issue13 小语种和政府保护。[自己已修改，留链必回！]

我的马甲UID: 2177806

TOPIC：ISSUE 13 - "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."
          DATE：2006-2-5

原稿是在超时10分钟情况下写的，很烂，这是修改后的。
提纲：
1、        为什么说的人少了语言就会消失
2、        语言和文化的联系，政府必须保护。
3、        政府可以保护。
4、        但是，考虑到语言在经济发展中的障碍以及财政的有限，其他社会问题的严重，保护语言有时是不值得的。

As being lost of the population who speak them, nowadays many lesser -- known languages in the world are on the brim of being extinct. Languages have the inextricable relationship with the countries’ culture. Therefore, the governments of the countries, where these languages once prevailed, have the responsibility to intervene to prevent them from becoming extinct, within the restriction of the limited budget and taking the importance of other social problems of those nations into account.

As the media of communication among special groups of people, those lesser -- known languages are doomed to erased from human civilization if decreasing people utilize them. Only being in use can languages have the possibility to still exist in the world and not be forgotten and thrown away.  Historically, countless languages are no longer be known by people at present and in future in that in their old age most people abandoned them as the communication tools. So does the destiny of those lesser -- known languages today.

There is no deny that the languages are related to the countries' culture, and due to governments have the duty to preserve the countries' culture, government should act to avoid those languages dying out. As a saying goes, where there is a distinct language there is a unique culture. Diverse culture has its own distinct literature and art works, the meaning and characteristic can only be embodied by its own language. That is why to comprehend the legacy about some ancient culture, although archaeologists have acquired the literal records of it, they have to decipher the languages. Languages mirror the culture. As the governments of those countries in which people speak those lesser -- known languages, they must take methods to remain the cultural identity of those countries. Then, protecting the languages is an indispensable part for this mission.

In addition, since the governments are in charge of a countries' education and the allocation of their resources, it is utterly possible for governments to protect those lesser -- known languages. They can set up special curriculum in school to teach those languages and request TV and radio stations to broadcast the programs in those lesser -- known languages. Also, governments can establish certain department aiming to the study and documentation of the losing languages, in which linguists can receive sufficient financial support to work. In one word, governments do most fitly serve to the position of defending those lesser -- known from becoming extinct.

Nevertheless, considering the negative effect on the development of the counties and the significance of other issues, governments should consider their limited budget and resources in society. Why few and few people speak those lesser -- known languages? A main answer is that these languages serve to impede the communication in economic, political and cultural facets. At present, an increasing number of fields in the world share universal official languages, like English, French and the like. The conducts of business are made in English and others, and after opening the Internet webs we can notice over 90% ones are in English. Meanwhile, in those countries, where the lesser -- known growingly become obstacle in the way of development, other social problems, such as unemployment, starvation and poverty, are often severe because with the intensity of globalization the material progress and well – being of a country are necessarily connected to others’. In some isolated tribes in Africa and The South America, such is cases. Owning to the low level of economy of those countries, frequently, the governments have limited budget. Compared with those most vital social matters, preserving the languages may be at a high expense and then be regarded as an unworthy project.

To sum up, were it not for the languages, people would not understand and enjoy the precious legacy handed down be ancestors. It is the responsibility of governments to protect the losing languages with smaller and smaller population speaking them. Yet, it does not follow that it is unnecessary to consider the abilities of the governments and the situation of those countries.

[ 本帖最后由 我的马甲 于 2006-2-5 20:04 编辑 ]

果小冻UID: 208370

ISSUE 13 - "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."
          DATE：2006-2-5

原稿是在超时10分钟情况下写的，很烂，这是修改后的。
提纲：
1、        为什么说的人少了语言就会消失
2、        语言和文化的联系，政府必须保护。
3、        政府可以保护。
4、        但是，考虑到语言在经济发展中的障碍以及财政的有限，其他社会问题的严重，保护语言有时是不值得的。

As being lost of the population who speak them, nowadays many lesser -- known languages in the world are on the brim of being extinct.[ Languages have the inextricable relationship with the countries’ culture and therefore the governments of the countries where these languages once prevailed have the responsibility to intervene to prevent them from becoming extinct within the restriction of the limited budget and the importance of other social problems of those nations. 这个句子果然不是一般的长哈，呵呵。开头观点明确一如既往。恩，题外话，你现在有没有准备模板捏？]

