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94"Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."
观点：的确，全面发展是教育的目的，但大学所做的，更多是培养一个对社会有用的专业人才。因此不同意作者的大学应该要求每个学生都参加其本研究领域外的课程。
1、一个人的德、智、体、美全面发展是教育的目的。
2、大学应该做的是为社会培养一个有用的专业人才。
3、大学应该为学生提供一个学习的大舞台，至于学习专业外的科目，依自身兴趣爱好而定。

限时没成功，超了半个小时，唉！
The speaker assert that universities should require each student take a wide course beside his or her own field of study in that it is the best way to gain truly educated. However, in my views, I fundamental disagree with the issue as follows in my article， even though I concede that acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the true purpose of education.

To begin with, admittedly, the purpose of education is to enable people gain comprehensive development, which will be beneficial to the society. Each people from primary school to college is no doubt to experience a variety of education endowed by family, school, and society. We receive formal knowledge which is a system discipline such as math, Chinese, history, geography, P.E. and so forth. Math teaches us a logic calculation capacity; Chinese enable us to learn our native literature; History makes us to be access to our country and the world development process; Geography can lead us to a wide eye open to the status and custom of various countries in the earth. P.E. endowed us a strong physical condition, which may be basis of our study and work in the future. All these subjects are precisely from primary school to middle school before we go to university. Consequently, we gain the comprehensive development that is the goal pursuit by education.

However, it was the opposite case When we enroll in the college in that what universities should do is not so much adopt students various skills as to foster students to be a true useful expertise to the society. When we enter a wide stage in our life, there, we may choice our interested major at will which will be no longer restricted in previous time just because the universities provide us so various majors involving nature science, humanity science, and social science. In such short four years universities life, we have many courses about our own discipline field of study to learn. Even though I concede that university students should be furnished with more comprehensive knowledge than students in the middle school, I more agree that students should study his or her academic discipline. After all it is not easy that the fund of nation apply to the university education. It is pity, even ridiculous, that a math major student is going to remedy patients after his graduate. It is obvious a huge waste to the education resource. In a word, university should adopt student’s expertise as possible as it can rather than both wasting time and fund to educate students a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.

I concede that students in universities should acquire all-sided development. However, it is not the duty of the university. As a college student, especially as an adult, they have capacity to choose courses outside their academic disciplines in term of different interest and hobby. Through choosing relative subjects with their major, it is no doubt to be beneficial effects to the development of his or her discipline. For example, we have no reasons to disagree the assertion that math course will be conduce to the computer major. Consequently, students should involve varieties of knowledge according to individual rather than attributing the duty to the university, which have provided a stage like a society to wait us express our capacities of diversity.

All in all, I agree that the purpose of education is to enable people to have a heath and comprehensive development, which will be useful to the society in the future. The universities, as a special education stage should place emphasis to adopt expertise human resource other than requiring students to take myriads of courses dispersing energy outside his or her major.

foreveraUID: 202035

占座晚上来拍

virginia730UID: 208873

拜读了下楼主的作文.
( 这么多字的要在半小时写完吗?....恩,强恩|||||)

观点真不错,虽然我是持相反观点的.
但是觉得第三段以后,结构就有点乱了.特别是3,4段之间是什米关系那?

还有有些地方小小的语法错误把,
it was the opposite case When we enroll in the college in that what universities should do is not so much adopt students various skills as to foster students to be a true useful expertise to the society这个句子觉得好象有问题, 没通那, 请指教了.

最后还是想反驳下.
虽然大学的确是该学专业知识了.但是"a variety of courses"只是说专业课以外,应该还要学习其他的课程,没有说要强迫所有的科目都平衡啊~
何况初等教育我认为只是基础而已.
如果大学只为了职业,那么何不去职业培训学校那?

个人想法了~~~ ^ ^

virginia730UID: 208873

请问楼上的和楼主都是什么时候考那?

