of the world,because study is not a process of infusing different knowledge into our mind,but an acquirement of different kinds of ways of thinking and practising, which will totally alter the world in our eyes and our reaction to the world.
Different disciplines have different rules and characteristics.A great British philosopher Bacon had said(and I paraphrase):"Histories make men wise;poems witty;the mathematics subtle;natural philosophy deep;moral grave;logic and rhetoric able to contend." I think it explains the truth deeply and exactly.
History is a mirror,through which we will have the prevision of our own and even our community's destiny, absorb the exprience of success or failure from the similar events,and distinguish virtue and evil.From the rout of Fascismo, we can learn that evil will be defeated by righteousness one of these days;from the example of Rooselvelt, we get that people who can defeat us are ourselves and practicality is a cherish charecter of a leader; from the great discovery of Newton's laws,we can understand a curious eyes to question the ordinary things is the most valuable creative originals;and from the behavior of those great names like shining stars--Gandi,Joan of Arc,Mother Teresa, we really and truly know what is loyalty,bravery and kindness.
Science disciplines have precise logical reasoning and based on data and experiments mostly.Physics and chemistry all abstract rules and methods from ordinary phenomenons,and then utilize these rules and methods to enrich people's life and produce what they need.The study of these disciplines will not only help us understand countless natural phenomenons, but also train our ability of solving different problems. For instance,the various novelty and creative experiments which once illustrate great theories will also give us inspirations to how to break the conventions to realize our aims by an indirect way.In the mean time, the scientific precise attitude and logical thinking will promote our rational and sober thinking which is always the sucessful leaders,businessmen and scientists' charcteristics.Ambition and ardor are the engine of our life train,but without rational and sober thinking and behavior, which is similar to the oil, our train can not run at all.It is the learning of scientific sciences, the complex world in our mind become orderly and under control of our hands.
Poems represent feelings-- ardor,slop over,resent,ect.Poems will give us numberless imagination and curiosity of the world,because in an poetic eyes, everyday of life is different,which has different colours.However,in a physics scientist eyes,the world consists of different atoms or molecules,which moves according to the rules of newton's laws or quantum mechanics.Maybe scientific sciences reflect the true banausic world ;on the contrary, arts reflect the true feeling world,just as a great Spanish painter Picasso has said(and I paraphrase),art is a lie that tells the truth.
All in all, as in one thousand eyes have one thousand Hamlet,the world is diverse in different eyes of people who have different discipline backgrounds, which alter the world in our eyes and at the end alter our life styles.

bohemian00UID: 2176063

TOPIC：ISSUE 208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
WORDS：513          TIME：1:04:15          DATE：2006-1-22

It is true that sometimes influenced by some elements, the way some people look, dress, and act do not reveals their attitudes and interests, needless to say that it can tell about a society’s ideas and values, however, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its（their） ideas and values. Moreover, in most cases we can get a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

Admittedly, sometimes the way people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests because of some limits. So by observing them we can not get a society’s ideas and values correctly. In a prosperous society, there is always a group of poor people, although they are not well dressed, we can not conclude that they do not want to live a wealthy life, nor can we judge the prosperity of the society through these people. （倒装的好，学习）In a society which is putting more and more high value on environment, people can not operate every heavy industry factory without any pollution（感觉这句有点不太顺，是不是写成 people can not operate heavy industry without producing any pollution好一些）. Although people have to produce some waste which is dangerous to the nature, we can not conclude that they are willing to destroy their environment, nor can we see how much emphasis the society put on to protect nature（这个例子还挺恰当，我应该学习）.

However, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its ideas and values. After all, people would like to dress what they prefer to, do what they like. For example, although there are always a group of poor people in a wealth society, the majority of the society is wealthy, who dress expensively, put on garish make-up, their look, dress certainly tell us their luxury. Although many heavy industries have to pollute the earth, they are trying their best to find a way to produce without or with little pollution(produce pollution 有点频繁了，是否可换成find a way to limit the pollution) , their action betrays their wish to protect the nature and the high value the society put on the environment.

