同主题第3篇，topic7，有拍比回！

woodygtUID: 2136751

In the past one hundred years, the new technologies have changed people’s life greatly. And televisions and movies may be the ones that have made the most significant influence. In my opinion, these new media changed people’s behavior in three aspects: the thing people concentrate on, the style of people’s life and the way people think.

        Fist, as televisions and movies have became the dominant media in the modern world, they even can determine what people should concentrate on. Today, what people talk with their friends are always the news that was just broadcasted hours ago by the news program, which is virtually “none of their business”. The TV programs can alter the public’s focus by simply broadcast what they want people to talk. And unfortunately, the public have already been used to accepting these passively.

        The second thing that has changed by the new media is people’s life style. Nowadays, a family usually sit together to watch TV in the evening and friends always choose to watch a movie to spend their weekends. The televisions and movies have became the central parts of people’s everyday life, and some people even have their schedule made based on TV programs, like: get up at the Morning News, have lunch at the Moon News, and wash clothes at the soap opera time. In a word, the new media have changed the way people live greatly.

        Finally, how people thinking have changed a lot during the past tens of years by the influence of televisions and movies. As these media need little active reactions, people just become more passive and tend not to think a lot when accepting new information. And another change is that people now think in a more similar way as they are watching the same programs.

        To sum up, television and movies have influenced people’s behavior greatly by choosing what the things people focus on, changing people’s lifestyle and altering how they think.

还是超时，无奈了。。。

[ 本帖最后由 woodygt 于 2006-4-20 23:33 编辑 ]

归来的虎子UID: 181060

In the past one hundred years, the the去掉new technologies have changed people’s life greatly. And televisions and movies may be the ones that have made the most significant influence. In my opinion, these new media changed people’s behavior in three aspects: the thing people concentrate on, the style of people’s life and the way people think.

        Fistspelling, as televisions and movies have became the dominant :handshake media in the modern world, they even can determine what people should concentrate on. Today, what people talk with their friends are always the news that was just broadcasted hours ago by the news program, which is virtually “none of their business”. The TV programs can alter the public’s focus by simply broadcast-ing what they want people to talk. And unfortunately, the public have already been used to accepting these passively.

The second thing that has changed by the new media is people’s life style. Nowadays, a family usually sit together to watch TV in the evening and friends always choose to watch a movie to spend their weekends. The televisions and movies have became the central parts of people’s everyday life :handshake , and some people even have their schedule made based on TV programs, like: get up at the Morning News, have lunch at the MoonNoon News, and wash clothes at the soap opera time. In a word, the new media have changed the way people live greatly.

        Finally, how people thinkingthink? have changed a lot during the past tens of years by the influence of televisions and movies. As these media need little active reactions, people just become more passive and tend not to think a lot when accepting new information. And another change is that people now think in a more similar way as they are watching the same programs.感觉这个理由段同第一段有点像，可以考虑把think in a more similar way 作主要理由说明

To sum up, television and movies have influenced people’s behavior greatly by choosing what the things people focus on, changing people’s lifestyle and altering how they think.

高手！6分了.可以考虑把模板decorate一下，因为批卷老师主要还是看开头结尾+每段首句

susan8940UID: 160449

感觉第三段可以把侧重点放在how上，讲movies or television是如何去影响life style的，楼主觉得呢？
最后一段如果放开头，主题就更明确了吧
自从第二期走题后，我就开始疑神疑鬼了:L

我的，请楼主指教  :)
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 susan8940 于 2006-4-21 15:10 编辑 ]

woodygtUID: 2136751

谢谢两位!
我上一篇也跑题跑的厉害...
这篇life style那个地方主要是不太好表达这个how,我再好好想想这个问题.

再次感谢!

supercowUID: 2177693

开头是不是最好把全文的分观点都列出来？

yz2274464UID: 2174140

word 我的请指正https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 yz2274464 于 2006-4-25 19:29 编辑 ]

steventopUID: 2195002

不要用First ,second,third

woodygtUID: 2136751

原帖由 supercow 于 2006-4-25 11:19 发表
开头是不是最好把全文的分观点都列出来？

我列了啊，是不是还不够明确啊？

woodygtUID: 2136751

原帖由 steventop 于 2006-4-25 19:53 发表
不要用First ,second,third

为什么呢？比较幼稚还是什么的？
我特别喜欢用这个东西，好记，写的时候不用想，呵呵。

woodygtUID: 2136751

原帖由 yz2274464 于 2006-4-25 18:49 发表
word 我的请指正https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

谢谢！看了我语法还是有待提高啊，很多我都没看出来，呵呵。