ISSUE11 Toheart互改组（cavana的作业 ）

cavanaUID: 2178782

TOPIC: ISSUE 11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 505          TIME: 1:38:23          DATE: 2006-2-6

I agree that it would serve the interests of all nations to establish such a global university at the aim of solving the world's most persistent social problems. However, there are some unavoidable elements impeding the practice of this university.

The reason I agree to the speaker is that such a university embraces students from diverse cultural and education, who will offer diverse perspectives for the solution of social problems. Students from one nation always received a similar education and have similar views, and probably ignore some flaws in their logic and considerations. With international students together, they can discover these foibles and have abundant perspectives. Moreover, on the premises of agreement of the fundamental view, discussion will be hold on in the process of making and mending the solutions. And the final decisions have more power to persuade all the nations, then benefits in decreasing political conflicts and contradictions between countries.

Further, such a global university can help students have a deeper understanding of other countries. Try to understand others is the best avenue to avoid misapprehensions and get the same principles.

the reason I consider the speaker's claim to be unfeasible is that, the gaps of different cultures and nations are, sometimes, so huge that it is hardly to find a point of balance. For instance, the wars on the west edge of Jordan last over a century. No one can release the hate piled so many years from people's mind. How do these students with absolutely different religionary beliefs come to agreement on problems relative to benefits of each other? Quarrels may always exist between them, and even more they would not like to sit down by a same table.

In addition, these students represent their own country, so they have to protect and struggle for the profit of their countries. They are not individualists, yet driven by the inherent nature character of human being. It makes the meaning of best solutions different to each country. A country ,for example want to establish nuclear power stations on its border to solve the national lack of electricity, but is opposed by its neighbor countries for their people’ health , living near the border, will be threatened by the nuclear stations. The best solution for the country is establishment of the nuclear power stations, nevertheless, for its neighbors is nothing at all. So to find a truly best solution suitable to all is not an easy mission.

On the other side, students are not politicians. They have far less power to persuade the public and no right to control the army. So the decisions and the solutions they make are possible not be put into practice. If few people adopt their ideas, the existence of this global university will lose its original value.

In sum, it is a good suggestion about the global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. However, barricades on this way are so large to trun over and make it practical.

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

cuteUID: 2152397

段数可以压缩下，相同的观点并成一段。句子感觉还可以再顺些啊I agree that it would serve the interests of all nations to establish such a global university at the aim of solving the world's most persistent social problems. However, there are some unavoidable elements impeding the practice of this university.（第一段可暗示文章结构）

The reason I agree to the speaker is that such a university embraces students from diverse cultural and education, who will offer diverse perspectives for the solution of social problems. Students from one nation always received a similar education and have similar views, and probably ignore some flaws in their logic and considerations. With international students together, they can discover these foibles and have abundant perspectives. Moreover, on the premises of agreement of the fundamental view, discussion will be hold on in the process of making and mending the solutions. And the final decisions have more power to persuade all the nations, then benefits in decreasing political conflicts and contradictions between countries.（看不太明白，恕我水平有限，学生的观点怎么说明各国啦？怎么证明的论点呢）
Further（用furthermore吧？）, such a global university can help students have a deeper understanding of other countries. Try to understand others is the best avenue to avoid misapprehensions and get the same principles.

the reason I consider the speaker's claim to be unfeasible is that, the gaps of different cultures and nations are, sometimes, so huge that it is hardly to find a point of balance. For instance, the wars on the west edge of Jordan last over a century. No one can release the hate piled so many years from people's mind. How do these students with absolutely different religionary（什么意思啊，没这词吧） beliefs come to agreement on problems relative to benefits of each other? Quarrels may always exist between them, and even more they would not like to sit down by a same table.

In addition, these students represent their own country（countries）, so they have to protect and struggle for the profit（利润改成利益） of their countries. They are not individualists（他们不是人是什么啊？）, yet driven by the inherent nature character of human being. It makes the meaning of best solutions different to each country. A country ,for example want to establish nuclear power stations on its border to solve the national lack of electricity, but is opposed by its neighbor countries for their people’ health , living near the border, will be threatened by the nuclear stations. The best solution for the country is establishment of the nuclear power stations, nevertheless, for its neighbors is nothing at all. So to find a truly best solution suitable to all is not an easy mission.

On the other side, students are not politicians. They have far less power to persuade the public and no right to control the army. So the decisions and the solutions they make are possible not be put into practice. If few people adopt their ideas, the existence of this global university will lose its original value.

In sum, it is a good suggestion about the global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. However, barricades on this way are so large to trun over and make it practical.

