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7. How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.


As one of the most important media today,televison can un doutly have a great inluence on people's behavior in many aspects,ranging from daily things to one's opinions of great affairs happened in the world.In my point og view,there are 3 obvious ways that televison influnces people's behaviour that I would like to explain in the following.

First,it can change peoples' words(?).If an unfamiliar word or sentense were spoken by a famous actor in the televison,it may soon become popular because of the performance's influence which is transmitted by the television.For instance,a Chinese famous actor Geyou's sentence "i'm angry,i'm serious" in a movie in 2005 soon became popular thoughout China.Thus,televison can influence people's words in this way.

Second,those popular actors can have great influence on teenagers who always admire stars and try to imitate their behavior.Some of teenagers' odd behaviors in adults' opinion or "cool" behaviors in other teenagers' opinion are most likely to come from those stars they see in television.As the indispensable medium,televison can influences the young's behavior.

Third,maybe the most important influence televison has on people is that it can change people's thoughts or even give people its own thoughts about(?) great affairs happened nowadays.Since people can almost watch TV anywhere at any time,they will have its thoughts by imprinting.As a result,a new policy,a recent demonstration,peoples' thoughts about these can be somehow changed by televison and this will lead to those behaviors which are not people's original ones.

In conclusion,the more chances people have to watch televison,the more influence television will have on people's behavior.




想IDEA花了N长时间，写花了30分钟

powerpycUID: 2180236

打了问号的是拿不准的用法，还有觉得很多词有重复，又不知道到底该不该换词，换了好不好（如thought）

powerpycUID: 2180236

修改后---还是觉得没改完~-_-''

yidi mercuryUID: 195299

happened            happening
behaviour that I    which
are most likely to   mostly come from
As the indispensable   being an indispensable
mislead the public with individual opinions
感觉你在中文写作~~不适很正确~~
记得一点，要举例子说明自己的观点~~否则你绕来绕去都是这么几句话~~

一些词汇可以改进~~important改为 crucial or vital

euge_013UID: 173003

LZ的第1段和第2段的论据有点相似的 感觉在说一件事情 举例子也不是很充分
这些需要以后改进的说

powerpycUID: 2180236

恩恩，看来问题挺大的，谢谢

susan8940UID: 160449

楼主还是挺幽默的 :) (geyou的例子) 保持啊，不过如果能来点美国式的肯定让阅卷老师很开心

另外感觉前两段是写how to influence，可写着写着就变成what influence they give了，尤其是最后两段。我比较困惑的是，后者不算偏题吧？因为看了很多文章都这么写，还有写positive & negative influence都可以的吧？

楼主限时写出来让我很佩服，加油！
我的，请楼主指教： :)
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powerpycUID: 2180236

又有偏题的嫌疑-_-''

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undoubtedly, influence,一些拼写的错误，要小心
＂黎叔很生气，后果很严重＂那个例子恐怕ＥＴＳ不懂
第二段可以写成电视影响流行文化，popular art, 举例的时候再举：一些电视专用语不问对错的走近了生活，然后再找个合适的例子，我想了一会，可是没想到，或者不举例也可以，字数差不多就行了
第四段说电视可以改变人们的思想，甚至传递给人们新思想．这有递近的关系，但是下面没体现．current affair 是时事的意思，（不知道ＬＺ是不是想说这个）
结尾段是重述，然后适当深华也是可以的
谢谢ＬＺ的批改