Issue36 V-March站队 第二篇谢谢您拍！

jackloveUID: 183611

限时一小时后不成功，又加了部分例子。
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1．There is no denying that in some areas, especially in scientific field, the greatness of individual can be recognized by people who follow them.
2．However, In the realm of business, society and people can readily recognize the greatness of individual.
3．In some areas, it is possible that the greatness of individual can be recognized case-by-case.
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Can the greatness of individuals be decided, by those who live after them, or by their contemporaries? The speaker asserts that the greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them. I disagree with the speaker's claims. In my view the greatness of individuals can be recognized, whether by those who live after them or by their contemporaries, which is based on a case-by-case analysis.

There is no denying that in some areas, especially in scientific field, that the greatness of individuals can be recognized by those who live after them is more just and comprehensively than them by their contemporaries. In their contemporary, due to the technology it is difficult to get comprehensive information about the individual. Moreover, people are readily limited by traditional customs or individuals profits. In any event, it is entirely possible that the greatness of individuals cannot be evaluated justly and properly so that many scientific contributions can be found after the scientist died. History is replete with examples that tells us only by those who live after them can the greatness of individuals be recognized. A classic case of this occurred early in the 20th century, when the German geologist Alfred Wegener suggested that the continents were at one time connected, a theory known as continental drift. At the time, most geologists discounted Wegener's ideas, because they most believe the fluid theory that can be utilized to explain some phenomenon in geology and geophysics. But following the discovery of plate tectonics in the 1960s, in which scientists found that the Earth’s crust is actually made of moving plates, continental drift became an important part of geology.

However, in the realm of business, the greatness of individuals can be readily recognized by their contemporaries. For example, Under the leadership of its founder, Henry Ford, the company implemented the assembly-line method of mass production and made cars affordable for middle-class consumers; Bill Gates found the Microsoft that completely change the world. Of course, the Dos and Windows make people better use computers; Zhang Ruimin, an entrepreneur in China, found the brand of icebox---Haier. A series of successful strategies have been run to make it product available for the public. In short, their contributions that can be far-reaching for nation or even the world can be recognized by their contemporaries.

Still in other areas like art, the greatness of artists lies in the unique thoughts and particular aesthetics faculties, hence, it is unavoidable that some artists might not be recognized by their contemporaries but done by followers. On the one hand, due to limited customs and skepticism from authorities, the greatness of some artists can not be recognized, yet after many years, people can realize the greatness of some artists can make an evaluating. Vincent. Van. Gogh, the greatest Holland painter, who was the father of the Impressionism in painting, was totally unacceptable and unappreciated by his contemporaries during his whole life. His contributions and genius were discovered more than one hundred years later and regarded as the most outstanding and glorious artists of his time. On the other hand, the greatness of some artists can readily be recognized by their contemporaries. Beethoven’s symphony quickly make him become the most musician in his times; Michelangelo has become so famous because of his work his Pietà, the colossal statue of David at Florence, and the cartoon; These examples illustrate that their talent and intelligence can be accepted and appreciated by their contemporaries, which make the greatness of them recognize.

In sum, in terms of different areas, the greatness of individuals may be recognized by those who live after them or by their contemporaries. Therefore, to judge the greatness of person, we’d better do based on the case-by-case analysis.

woodygtUID: 2136751

Can the greatness of individuals be decided, by those who live after them, or by their contemporaries? The speaker asserts that the greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them. I disagree with the speaker's claims. In my view the greatness of individuals can be recognized, whether by those who live after them or by their contemporaries, which is based on a case-by-case analysis.