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

ISSUE11 Toheart互改组（cavana的作业 ）

TOPIC: ISSUE 11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 505          TIME: 1:38:23          DATE: 2006-2-6

I agree that it would serve the interests of all nations to establish such a global university at the aim of solving the world's most persistent social problems. However, there are some unavoidable elements impeding the practice of this university.

The reason I agree to the speaker is that such a university embraces students from diverse cultural and education, who will offer diverse perspectives for the solution of social problems. Students from one nation always received a similar education and have similar views, and probably ignore some flaws in their logic and considerations. With international students together(这句话有点问题吧，不妨改为But when international students get together), they can discover these foibles and have abundant perspectives(abundant来修饰perspectives不太好吧，discover these foibles to get a more comprehensive perspective). Moreover, on the premises (这里就说了一个前提 just "premise "is ok)of agreement of(from) the fundamental view, discussion will be hold on(hold up) in the process of making and mending the solutions. And the final decisions have(will abtain) more power to persuade all the nations, then benefits in decreasing political conflicts and contradictions between countries.(好象在所举的例子中，假象的结果说的太肯定（常用了完成时和现在时），不妨用将来时，或虚拟语气)

Further, such a global university can help students have（to get） a deeper understanding of other countries. Try to understand others is the best avenue to avoid misapprehensions and get(insist on,原则是应该坚持的，不是得到的， 或者你在此处principles用的是别个意思？) the same principles.

the （The 笔误）reason I consider the speaker's claim to be unfeasible is that, the gaps of（resulting from） different cultures and nations are, sometimes, so huge (great,哎 这两词好象都不很好，我也想不出更好的)that it is hardly（hard, hardly仅有副词词性） to find a point of balance（"to balance" may be better）. For instance, the wars on the west(western) edge of Jordan last over a century. No one can release the hate piled so many years from people's mind. How do these students with absolutely different religionary beliefs come to (an)agreement on problems relative to benefits of each other? Quarrels may always exist between them, and even more they would not like to sit down by(on) a same table.

In addition, these students represent their own country(根据后面你写的countries,这也应该写countries), so they have to protect and struggle for the profit of their countries. They are not individualists, yet driven by the inherent nature character of human being(这句话说的好象莫名其妙，你应该把它说的 not individualists 和为祖国着想联系起来，这样读者才明白你引入individualists 什么用意). It makes the meaning of best solutions different to each country(这句话也不好， The best solution for the world may be not the best for every country). A country ,for example want(插句就忘看数的形式了？ wants) to establish nuclear power stations on(along) its border to solve the national lack of electricity, but is (指什么啊，没代词 which is)opposed by its neighbor countries for their people’ health , living near the border, will be threatened by the nuclear stations.(超过一个句子了吧，不要省句号啊) The best solution for the country is establishment of the nuclear power stations, nevertheless, for its neighbors is nothing at all（nothing?回有负面影响的啊 for the nations nearby is a evil idea）. So to find a truly best solution suitable to all is not an easy mission.(suit在这里干什么的？)

On the other side, students are not politicians. They have far less power to persuade the public and no right(authority) to control the army. So the decisions and the solutions they make(have made) are possible not be put into practice(不别弄吗？are impossible to put into practice). If few people adopt their ideas, the existence of this global university will lose its original value.

In sum, it is a good suggestion about the global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. However, barricades on this way are so large to trun over and make it practical. (结尾好象很草率， 竟然你举了那么多diadvantages，为何不来个although 让步式的总结一下)

上次你给我改的很reasonable  我正是需要别人在我的逻辑论证上多提些意见， 多谢你了。而我善于给别人挑句病，所以我基本没给你提出论证上的毛病.

cavanaUID: 2178782

谢谢 细心修改：）
第二段那句话的意思是 所有学生一起讨论出来的结果会更有说服力，会减少很多冲突和战争

religionary是religion的形容词吧 我用金山词霸查的 ，哈哈 好像word会不识别，我再查查

individualists是利己主义者， 也是用金山词霸查的。。。。

段数是得压缩一下 这样看起来很乱 ：）

我们再讨论啊

原帖由 cute 于 2006-2-6 21:12 发表
段数可以压缩下，相同的观点并成一段。句子感觉还可以再顺些啊I agree that it would serve the interests of all nations to establish such a global university at the aim of solving th ...

cavanaUID: 2178782

多谢你的修改啊， 这才发现我会写那么多语法错误出来啊，汗:L
我再好好改改 ：）

原帖由 ChunyanLi2005 于 2006-2-7 11:16 发表
ISSUE11 Toheart互改组（cavana的作业 ）

TOPIC: ISSUE 11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the wo ...