ISSUE38 希望朋友们狠拍!留链必回

wenyuZUID: 2113611

TOPIC: ISSUE38 - "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
我的提纲:
1 电视作为媒介的好处
2 电视不能代替书本:我们不能通过电视学到as much as通过书本学到的
  a.电视不能给出统计的数据和事实;
  b.电视传达的观点信息等没有经过时间的考验和相关人员的鉴定;
  c.电视让我们容易被动接受;不能让我们思考.

Marked by great applications of products of high-tech and the ever-growing innovations, our society has been shaped dramatically both in the way people live their lives and in their believes. The area of media, once predominated by tremendous amounts of books, is now in the middle of the time in which the television prevails. Tendency is that people are likely to substitute televisions for books as the main tools to learn knowledge and practice skills. In my point of view, this trend, having directed in the wrong way to maintain the development, will eventually end in vain and therefore exert detrimental consequences on our society.

Admittedly, the tendency in point is inevitable in the regard of the advantages that the television has brought us since its introduction into our lives. Small is the box, but tremendous is the entertainment and surprising it will evolve. Who can deny the vivid descriptions with color, light and sound about famous historical scenery desired for a long time? Who would ever refuse to take a look at a face-to-face interview about a celebrity when this close image could not be available in any other medium? When people find that their dreams to love and to be loved eternally are realized on the scream in a soap opera, how could they ever move their eyes from the scream. By satisfying people the desire for close-to-life images and exposing them the realization of imaginative dreams, television has gain its paramount role in the area of media.

However, the wisdom and discernment are needed when we look into this phenomenon. The prevalence of television dose not necessarily mean that its importance has been tested by the time. Cast aside its superior merits in applying colorful images and various attractive programmes, television cannot be tools to help us see the truth, develop ourselves, and practice our thinking critically, which, however, can be fulfilled by reading the books.

Firstly, to see the truth, one needs the data and document relatived, especially in history. Not to mention that television is only the product of modernization which occurred in a short time span in history and therefore preclude the possibility to be the source of events and trends in history, there is little statistical data or document the television may bear. Being a vehicle for transforming the signal to image, television is mere a machine of no memory. In this sense, data and document can be only carried in books.  Written down precisely and literally, they are the very source that historians can interpret to the history we have now known.

Furthermore, compared with books, television is neither the expected tools to do some learning nor the medium to deliver the knowledge and skills. The materials gained from television are more likely to bear doubts about the credibility of them. Simultaneously are the events transferred on the scream from their occurrence without enough tests by the time and the critics in point, any learning and conclusion on the basis of them is therefore in lack of validity and convincing.   

In the final analysis, television can never be source of the wisdom and critical thinking. Who can ever deny the familiar situation that people sit in front of the scream neither having any change in the face nor talking with each other to share their opinion: their mind are easily brainwashed and their energy to practice thinking are easily drained. How can anyone in this stage gain the power and sparkle to inspire and create. However, for the books, as Francis Bacon had said to us, "reading make it possible to think, to reflect, to probe, to understand, to differ to agree to accept and to tolerate". Reading the literal writing of the author of a book, we try to interpret the concepts and ideas the author imbedded in the book through the means of practicing our imagination and adding our own experience. In this process, the sparkle of thought is to be kindled, the width and depth of it to be extended.

In sum, when televisions have invaded every corner of our lives, the vital importance of books as our main and dominate tools to develop ourselves is and should never be changed. Only through reading, not watching television, not indulging in the colorful images television has brought to us, that our capabilities to learn and to think can be realized.

呵呵,希望朋友们帮我改改哦!
一起加油!