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lz的意思是说：应该全面教育但是这有难度，所以只能专精一面，但如果全面更好？
这导致文章转折比较多，有点难看懂。而且lz语言还不熟练。
可能把顺序倒过来写好：
1 大学只能培养专长。因为资源所限和人时间所限。
2 但是应该提供学习其他科目的机会。因为1发觉兴趣，转专业2培养素质(如艺术)。来个反证。
3 论述一下这和truly edu的关系。我个人觉得科目多寡和真正教育没必然关系。（否原文）教育在于让我们明白基本道理，处世之道。像那种出国留学强杀导师的人学多少科学还是一个废人。

我觉得这样写应该清晰些吧？

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原帖由 virginia730 于 2006-2-7 17:17 发表
拜读了下楼主的作文.
( 这么多字的要在半小时写完吗?....恩,强恩|||||)

观点真不错,虽然我是持相反观点的.
但是觉得第三段以后,结构就有点乱了.特别是3,4段之间是什米关系那?

还有有些地方小小的语法错误 ...

it was the opposite case when we enroll in the college. What universities should do is not so much adopt students various skills as  foster students to be a true useful expertise to the society.

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原帖由 lakeqian 于 2006-2-7 17:35 发表
lz的意思是说：应该全面教育但是这有难度，所以只能专精一面，但如果全面更好？
这导致文章转折比较多，有点难看懂。而且lz语言还不熟练。
可能把顺序倒过来写好：
1 大学只能培养专长。因为资源所限和人时间所 ...

恩，这么写果真清晰多了，受益中...

xinxinzi0719UID: 182812

观点：的确，全面发展是教育的目的，但大学所做的，更多是培养一个对社会有用的专业人才。因此不同意作者的大学应该要求每个学生都参加其本研究领域外的课程。
1、一个人的德、智、体、美全面发展是教育的目的。
2、大学应该做的是为社会培养一个有用的专业人才。
3、大学应该为学生提供一个学习的大舞台，至于学习专业外的科目，依自身兴趣爱好而定。

限时没成功，超了半个小时，唉！
The speaker assert that universities should require each student take a wide course beside his or her own field of study in that it is the best way to gain truly educated(true education)However, in my views, I fundamental disagree with the issue as follows in my article， even though I concede that acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the true purpose of education.

To begin with, admittedly, the purpose of education is to enable people gain comprehensive development, which will be beneficial to the society. Each people from primary school to college is no doubt to experience a variety of education endowed by family, school, and society. We receive formal knowledge which is a system discipline such as math, Chinese, history, geography, P.E(最好别写简称了)and so forth. Math teaches us a logic calculation capacity; Chinese enable us to learn our native literature; History makes us to be access to our country and the world development process; Geography can lead us to a wide eye open to the status and custom of various countries in the earth. P.E. endowed us a strong physical condition, which may be basis of our study and work in the future. All these subjects are precisely from primary school to middle school before we go to university. Consequently, we gain the comprehensive development that is the goal pursuit by education.（有些想不通 你的论点已经明确的说出是关于大学生要不要辅修其他课程 在这段中你为什么一直在说上大学前的教育的核心呢？

However, it was the opposite case When we enroll in the college in that what universities should do is not so much adopt students various skills as to foster students to be a true useful expertise to the society.（what universities should do is not so much adopt students various skills is not so much adopt ???看不懂 如果我写 what universities should do is not to simply indoctrinate various skills to students rather than to foster….） When we enter a wide stage in our life, there, we may choice our interested major at will which will be no longer restricted in previous time just because the universities provide us so various majors involving nature science, humanity science, and social science. (When entering a wide stage after enrolling in the university, we may choice the majors according to our interests, which are no longer restricted as in the middle schools, because the universities…..你看这句这么改行么）In such short four years universities life, we have many courses about our own discipline field of study to learn. （of study 就去掉吧） Even though I concede that university students should be furnished with more comprehensive knowledge than students in the middle school, I more agree that students should study his or her academic discipline. （这点的逻辑比较乱 我理不太清 在一段中比较忌讳内容上的相反的让步）After all it is not easy that the fund of nation apply to the university education. It is pity, even ridiculous, that a math major student is going to remedy patients after his graduate. （a math major student is going to remedy patients after his graduate这句话放在这是什么意思呢） It is obvious a huge waste to the education resource. In a word, university should adopt student’s expertise as possible as it can rather than both wasting time and fund to educate students a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.

I concede that students in universities should acquire all-sided development. However, it is not the duty of the university. As a college student, especially as an adult, they have capacity to choose courses outside their academic disciplines in term of different interest and hobby. Through choosing relative subjects with their major, it is no doubt to be beneficial effects to the development of his or her discipline. For example, we have no reasons to disagree the assertion that math course will be conduce to the computer major. Consequently, students should involve varieties of knowledge according to individual rather than attributing the duty to the university, which have provided a stage like a society to wait us express our capacities of diversity.