As the media of communication among special groups of people, if decreasing people utilize them, those lesser -- known languages are doomed to erased from human civilization.[这个句子的逻辑关系我不是很明白。If之前的背景放在这里是想表达虾么意思捏？] Only being in use can languages have the possibility to still exist in the world and not be forgotten and thrown away.  Historically, countless languages are no longer be known by people at present and in future in that in their old age most people abandoned them as the communication tools. So does the destiny of those lesser -- known languages today.[关于这个段落，说明语言消失的原因，你表大的意思是因为使用的少，但是我觉得应该说明白为什么使用的少，这个才是解释的关键吧。要不就一直在表面浮撒。比如可以谈这些语言的特点等，当然用事例是最好的]

There is no deny that the languages are related to the countries' culture, [and due to governments have the duty to preserve the countries' culture, government should act to avoid those languages in danger of being extinct from becoming died out.这里怪的撒，这两个句子到底是什么关系捏？指教哈] As a saying goes, where there is a distinct language there is a unique culture.[呀，这个句子妙滴] Diverse culture has its own distinct literature and art works, the meaning and characteristic can only be embodied by its own language. That is why to comprehend the legacy about some ancient culture, although archaeologists have acquired the literal records of it, they have to decipher the languages. Languages mirror the culture. As the governments of those countries in which people speak those lesser -- known languages, they must take methods to remain the cultural identity of those countries. Then, protecting the languages is an indispensable part for this mission. [关于语言的重要性，我觉得有两个，首先是独特文化的表现形式，其次是保存文化遗产的线索。你都谈到了，但是能否再清晰化呢？恩]

In addition, since the governments are in charge of a countries' education and the allocation of their resources, it is utterly possible for governments to protect those lesser -- known languages. They can set up special curriculum in school to teach those languages and request TV and radio stations to broadcast the programs in those lesser -- known languages. Also, governments can establish certain department aiming to the study and documentation of the losing languages, in which linguists can receive sufficient financial support to work. In one word, governments do most fitly serve to the position of defending those lesser -- known from becoming extinct. [这个段落不错

Nevertheless, considering the negative effect on the development of the counties and the significance of other issues, governments should take into account their limited budget and resources in society.  [这个让步做的好的]Why few and few people speak those lesser -- known languages? A main answer is that these languages serve to impede the communication in economic, political and cultural facets. At present, an increasing number of fields in the world share universal official languages, like English, French and the like. The conducts of business are made in English and others, and after opening the Internet webs we can notice over 90% ones are in English. At the same time, in those countries, where the lesser -- known growingly become obstacle in the way of development, other social problems,[ such as unemployment, starvation and poverty, are also severe.这里是否应该点一下交流这个因素起的作用呢，单单提到这些负面作用，却没有提到之间的桥梁，似乎有些贸然] In some isolated tribes in Africa and The South America, such is cases. Meanwhile, owning to the low level of economy of those countries, the governments frequently have limited budget. Compared with those most vital social matters, preserving the languages is at a high expense and then is regarded as[ an unworthy project.不能这么说吧，不然和你的第一个分论点不是那个那个。。矛盾了吗。我觉得还是说不是那么紧急吧

To sum up, were it not for the languages, people would not understand and enjoy the precious legacy handed down be ancestors. It is the responsibility of governments to protect the losing languages with smaller and smaller population speaking them. Yet, it does not follow that it is unnecessary to consider the abilities of the governments and the situation of those countries. [结尾也棒的说。恩。真是觉得马甲同学写的好的说。牛马甲。嘿嘿]

果小冻UID: 208370

汗。。我把颜色搞坏了。。马甲对不起

我的马甲UID: 2177806

原帖由 果小冻 于 2006-2-5 17:12 发表
汗。。我把颜色搞坏了。。马甲对不起

没有关系啦。

.[ Languages have the inextricable relationship with the countries’ culture and therefore the governments of the countries where these languages once prevailed have the responsibility to intervene to prevent them from becoming extinct within the restriction of the limited budget and the importance of other social problems of those nations. 这个句子果然不是一般的长哈，呵呵。开头观点明确一如既往。恩，题外话，你现在有没有准备模板捏？]

汗，你不说我还没发现，第一段这么长就2句话，而且第二句话一个逗号都没加，同时还有语病。我给改成这样了
Languages have the inextricable relationship with the countries’ culture. Therefore, the governments of the countries, where these languages once prevailed, have the responsibility to intervene to prevent them from becoming extinct, within the restriction of the limited budget and taking the importance of other social problems of those nations into account.
不过最后一句还是很长。
我不知道咋准备模版啊？提问式的？挠头呢。

As the media of communication among special groups of people, if decreasing people utilize them, those lesser -- known languages are doomed to erased from human civilization.[这个句子的逻辑关系我不是很明白。If之前的背景放在这里是想表达虾么意思捏？]

我自己读也发现，好象句子按汉语语序组织的，唉，给自己一个借口，限时惹得祸。改好了是这样。
As the media of communication among special groups of people, those lesser -- known languages are doomed to erased from human civilization if decreasing people utilize them.

