issue64 (BaXia小组第二次作业)-- deelee221第二篇,欢迎拍砖,多谢各位多多指教...

deelee221UID: 2170883

64"Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it."

题目:很多人多知道怎样获得成功,但是很少人知道怎样充分利用它.



提纲:1.反例:神童,明星(略)
         2.正例:李嘉诚,Bill Gates(略)

People all appreciated success. Success brings them money, power and reputations in most cases. And all that leads to a better life. To be succeed is a dream to many ambitious people. Children study hard to get straight A in school. Youngsters work day and night to gain a stable job in companies. Yes, they all know how to attain success in their early lifetime and they succeed, but years later, many of them are no longer there.

Let's take a look at some exemples. Whiz kids are those who we may find more brilliant than the others. They may have talents of maths, music, art even writing and languages.Their success can be attributed to excellent genes inherited from their parents, caring prenatal culture and environment good for the children's growing which i personally think is the most important. That is to say, wonder child is a great fortune to parents. However, it is sad to see that few parents manage well with the success, let alone making the best use of it.

Fortunately, there are models for us to follow. Li Jia cheng is the richest man in China. At the age of 27, he no longer had to work for the rest of his life for money. But, after he became a legend in business, he turned to the causes of charity. He said he attained joyness and sense of fulfillment when doing charity.In turn, his business is boosted by his reputation from charity.That is greater success to him. I think.

In conclusion, success is not a temporary thing, but a lifetime cause. Like climbing ladders of life, success in early lifetime can be the next step to a greater success. And the way to it depends on different definitions of success given by everyone of us. Just take your own.

参考提纲:

1。成功容易，但迷失了方向
2。某阶段成功但利用不利导致结果不理想
3。成功是好事但能够利用好成功非常难

1.this is a misunderstanding many persons have who atrribute the success to some simple elements. in fact, the key of getting success is a process, in which many details is important
2 the thorny road to success is full of the resistance to the temptations. many people has this pretext for their lack of fortitude, but that is of most important in attaining success
3 success belongs to people who persist in their job. intelligence, chances are necessary,but not all


1 how do most people make use of their success(stagnancy, prodigality, corruption, unwise unvestment,etc.) and what contribute to this phenomenon.
2 what is best use of one's success (better plan, noderate frugality, ehlp others, wise use of influence)
3 success is only a relative concept rather than an absolute one,better use of it can help one to get greater success

[ 本帖最后由 deelee221 于 2006-2-1 00:20 编辑 ]

deelee221UID: 2170883

好短哦....我希望能说明问题就行...请高手们指教...

deelee221UID: 2170883

给点意见啦...真是寂寞难耐哪...

Anny.Y.WangUID: 2178596

到现在还是找不到写issue 的感觉。
等一下我看看你的，希望伊也给我的一点意见拉！Anny.Y.Wang

Anny.Y.WangUID: 2178596

64"Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it."

题目:很多人多知道怎样获得成功,但是很少人知道怎样充分利用它.



提纲:1.反例:神童,明星(略)
         2.正例:李嘉诚,Bill Gates(略)

People all appreciated success. Success brings them money, power and reputations in most cases. And all that leads to a better life. To be succeed is a dream to many ambitious people. Children study hard to get straight A in school. Youngsters work day and night to gain a stable job in companies. Yes, they all know how to attain success in their early lifetime and they succeed, but years later, many of them are no longer there.

Let's take a look at some exemples(examples). Whiz kids are those who we may find more brilliant than the others. They may have talents of maths, music, art even writing and languages. Their success can be attributed to excellent genes inherited from their parents, caring prenatal culture and environment good for the children's growing which i (I) personally think is the most important. That is to say, wonder child is a great fortune to parents. However, it is sad to see that few parents manage well with the success, let alone making the best use of it.

Fortunately, there are models(是说模范吧？？example就好了) for us to follow. Li Jia cheng(Jiacheng Li) is the richest man in China. At the age of 27, he no longer had to work for the rest of his life for money. But, after he became a legend in business, he turned to the causes of charity. He said he attained joyness and sense of fulfillment when doing charity. In turn, his business is boosted by his reputation from charity. That is greater success to him. I think. Conclusion success is not a temporary thing, but a lifetime cause. Like climbing ladders of life, success in early lifetime can be the next step to a greater success. And the way to it depends on different definitions of success given by everyone of us. Just take your own.

我看完了,感觉就是没有力度深度,我们还是要多找点例子呀!

一起加油啦!不要着急!!

Azaz fighting!!!!!

天才之梦UID: 2159126

64"Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it."

题目:很多人多知道怎样获得成功,但是很少人知道怎样充分利用它.



提纲:1.反例:神童,明星(略)
         2.正例:李嘉诚,Bill Gates(略)

People all appreciated success. Success brings them money, power and reputations in most cases. And all that leads to a better life. To be succeed [successful] is a dream to many ambitious people. Children study hard to get straight A in school. Youngsters work day and night to gain a stable job in companies. Yes, they all know how to attain success in their early lifetime and they succeed, but years later, many of them are no longer there.

