argument76 sally 小组 2 月18的作业,很迟才交，互拍啊

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题目：ARGUMENT 76 - The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.

"A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin."
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In this article of a health and beauty magazine, the writer concludes that Luxess is truly effective to better the condition of facial skin. To substantiate his conclusion, the writer provides a study of consumer using Luxess every morning for a month and felt well at the end of the month to show its function. It is sound at first glance, but deeply analysis reveals several flaws with the article's conclusion.

In the first place, the reliability of the study is open to doubt. For the one thing, writer does not provide any information about the group of volunteers. Little knowledge is given about the number of volunteers, whether is it large enough to be statistically significant, does the volunteers come from same place or randomly sparse in the whole country. For the other thing, the study is conducted by the Luxess company but not a authoritative organization.To advertise its product, the company will distort the true feeling of volunteers to tout their product, which makes the study's response inconvincible. Considering such possible situation, the writer cannot convince us that the study is reliable.

In the second place, the writer cannot assure us that it is the Luxess that contributes to the improvement of the skin. Most volunteers are reported using mild soap every morning. It it entirely possible that just the soap rather than Luxess meliorates the condition of facial skin. What is more, one month is too short a period. The lasting effect of the Luxess cannot be draw in so short of time. Maybe the effect of Luxess is short-term, when several months past, the condition of facial skin would turn back to formal way or even exacerbate due to the side effect of Luxess. Without ruling out these possibilities, the writer cannot guarantee the quality of the Luxess.

In the final place, the writer ignores other factors which may contribute to the improvement of volunteers. Probably the study is conducted in spring, when fine weather makes skin smooth and gives it comfortable feeling. It is equally possible that the group of volunteers are using some other cosmetics which is the truly factor to the skin improvement. Without considering such factors, the writer should not simply draw conclusion that Luexess can benefit the skin.

In sum, the writer's claim is ungrounded as it stands. To strengthen his view, he should provide detail information about the study and to be better, find some authority organization to do it. What is more, he should take other experiment to prove that it is Luxess other than anything else which lead to skin's improvement.

[ 本帖最后由 staralways 于 2006-2-19 22:17 编辑 ]

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ally 小组 argument76 2 月18的作业,很迟才交，互拍啊

题目：ARGUMENT 76 - The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.

"A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin."
字数：432          用时：0:30:00          日期：2006-2-18

In this article of a health and beauty magazine, the writer concludes that Luxess is truly effective to better the condition of facial skin. To substantiate his conclusion, the writer provides a study of consumer using Luxess every morning for a month and felt well at the end of the month to show its function. It is sound at first glance, but deeply analysis reveals several flaws with the article's conclusion.（开头写的中规中距，在简洁干练些效果会好些。）

In the first place, the reliability of the study is open to doubt. For the one thing, writer does not provide any information about the group of volunteers. Little knowledge is given about the number of volunteers, whether is it large enough to be statistically significant, does the volunteers come from same place or randomly sparse in the whole country. For the other thing, the study is conducted by the Luxess company but not a authoritative organization.（the study is not a authoritative organization but Luxess company）To advertise its product, the company will distort the true feeling of volunteers to tout their product, which makes the study's response inconvincible. Considering such possible situation, the writer cannot convince us that the study is reliable.(问题抓的准)

In the second place, the writer cannot assure us that it is the Luxess that contributes to the improvement of the skin. Most volunteers are reported using mild soap every morning. It is entirely possible that just the soap rather than Luxess meliorates the condition of facial skin. What is more, one month is too short a period. The lasting effect of the Luxess cannot be draw in so short of time（这点想的好）. Maybe the effect of Luxess is short-term, when several months past, the condition of facial skin would turn back to formal way or even exacerbate due to the side effect of Luxess. Without ruling out these possibilities, the writer cannot guarantee the quality of the Luxess.

In the final place, the writer ignores other factors which may contribute to the improvement of volunteers. Probably the study is conducted in spring, when fine weather makes skin smooth and gives it comfortable feeling. It is equally possible that the group of volunteers are using some other cosmetics which is the truly factor to the skin improvement. Without considering such factors, the writer should not simply draw conclusion that Luexess can benefit the skin.（这段和第二段有重复的嫌疑，还是说的study，可以贵为一段来写）

In sum, the writer's claim is ungrounded as it stands. To strengthen his view, he should provide detail information about the study and to be better, find some authority organization to do it（你不知道作者用的是否权威部门，所以不要直接让作者去找权威部门来做这项研究）. What is more, he should take other experiment to prove that it is Luxess other than anything else which lead to skin's improvement.

总体，写的还不错，继续努力。