[and due to governments have the duty to preserve the countries' culture, government should act to avoid those languages in danger of being extinct from becoming died out.这里怪的撒，这两个句子到底是什么关系捏？指教哈]

这时改的时候画蛇添足了，改了是这样的
government should act to avoid those languages dying out.

,[ such as unemployment, starvation and poverty, are also severe.这里是否应该点一下交流这个因素起的作用呢，单单提到这些负面作用，却没有提到之间的桥梁，似乎有些贸然]

的确，这样呢？

Meanwhile, in those countries, where the lesser -- known growingly become obstacle in the way of development, other social problems, such as unemployment, starvation and poverty, are often severe because with the intensity of globalization the material progress and well – being of a country are necessarily connected to others’.

汗，这句话似乎又是又臭又长了。

preserving the languages is at a high expense and then is regarded as[ an unworthy project.不能这么说吧，不然和你的第一个分论点不是那个那个。。矛盾了吗。我觉得还是说不是那么紧急吧

忘了最关键的副词，拉出去打~~
Compared with those most vital social matters, preserving the languages may be at a high expense and then be regarded as an unworthy project.

不是很紧急，如何表达合适？

[关于这个段落，说明语言消失的原因，你表大的意思是因为使用的少，但是我觉得应该说明白为什么使用的少，这个才是解释的关键吧。要不就一直在表面浮撒。比如可以谈这些语言的特点等，当然用事例是最好的]

我在倒数第二段说得。我的思路是先说，语言说得人少了命运就是消亡，然后说它和文化的关系从而政府必须保护，再说政府有可能保护，最后从说得人少的原因引出的有时保护可能是不值得的，对于某些政府。
逻辑很乱？我也有些蒙，似乎很中国人思维化，给点建议。

我的马甲UID: 2177806

1楼的已经改过
关于这篇大家给点儿各段见逻辑组织成这样是否合适的建议，谢谢！

我的思路是先说，语言说得人少了命运就是消亡，然后说它和文化的关系从而政府必须保护，再说政府有可能保护，最后从说得人少的原因引出的有时保护可能是不值得的，对于某些政府。

waterwwUID: 181213

TOPIC：ISSUE 13 - "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."
          DATE：2006-2-5

原稿是在超时10分钟情况下写的，很烂，这是修改后的。
提纲：
1、        为什么说的人少了语言就会消失
2、        语言和文化的联系，政府必须保护。
3、        政府可以保护。
4、        但是，考虑到语言在经济发展中的障碍以及财政的有限，其他社会问题的严重，保护语言有时是不值得的。

As being lost of the population who speak them, nowadays many lesser -- known languages in the world are on the brim of being extinct. Languages have the inextricable relationship with the countries’ culture and therefore the governments of the countries where these languages once prevailed have the responsibility to intervene to prevent them from becoming extinct within the restriction of the limited budget and the importance of other social problems of those nations. 这句字够长的哦

As the media of communication among special groups of people, if decreasing people utilize them, those lesser -- known languages are doomed to erased from human civilization.感觉怪怪的，不太理解. Only being in use can languages have the possibility to still exist in the world and not be forgotten and thrown away.  Historically, countless languages are no longer be known by people at present and in future in that in their old age most people abandoned them as the communication tools. So does the destiny of those lesser -- known languages today.你在讲为什么小语种会消失吗？说的不是很透哦。

There is no deny that the languages are related to the countries' culture, and due to governments have the duty to preserve the countries' culture, government should act to avoid those languages in danger of being extinct from becoming died out.你的长句子，这里是不是有点问题。不舒服看起来。 As a saying goes, where there is a distinct language there is a unique culture. Diverse culture has its own distinct literature and art works, the meaning and characteristic can only be embodied by its own language. That is why to comprehend the legacy about some ancient culture, although archaeologists have acquired the literal records of it, they have to decipher the languages.这个例子说明古代文明有他们自己的语言来记载。现在的人只有去破译它才能理解。但不可能做到透彻，因为只有他们自己的语言才能最根本的体现自己的特色文化。是不是应该再加入这些分析啊。否则没讲清楚的，这个例子。Languages mirror the culture. As the governments of those countries in which people speak those lesser -- known languages, they must take methods to remain the cultural identity of those countries. Then, protecting the languages is an indispensable part for this mission.