All in all, I agree that the purpose of education is to enable people to have a health and comprehensive development, which will be useful to the society in the future. The universities, as a special education stage should place emphasis to adopt expertise human resource other than requiring students to take myriads of courses dispersing energy outside his or her major.

foreveraUID: 202035

The speaker assert that universities should require each student take a wide course beside his or her own field of study in that it is the best way to gain truly educated. However, in my views, I fundamental disagree with the issue as follows in my article， even though I concede that acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the true purpose of education.开头很简练，如果把自己的观点说的更明确一点就好了

To begin with前一个去掉就可以, admittedly, the purpose of education is to enable people gain comprehensive development, which will be beneficial to the society. Each people from primary school to college is no doubt to experience a variety of education endowed by family, school, and society. 前面这一句有点跑题吧We receive formal knowledge which is a system discipline such as math, Chinese, history, geography, P.E. and so forth. Math teaches us a logic calculation capacity; Chinese enable us to learn our native literature; History makes us to be access to our country and the world development process; Geography can lead us to a wide eye open to the status and custom of various countries in the earth. P.E. endowed us a strong physical condition, which may be basis of our study and work in the future. All these subjects are precisely from primary school to middle school before we go to university. Consequently, we gain the comprehensive development that is the goal pursuit by education.排比举例子很好，不过后面缺少点总结性论述

However, it was the opposite case When we enroll in the college in that what universities should do is not so much adopt students various skills as to foster students to be a true useful expertise 这个词用的不队啊to the society. When we enter a wide stage in our life, there, we may choice词性啊 our interested major at will which will be no longer restricted in previous time 没有看明白什么意思just because the universities provide us so various majors involving nature science, humanity science, and social science. In such short four years universities life, we have many courses about our own discipline field of study to learn. 前面这些有些罗嗦而且切题不准Even though I concede that university students should be furnished with more comprehensive knowledge than students in the middle school, I more agree that students should study his or her academic discipline. After all it is not easy that the fund of nation apply to the university education.这句和主题有没什么太大关系啊 It is pity, even ridiculous, that a math major student is going to remedy patients after his graduate. It is obvious词性 a huge waste to the education resource. In a word, university should adopt student’s expertise as possible as it can rather than both wasting time and fund to educate students a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.这一段始终没有点到TS上，希望重新修改一下

I concede that students in universities should acquire all-sided development. However, it is not the duty of the university. As a college student, especially as an adult, they have capacity to choose courses outside their academic disciplines in term of different interest and hobby. Through choosing relative subjects with their major, it is no doubt to be beneficial effects 句式有点乱to the development of his or her discipline. For example, we have no reasons to disagree the assertion that math course will be conduce to the computer major. Consequently, students should involve varieties of knowledge according to individual 加上interestrather than attributing the duty to the university, which have provided a stage like a society to wait us express our capacities of diversity.

All in all, I agree that the purpose of education is to enable people to have a heath and comprehensive development, which will be useful to the society in the future. The universities, as a special education stage should place emphasis to adopt expertise human resource other than requiring students to take myriads of courses dispersing energy outside his or her major.

整篇思路还不错，不过论证有一些并没有扣到主题上，词汇运用上也要多加注意，继续加油哦~~~

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谢谢 xinxin 和古道西风的修改！

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原帖由 forevera 于 2006-2-7 23:33 发表
The speaker assert that universities should require each student take a wide course beside his or her own field of study in that it is the best way to gain truly educated. However, in my views, I f ...

更改如下：However, it was the opposite case when we enroll in the college . What universities should do is not so much adopt students various skills as foster students to be a true useful professional to the society. When we enter a wide stage after enrolling the universities, we may choose many majors according our interest, which will be no longer restricted in previous, because the universities provide us so various majors involving nature science, humanity science, and social science. In such short four years universities life, we have many courses about our own discipline field to learn. Even though I concede that university students should be furnished with more comprehensive knowledge than students in the middle school, I more agree that students should study his or her academic discipline. It is pity, even ridiculous, that a math major student is going to remedy patients after his graduate. It is an obviously huge waste to the education resource. In a word, university should adopt student’s expertise as possible as it can rather than both wasting time and fund to educate students a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.