Furthermore, sometimes the appearance and behavior of people in a society can betray some common ideas and values of the society. Influenced by some elements, people in a society may share some attitudes which we can see through their look, dress and act. With the society becoming busier and busier, nearly every people racing with time（我觉得这句应该作为作为主句，因为前面有with 然后逗号隔开后就不应该用现在分词了）, they dress themselves (dress 及物动词）to make them look much more efficiently, they prefer reading newspaper when eating breakfast, listening to a workman when walking on a street, ( listening to the radio when doing housework这个貌似不写也行，因为listening 已经有了）. They will be worried if they meet a traffic jam which is considered a waste of time, they will be happy in the night before sleep if recommending that they have achieved a lot of work in the day. We may hardly understand how much emphasis this society put on time unless we observing the appearance and behaviors of its people.

In sum, although some people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests and a society’s ideas and values, if we survey enough members of the society carefully, we can get ideas and values of a society correctly.

总体把握还是不错的：）
刚开始读的时候，我也没搞请第一段逻辑关系，不过后来看懂了，似乎第一段否定有点多，所以有点难懂

[ 本帖最后由 bohemian00 于 2006-1-26 00:55 编辑 ]

dinddind2003UID: 196353

It is true that sometimes influenced by some elements, the way some people look, dress, and act do not reveals their attitudes and interests, needless to say that it can tell about a society’s ideas and values, however, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its ideas and values. (与上逻辑关系不清 )（some 改成 some other我的逻辑是有些人的行为不表现态度，而有些表现，这个逻辑清楚了吗？）Moreover, in most cases we can get a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

Admittedly, sometimes the way people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests because of some limits. So by observing them we can not get a society’s ideas and values correctly. In a prosperous society, there is always a group of poor people, although they are not well dressed, we can not conclude that they do not want to live a wealthy life, nor can we judge the prosperity of the society through these people. (主语多) （是多了，把前面第一个逗号改句号，呵呵）In a society which is putting more and more high value on environment, people can not operate every heavy industry factory without any pollution. Although people have to produce some waste which is dangerous to the nature, we can not conclude that they are willing to destroy their environment, nor can we see how much emphasis the society put on to protect nature.

However, there are always some members of the society whose appearance and behavior betray its ideas and values. (修饰关系不太清
) （第一段我已经说了是什么逻辑关系了，所以这里把some 改成some other）After all, people would like to dress what they prefer to, do what they like. For example, although there are always a group of poor people in a wealth society, the majority of the society is wealthy, who dress expensively, put on garish make-up, their look, dress certainly tell us their luxury. Although many heavy industries have to pollute the earth, they are trying their best to find a way to produce without or with little pollution, their action betrays their wish to protect the nature and the high value the society put on the environment. (为什么要于上段例子重复?对应么?我觉得换个比较好.) （是对应的，我前两段意思是有些人们的行为不能表现他们的态度，而有些可以，所以我两段用相同的个例子表现出有些能有些不能的对比）

Furthermore, sometimes the appearance and behavior of people in a society can betray some common ideas and values of the society. Influenced by some elements, people in a society may share some attitudes which we can see through their look, dress and act.. With the society becoming busier and busier, nearly every people (person)racing with time, they dress to make them look much more efficiently, they (略去)prefer reading newspaper when eating breakfast, listening to a workman (walkman)when walking on a street, listening to the radio when doing housework. They will be worried if they meet a traffic jam which is considered a waste of time, they will be happy in the night before sleep if recommending? that they have achieved a lot of work in the day. We may hardly understand how much emphasis this society put on time unless we observing (obverse)the appearance and behavior of its people.

In sum, although some people look, dress, and act do not reveal their attitudes and interests and a society’s ideas and values, if we survey enough members of the society carefully, we can get ideas and values of a society correctly.(结论有点突然,因上文一直在举反例)
（我的总体逻辑（就是提纲了）是有些人们的行为不能表现他们的态度---有些人们的行为能表现他们的态度—-有些态度是所有人们的行为都能表现的，结论---我们如果调查足够多的人就能涵盖所有的态度，可是我觉得这次主题句已经说得较明白了阿）

dinddind2003UID: 196353

to bohemian00
不知道你有没有看出我的逻辑（上层所说）
你在表达上提的意见我没有异议，同意。看样子我总是喜欢用词重复，呵呵，其实是我也没有多少同意词，我的表达其实也满单一的，你在这方面给我指出了不少，谢谢，我会慢慢改正。