Let's take a look at some examples. Whiz kids are those who we may find more brilliant than the others. They may have talents [of ][on ]maths, music, art even writing and languages. Their success can be attributed to excellent genes inherited from their parents, [caring prenatal culture][是胎教的意思吗？确定这个词组是正确的] and environment good for the children's growing which I personally think is the most important. That is to say, wonder child is a great fortune to parents. However, it is sad to see that few parents manage well with the success, let alone making the best use of it.

Fortunately, there are models for us to follow. Li Jiacheng is the richest man in China. At the age of 27, he no longer had to work for the rest of his life for money. But, after he became a legend in business, he turned to the causes of charity. He said he attained joy[ness] and sense of fulfillment when doing charity. In turn, his business is boosted by his reputation from charity. That is greater success to him, I think.

In conclusion, success is not a temporary thing, but a lifetime cause. Like climbing ladders of life, success in early lifetime can be the next step to a greater success. And the way to it depends on different definitions of success given by everyone of us. Just take your own.
你的例子很好，感觉很恰当

[ 本帖最后由 天才之梦 于 2006-1-31 21:15 编辑 ]

黑崎猫猫UID: 209414

People all appreciated success. Success brings them money, power and reputations in most cases. And all that leads to a better life. To be succeeding is a dream to many ambitious people. Children study hard to get straight a A in school. Youngsters work day and night to gain a stable job in companies. Yes, they all know how to attain success in their early lifetime and they succeed, but years later, many of them are no longer there.

Let's take a look at some exemples(examples). Whiz kids are those who we may find more brilliant than the others. They may have talents of maths去掉s, music, art even writing and languages.Their success can be attributed to excellent genes inherited from their parents, caring prenatal culture and environment good for the children's growing which i personally think is the most important. That is to say, wonder child is a great fortune to parents. However, it is sad to see that few parents manage well with the success, let alone making the best use of it.

Fortunately, there are models for us to follow. Li Jia cheng is the richest man in China. At the age of 27, he no longer had to work for the rest of his life for money.有点拗口 But, after he became a legend in business, he turned to the causes of charity. He said he attained joyness and sense of fulfillment when doing charity.In turn, his business is boosted by his reputation from charity.That is greater success to him. I think.

In conclusion, success is not a temporary thing, but a lifetime cause. Like climbing ladders of life, success in early lifetime can be the next step to a greater success. And the way to it depends on different definitions of success given by everyone of us. Just take your own.(没懂什么意思)

（我同样觉得你例子举得不错，论证稍欠。讨论点就不评价了，^ ^，讨论了半天，到现在还是不是很确定）

deelee221UID: 2170883

嗯，那个胎教是正确的。。。我查字典找出来的。。：）

谢谢。。

deelee221UID: 2170883

谢谢仙mm，呵呵。。嗯。。我也觉得例子不够多，是把？其实是更深刻的意思没讲出来。。

deelee221UID: 2170883

原帖由 黑崎猫猫 于 2006-1-31 23:14 发表
People all appreciated success. Success brings them money, power and reputations in most cases. And all that leads to a better life. To be succeeding is a dream to many ambitious ...

嗯。。。你说的很有道理，论证欠缺。。。

最后一句是take your own way to succeed....呵呵。。

freud5027UID: 2165870

People all appreciated success. Success brings them money, power and reputations in most cases. And all that leads to a better life. To be succeed is a dream to many ambitious people. Children study hard to get straight A in school. Youngsters work day and night to gain a stable job in companies. Yes, they all know how to attain success in their early lifetime and they succeed, but years later, many of them are no longer there.

Let's take a look at some exemples. Whiz kids are those who we may find more brilliant than the(可以不特指吗) others. They may have talents of maths, music, art even writing and languages.Their success can be attributed to excellent genes inherited from their parents, caring prenatal culture and environment good for the children's growing which i personally think is the most important. That is to say, wonder child is a great fortune to parents. However, it is sad to see that few parents manage well with the success, let alone making the best use of it.(这方面的例子很合适，最好能举出具体的人物。)

Fortunately, there are models for us to follow. (这里是不是应该有个过渡？)Li Jia cheng is the richest man in China. At the age of 27, he no longer had to work for the rest of his life for money. But, after he became a legend in business, he turned to the causes of charity. He said he attained joyness(joy) and sense of fulfillment when doing charity.In turn, his business is boosted by his reputation from charity.That is greater success to him. I think.

In conclusion, success is not a temporary thing, but a lifetime cause. Like climbing ladders of life, success in early lifetime can be the next step to a greater success. And the way to it depends on different definitions of success given by everyone of us. Just take your own.(结尾是不是该再点一下题，我指make the best use of success)

你的文章从正反两方面写，比较有层次感，本人要学习。还有有些句子稍微有点口语化……