There is no denying that in some areas, especially in scientific field, that这个that多了 the greatness of individuals can be recognized by those who live after them is more just and comprehensively than them by their contemporaries这句得改一下,我没看懂反正. In their contemporary, due to the technology it is difficult to get comprehensive information about the individual. Moreover, people are readily limited by traditional customs or individuals profits. In any event, it is entirely possible that the greatness of individuals cannot be evaluated justly and properly so that many scientific contributions can be found after the scientist died. History is replete with examples that tells us only by those who live after them can the greatness of individuals be recognized. A classic case of this occurred early in the 20th century, when the German geologist Alfred Wegener suggested that the continents were at one time connected, a theory known as continental drift. At the time, most geologists discounted Wegener's ideas, because they most believe the fluid theory that can be utilized to explain some phenomenon in geology and geophysics. But following the discovery of plate tectonics in the 1960s, in which scientists found that the Earth’s crust is actually made of moving plates, continental drift became an important part of geology.

However, in the realm of business, the greatness of individuals can be readily recognized by their contemporaries. For example, Under the leadership of its founder, Henry Ford, the company implemented the assembly-line method of mass production and made cars affordable for middle-class consumers; Bill Gates found the Microsoft that completely change the world. Of course, the Dos and Windows make people better use computers; Zhang Ruimin, an entrepreneur in China, found the brand of icebox---Haier. A series of successful strategies have been run to make it product available for the public.这句最好再考虑一下 In short, their contributions that can be far-reaching for nation or even the world can be recognized by their contemporaries.

Still in other areas like art, the greatness of artists lies in the unique thoughts and particular aesthetics faculties, hence, it is unavoidable that some artists might not be recognized by their contemporaries but done by followers. On the one hand, due to limited customs and skepticism from authorities, the greatness of some artists can not be recognized, yet after many years, people can realize the greatness of some artists can make an evaluating. Vincent. Van. Gogh, the greatest Holland painter, who was the father of the Impressionism in painting, was totally unacceptable and unappreciated by his contemporaries during his whole life. His contributions and genius were discovered more than one hundred years later and regarded as the most outstanding and glorious artists of his time. On the other hand, the greatness of some artists can readily be recognized by their contemporaries. Beethoven’s symphony quickly make him become the most musician in his times; Michelangelo has become so famous because of his work his Pietà, the colossal statue of David at Florence, and the cartoon; These examples illustrate that their talent and intelligence can be accepted and appreciated by their contemporaries, which make the greatness of them recognize.

In sum, in terms of different areas, the greatness of individuals may be recognized by those who live after them or by their contemporaries. Therefore, to judge the greatness of person, we’d better do based on the case-by-case analysis.

整体的结构很清晰,而且例子非常多,我就背不下这么多例子...
我觉得这篇基本上没什么问题了:victory:

jackloveUID: 183611

谢Woodygt

There is no denying that in some areas, especially in scientific field, the greatness of individuals  recognized by those who live after them is more just and comprehensively than them by their contemporaries 改了/ 后人评价的比同时代的人更公正全面

A series of successful strategies have been run——>(operated or utilized )to make its product available for the public 成功的策略使得他的产品能够走进大众。不知可否？~~

后来加上的，限时的时候很多例子都没记住/ 而且觉得自己写例子的语言有问题
就干脆直接用了//  看样子还需要背背

爱格UID: 2103778

我的这篇就被批评为：满眼都是例子没有深入分析～
我觉得你的例子一多没准换个人来评又是这句～
小心为妙！

jackloveUID: 183611

好的，下来我再看看明天答复了

woodygtUID: 2136751

关于那个第二句我是觉得你放在那里给人的感觉是不知道你在说Haier还是再说前面所有的例子,感觉这句话跟前面不是很连贯的样子.倒不是说你的用词问题.

jackloveUID: 183611

Zhang Ruimin, an famous entrepreneur in China, found the brand of icebox---Haier and made it  available for the public in China, that was unimagined ever before.

这样可以么/  顺确实可能还有点问题
我再顺顺

woodygtUID: 2136751

我现在明白你说的意思了,但是又搞不清你的例子的意思了.把一个产品搞的available有这么伟大吗,毕竟现在市场上多少available的东西呢.如果我对available理解没错的话.

jackloveUID: 183611

应该是可以更便宜吧让大众接受，恩
下来换个例子了~~
这个不太贴切