亟沣UID: 2193237

Marked by great applications of products of high-tech and the ever-growing innovations, our society has been shaped dramatically both in the way people live their lives and in their believes. (这个句子稍微有些别扭，也许可以改成our society has shaped dramatically the way in which people live and believe.) The area of media, once predominated by tremendous amounts of books, is now in the middle of the time in which the television prevails. Tendency is that people are likely to substitute televisions for books as the main tools to learn knowledge and practice skills. In my point of view, this trend, having directed in the wrong way to maintain the development, will eventually end in vain and therefore exert detrimental consequences on our society. (exert to? or on?)
Admittedly, the tendency in point is inevitable in the regard of (with regard to, in regard to你这样说如果确定就好：) ) the advantages that the television has brought us since its introduction into（是不是少个动词？） our lives. Small is the box, but tremendous is the entertainment and surprising it will evolve. Who can deny the vivid descriptions with color, light and sound about famous historical scenery desired for a long time? Who would ever refuse to take a look at a face-to-face interview about a celebrity when this close image could not be available in any other medium（这样说会不会太绝对？我觉得就说book做不到就好）? When people find that their dreams to love and to be loved eternally are realized on the scream (screen) in a soap opera, how could they ever move their eyes from the scream (screen呵呵). By satisfying people the desire for close-to-life images and exposing them the realization of imaginative dreams, television has gain its paramount role in the area of media. （是想表达电视在所有媒体了有举足轻重的地位么？扮演了重要的角色？我不知道in the area of media这样说是否妥当，一时没想起来怎么说好呵呵还望高手指点）

However, the wisdom and discernment are needed when we look into this phenomenon. The prevalence of television dose not necessarily mean that its importance has been tested by the time. Cast aside its superior merits in applying colorful images and various attractive programmes, television cannot be tools to help us see the truth, develop ourselves, and practice (practise) our thinking critically (critical thinking) , which, however, can be fulfilled by reading the books. (我个人觉得这个地方however 插在那个地方不如写成which nevertheless)
Firstly (First of all, 或者好像first就可以了吧？？) , to see the truth, one needs the data and document relatived（你想说什么？相关的记录？related 或者relevant document?）, especially in history. Not to mention that television is only the product of modernization which occurred in a short time span in history and therefore preclude the possibility to be the source of events and trends in history, there is little statistical data or document the television may bear. Being a vehicle for transforming the signal to image, television is mere (merely?) a machine of no memory. In this sense, data and document can be only carried in books.  Written down precisely and literally, they are the very source that historians can interpret to the history we have now known. (we’ve known so far?) (另外这个段落好像不是很有说服力，因为你没有证明，为什么书面记载的东西就不能用电视这个手段呈现出来，甚至帮助historians to interpret…)
Furthermore, compared with books, television is neither the expected tools to do some learning nor the medium to deliver the knowledge and skills. The materials gained from television are more likely to bear doubts about the credibility of them. Simultaneously are the events transferred on the scream（呵呵，怎么又错了screen） from their occurrence without enough tests by the time and the critics in point, any learning and conclusion on the basis of them is therefore in lack of validity and convincing. （应该再展开写的，可以写媒体的动力是profit所以没有过滤信息的动机）   
In the final analysis, television can never be source of the wisdom and critical thinking. Who can ever deny the familiar situation that people sit in front of the scream (screen) neither having any change in the face nor talking with each other to share their opinion (opinions) (这句话我看糊涂了，没有表达清楚): their mind are easily brainwashed and their energy to practice (practise) thinking are easily drained. How can anyone in this stage gain the power and sparkle to inspire and create. However, for the books, as Francis Bacon had said to us, "reading make it possible to think, to reflect, to probe, to understand, to differ to agree to accept and to tolerate". Reading the literal writing of the author of a book (我觉得of有点多，可以考虑不写这么多修饰), we try to interpret the concepts and ideas the author imbedded in the book through the means of practicing （practising）our imagination and adding our own experience. In this process, the sparkle (是不是该用spark啊？) of thought is to be kindled, the width and depth of it to be extended.

In sum, when televisions have invaded every corner of our lives, the vital importance of books as our main and dominate tools to develop ourselves is and should never be changed. Only through reading, not watching television, not indulging in the colorful images television has brought to us, that our capabilities to learn and to think can be realized.

文章整体感觉不错。上面的一些指出的地方都是我的个人看法，仅供参考。

另外我父亲是新闻工作者，他跟我提到过说 电视属于线性媒体，而书是平面媒体。前者是无法取代后者的，因为线性媒体看了就完了，不能永恒。书是可以珍藏的。当然我当时也想过录像之类的可以保留下来，但是可能已经超出电视媒体的范畴。具体你可以研究一下， 我只是给你个提醒，呵呵～


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[ 本帖最后由 亟沣 于 2006-3-17 15:16 编辑 ]

小室黄瓜UID: 2155213

1 电视作为媒介的好处
2 电视不能代替书本:我们不能通过电视学到as much as通过书本学到的
  a.电视不能给出统计的数据和事实;
  b.电视传达的观点信息等没有经过时间的考验和相关人员的鉴定;
  c.电视让我们容易被动接受;不能让我们思考.