In addition, since the governments are in charge of a countries' education and the allocation of their resources, it is utterly possible for governments to protect those lesser -- known languages. They can set up special curriculum in school to teach those languages and request TV and radio stations to broadcast the programs in those lesser -- known languages. Also, governments can establish certain department aiming to the study and documentation of the losing languages, in which linguists can receive sufficient financial support to work. In one word, governments do most fitly serve to the position of defending those lesser -- known from becoming extinct. 这些例子就讲的透彻，不错的。

Nevertheless, considering the negative effect on the development of the counties and the significance of other issues, governments should take into account their limited budget and resources in society.  Why few and few people speak those lesser -- known languages? A main answer is that these languages serve to impede the communication in economic, political and cultural facets. At present, an increasing number of fields in the world share universal official languages, like English, French and the like. The conducts of business are made in English and others, and after opening the Internet webs we can notice over 90% ones are in English. At the same time, in those countries, where the lesser -- known growingly become obstacle in the way of development, other social problems, such as unemployment, starvation and poverty, are also severe. In some isolated tribes in Africa and The South America, such is cases. Meanwhile, owning to the low level of economy of those countries, the governments frequently have limited budget. Compared with those most vital social matters, preserving the languages is at a high expense 为什么你就讲防止小语种消失会花费很多呢，你没有说明啊。上面一段给出的政府可以做的事情，你可以强调一下花费的事情。否则这里太突然了。and then is regarded as an unworthy project.

To sum up, were it not for the languages, people would not understand and enjoy the precious legacy handed down be by ancestors. It is the responsibility of governments to protect the losing languages with smaller and smaller population speaking them. Yet, it does not follow that it is unnecessary to consider the abilities of the governments and the situation of those countries.

写的好多啊，佩服中。
语言结构挺丰富的，文章结构也不错。
说的不好的地方，请谅解~~

请指教.谢谢.
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果小冻UID: 208370

1,我还是觉得你的那个句子太长了。是否可以这么说捏？
Languages have the inextricable relationship with the countries’ culture. Therefore, the governments of the countries, where these languages once prevailed, have the responsibility to intervene to prevent them from becoming extinct. However, the restriction of the limited budget and other social problems of those nations should also taken into consideration.
也就是把你的那么多的后肢稍微分点下来。不知道可否？
2，“As the media of communication among special groups of people, those lesser -- known languages are doomed to erased from human civilization if decreasing people utilize them.”
关于这个句子，我觉得还是有点不太明白，你说的那个媒体的交流到底是想说明啥意思捏？
3，government should act to avoid those languages dying out.
这个句子好了耶
4，Meanwhile, in those countries, where the lesser -- known growingly become obstacle in the way of development, other social problems, such as unemployment, starvation and poverty, are often severe because with the intensity of globalization the material progress and well – being of a country are necessarily connected to others’.

不错哈。。恩
5，不是很紧急。。嘿嘿能否用not as urgent as?
any way 你的表达好多了比我的

果小冻UID: 208370

1，嘿嘿，，你咋弄的撒。就是那个在同一个帖子里。回复别人的问题。看我只好一次次的复制你的话。。教我
2，关于你的 论证思路。我想的是：
首先，。说明语言消失的原因
其次说明政府需要保护的原因，分两个来说，这个我在你的作文批改里说到了。
最后做让步。就是和你想的那样的
3，能否给我看看我写的argument
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我的马甲UID: 2177806

原帖由 果小冻 于 2006-2-5 20:40 发表
1，嘿嘿，，你咋弄的撒。就是那个在同一个帖子里。回复别人的问题。看我只好一次次的复制你的话。。教我
2，关于你的 论证思路。我想的是：
首先，。说明语言消失的原因
其次说明政府需要保护的原因，分两个来 ...

to 1
那个很容易，粘贴好后，在上面的工具栏里选那个引用的按钮就好了