Argument42

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Argument42
42．The following appeared in a proposal from the economic minister of the country of Paraterra.
"In order to strengthen its lagging economy, last year the government of the nearby country of Bellegea began an advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism (ecotourism). This year the number of foreign visitors arriving at Bellegea's main airport doubled, and per capita income in Bellegea increased by ten percent. To provide more income for the population of Paraterra and also preserve the natural environment of our tiny country, we too should begin to promote ecotourism. To ensure that our advertising campaign is successful, we should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign."

Before hiring the current director of Bellegea’s National Tourism Office as Paraterra’s consultant, the evidence given in the argument should be examined from several other angles. The minister seems to make assumption that the campaign taken charge by the director of Bellegea’s National Tourism Office has made the visitors double without examining any other factors which may have affected the double.

First of all, the arguer fails to provide substantial evidence of tourism prosperity. In this argument, we are informed that the number of foreign visitors to Bellegea's main airport doubled, and per capita income in Bellegea increase by ten percent, but nothing about its ecotourism. It is likely that most of the visitors come for business or visiting family members there. In these cases, capita income may also increase. To advance his argument, the arguer should provide the number of travelers for ecotourism at first.

In the second place, given that the tourism of Bellegea has been promoted, it does not means that it is owe to the advertising campaign. There might be other factors that brought those tourists. For instance, people like the great bargains or many other historic sites in the country, both of which are irrelative to the ecotourism.. Accordingly, the prosperity which may be brought orally by the previous visitors is not because of the advertising campaign.

In addition, admitted that the Bellegea's tourism is successful due to the advertising campaign, it does not follow that this promotion will be successful ever after. As it mentioned in the argument, there is only statistic number of this year, comparing to last year’s. What about the year after? The number may descend a triple. In this case, number of just one year is insufficient to be the evidence for the proposal.

Finally, even if the advertising campaign successfully promoted and will promote the ecotourism, we cannot ensure that the director would acquire success in Paraterra. Because distinctions between these two countries would lead to an unacceptable result. Bellegea improves its ecotourism because of its beautiful but unknown landscape. However, the argument does not provide information of Paraterra's advantages on ecotourism. It is possible that Paraterra features its modern city and high building, so it is inappropriate to develop the ecotourism. If Paraterra just fully copy the mold of Bellegea, it is sure that this dealing is inclined to fail.

To sum up, the conclusion presented by the minister is not credible because the evidence cited in the argument about the advertising campaign cannot lend strong support to the arguer’s recommendation to begin in his own country. More information about ecotourism and Paraterra’s characteristics should be presented by the arguer before the proposal is carried on.

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Argument42
42．The following appeared in a proposal from the economic minister of the country of Paraterra.
"In order to strengthen its lagging economy, last year the government of the nearby country of Bellegea began an advertising campaign to promote ecologically sound tourism (ecotourism). This year the number of foreign visitors arriving at Bellegea's main airport doubled, and per capita income in Bellegea increased by ten percent. To provide more income for the population of Paraterra and also preserve the natural environment of our tiny country, we too should begin to promote ecotourism. To ensure that our advertising campaign is successful, we should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign."

Before hiring the current director of Bellegea’s National Tourism Office as Paraterra’s consultant, the evidence given in the argument should be examined from several other angles. The minister seems to make assumption that the campaign taken charge by the director of Bellegea’s National Tourism Office has made the visitors double without examining any other factors which may have affected the double.

First of all, the arguer fails to provide substantial evidence of tourism prosperity. In this argument, we are informed that the number of foreign visitors to Bellegea's main airport doubled, and per capita income in Bellegea increase by ten percent, but nothing about its ecotourism. It is likely that most of the visitors come for business or visiting family members there. In these cases, capita income may also increase. To advance his argument, the arguer should provide the number of travelers for ecotourism at first.

In the second place, given that the tourism of Bellegea has been promoted, it does not means that it is owe to the advertising campaign. There might be other factors that brought those tourists. For instance, people like the great bargains or many other historic sites in the country, both of which are irrelative to the ecotourism.. Accordingly, the prosperity which may be brought orally by the previous visitors is not because of the advertising campaign.

In addition, admitted(admitting) that the Bellegea's tourism is successful due to the advertising campaign, it does not follow that this promotion will be successful ever after. As it mentioned in the argument, there is only statistic number of this year, comparing to last year’s. What about the year after? The number may descend a triple. In this case, number of just one year is insufficient to be the evidence for the proposal.

Finally, even if the advertising campaign successfully promoted and will promote the ecotourism, we cannot ensure that the director would acquire success in Paraterra. Because distinctions between these two countries would lead to an unacceptable result. Bellegea improves its ecotourism because of its beautiful but unknown landscape. However, the argument does not provide information of Paraterra's advantages on ecotourism. It is possible that Paraterra features its modern city and high building, so it is inappropriate to develop the ecotourism. If Paraterra just fully copy the mold of Bellegea, it is sure that this dealing is inclined to fail.

To sum up, the conclusion presented by the minister is not credible because the evidence cited in the argument about the advertising campaign cannot lend strong support to the arguer’s recommendation to begin in his own country. More information about ecotourism and Paraterra’s characteristics should be presented by the arguer before the proposal is carried on.
文章的语言组织得不错，模版也出来了，但总的来说还有一些小问题
2，3，4段合在一起写比较好，批驳作者所谓好的未必好：旅客多不一定游客多，游客多不一定是生态旅游的功劳，游客多也不一定是经济增长的主要原因，分开写稍微罗嗦了一点
最后To ensure that our advertising campaign is successful, we should hire the current director of Bellegea's National Tourism Office as a consultant for the campaign这个假设最好也批驳一下，即使搞生态旅游也不一定要请此人

[ 本帖最后由 daye520 于 2006-3-22 21:35 编辑 ]

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谢谢你哦：）