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ISSUE 36

"The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."

In this era of rapid development of technology leading to the economic growth, many great people have emerged in the world. How is these people's greatness decided? The author acclaimed that it can only be judged by people who live after them. However, as far as         I am concerning, although many peoples' greatnesses are discovered by their descendants, one's contemporaries' contribution can not be excluded.

In history, some people's greatness, which is acknowledged in current society, are not found in his period of life for the difference between people who live in the corresponding time. Each period in history has its distinctive characteristic, including public standard of judging one person. Using these different standards, an individual is possible to have various comments. The brilliant painter Van Gogh is a paradigmatic example. His works are believed crazy and unworthy at his epoch, and are quite hard to sell despite the actually low price, whereas they are regarded marvelous and excellent in modern people's opinion. Have these products changed during these hundreds of years? No. The one thing that has been altered is people's judgment. For these reasons, sometimes one's greatness can only be known by later public.

What's more, due to the limitation of people's knowledge, it is often hard for a person to accept a sound-like crazy, however really correct theory or viewpoint. This theory, as the development of science and the accumulation of facts, will consequentially be accepted and thus the one who bring forward this theory will be regarded as a great person. Bruno, a great predecessor in astronomy who holds on his belief of sun-center theory, was regarded as betrayer, sin and crazy in mind. Nevertheless, when further study revealed that his theory was practically right, people no longer have the former discrimination of him, but esteemed him as a brilliant and valorous astronomer. Many other examples also exist, demonstrating that peoples’ increasing level of knowledge helps the public find whether one and his/her works are great or not.

On the contrary, contemporaries are not always denying one's greatness. People who are at the same epoch with the "great persons" a likely to be more clear about the detailed information about him/her, thus more easily to find one's greatness. Look at these people: Einstein, Newton, or today's IT genius Bill Gates, they all receive respect from public when they are alive. The reason is that they all do contribution to their temporal society, and these efforts, which are not contradict with the main stream ideology and are also effective, are accepted by their contemporaries. Due to their great benefits and equally important, their fine morality, they gain this reputation from the supporting of their contemporaries. Without this supporting, one can not have this fame and thus will not be believed "great".

In sum, because of the difference between standard of criticize, the level of knowledge, the public is possible to have different comments on one person at different periods of time. However, people who live with him/her have more detailed information to draw a more completely conclusion. Therefore, to evaluate a person, people who live after him/her and his/her contemporaries are all important, and all play significant role in this judgment.

[ 本帖最后由 staralways 于 2006-2-17 16:11 编辑 ]

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我也是新丁，能力有限。只能改到这样，不过我觉得你的句型可以更多样些，别总是用定语从句什么的，虽然感觉句子很长，但很单调，我的个人意见。呵呵。
In this era of rapid development of technology leading to the economic growth, many great people have emerged in the world. How is these people's greatness decided? The author acclaimed that it can only be judged by people who live after them. However, as far as         I am concerned(没有用cencerning的吧), although many peoples'（应该是people's。笔误了是吧，呵呵）greatnesses are discovered by their descendants, one's（应该是复数，用 individuals吧，免得与上文重复）contemporaries' contribution can not be excluded.

In history, some people's greatness, which is acknowledged in current society, are（is)not found in  his period of life for the difference between people who live in the corresponding time. Each period in history has its distinctive characteristic, including (the)public standard of judging one person. Using these different standards, an individual is possible to have various comments. The brilliant painter Van Gogh is a paradigmatic example. His works are (all)believed crazy and unworthy at his epoch, and are quite hard to sell despite (in)the actually low price, whereas they are regarded marvelous and excellent in modern people's opinion. Have these products changed during these hundreds of years? No.(不好，太口语话了，可以这么说，The answer is absolutely negative .) The one thing that has been altered is people's judgment. For these reasons, sometimes one's greatness can only be known by later public.

What's more, due to the limitation of people's knowledge, it is often hard for a person to accept a sound-like crazy, however really correct theory or viewpoint. This theory, as the development of science and the(去掉the) accumulation of facts, will consequentially be accepted and thus the one who bring forward this theory will be regarded as a great person. Bruno, a great predecessor in astronomy who holds on his belief of （the）sun-center theory, was regarded as (a)betrayer, sin and crazy in mind. Nevertheless, when further study revealed that his theory was practically right, people no longer have the former discrimination of him, but esteemed（改成instead esteeming这样更顺些吧。你说呢） him as a brilliant and valorous astronomer. Many other examples also exist, demonstrating that peoples’ increasing level of knowledge helps the public find whether one and his/her works are great or not.

On the contrary, contemporaries are not always denying one's greatness. People who are at the same epoch with the "great persons" a likely to be more clear about the detailed information about him/her（没谓语啊）, thus more easily to find one's greatness. Look at these people: Einstein, Newton, or today's IT genius Bill Gates, they all receive respect from public when they are alive. The reason is that they all do contribution to their temporal society, and these efforts, which are not contradict with the main stream ideology and are also effective, are accepted by their contemporaries. Due to their great benefits and equally important, their fine morality, they gain this reputation from the supporting of their contemporaries. Without this supporting, one（复数 individuals） can not have this fame and thus will not be believed "great".

In sum, because of the difference between standard of criticize, the level of knowledge, the public is possible to have different comments on one person at different periods of time. However, people who live with him/her have more detailed information to draw a more completely(complete) conclusion. Therefore, to evaluate a person, people who live after him/her and his/her contemporaries are all important, and all play significant role in this judgment.