Marked by great applications of products of high-tech and the ever-growing innovations, our society has been shaped dramatically both in the way people live their lives and in their believes. The area of media, once predominated by tremendous amounts of books, is now in the middle of the time in which the television prevails. Tendency is that people are likely to substitute televisions for books as the main tools to learn knowledge and practice skills. In my point of view, this trend, having directed in the wrong way to maintain the development, will eventually end in vain and therefore exert detrimental consequences on our society.开头真的不错。学习ing~

Admittedly, the tendency in point is inevitable in the regard of the advantages that the television has brought us since its introduction into our lives. Small is the box, but tremendous is the entertainment and surprising it will evolve. 嗯，这句话是原创么？地道啊~Who can deny the vivid descriptions with color, light and sound about famous historical scenery desired for a long time? Who would ever refuse to take a look at a face-to-face电视里的可以说是面对面的么？ interview about a celebrity when this close image could not be available in any other medium? When people find that their dreams to love and to be loved eternally are realized on the scream in a soap opera, how could they ever move their eyes from the scream. By satisfying people the desire for close-to-life images and exposing them the realization of imaginative dreams, 这点有点抽象了~你觉得呢？具体说一个更好吧？television has gain its paramount role in the area of media.总的来说，除了一点小问题，这一段不仅在句式上还是观点都很标准！
However, the wisdom and discernment are needed when we look into this phenomenon. The prevalence of television dose not necessarily mean that its importance has been tested by the time. Cast aside its superior merits in applying colorful images and various attractive programmes, television cannot be tools to help us see the truth, develop ourselves, and practice our thinking critically, which, however, can be fulfilled by reading the books.

Firstly, to see the truth, one needs the data and document relatived, especially in history. Not to mention that television is only the product of modernization which occurred in a short time span in history and therefore preclude the possibility to be the source of events and trends in history, there is little statistical data or document the television may bear.好长的句子，不过说明白了！ Being a vehicle for transforming the signal to image, television is mere a machine of no memory. In this sense, data and document can be only carried in books.  Written down precisely and literally, they are the very source that historians can interpret to the history we have now known.

Furthermore, compared with books, television is neither the expected tools to do some learning nor the medium to deliver the knowledge and skills. The materials gained from television are more likely to bear doubts about the credibility of them. Simultaneously are the events transferred on the scream from their occurrence without enough tests by the time 举例说明啊，要不然不能convince us~and the critics in point, any learning and conclusion on the basis of them is therefore in lack of validity and convincing.感觉这样的分论点分成几段来说。如果不能深入剖析，就合为一段吧，要不然有盲目扩大篇幅之嫌。   

In the final analysis, television can never be source of the wisdom and critical thinking. Who can ever deny the familiar situation that people sit in front of the scream neither having any change in the face nor talking with each other to share their opinion: their mind are easily brainwashed and their energy to practice thinking are easily drained. How can anyone in this stage gain the power and sparkle to inspire and create. However, for the books, as Francis Bacon had said to us, "reading make it possible to think, to reflect, to probe, to understand, to differ to agree to accept and to tolerate". 加的好！Reading the literal writing of the author of a book, we try to interpret the concepts and ideas the author imbedded in the book through the means of practicing our imagination and adding our own experience. In this process, the sparkle of thought is to be kindled, the width and depth of it to be extended.这段分析得入理！没得挑了~

In sum, when televisions have invaded every corner of our lives, the vital importance of books as our main and dominate tools to develop ourselves is and should never be changed. Only through reading, not watching television, not indulging in the colorful images television 重复了！难道英文文章中有这么用的么？请指教！has brought to us, that our capabilities to learn and to think can be realized.

语言就不说了，我觉得够范文水平了。总体来说还是非常好的！

宝贝小猪UID: 2135340

看了lz的文章，，写的真的很好，不过，我 觉得把那abc写在一段里面是不是会更好一些呢？我也有看过范文象你这么写的，就是把原因分出来写三段
ps
lz的文章完全可以当范文了