topic 7,topic 14,请留链接

tianwangxinranUID: 2137111

这篇基本都是simple words,写的时候就很郁闷自己单词和表达的匮乏。
14. Some people believe that university students should be required to attend class. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.
大学生是否应该去上课：同意第二种观点
1，从课程的属性上来讲，某些课程是需要老师的指导才能更好的接受和深入的，但另外一些课程更重在实践能力，并没有强制上课的必要。
                      2，从学生的角度上来讲，有些学生适合课堂教学，而有些学生适合自学，或者与同伴讨论进行学习。

Absolutely there are diverse attitudes towards the problem whether university students should be required to attend class or not. Some people will persist that listening carefully in class is the most effective and efficient method to master one project rather than doing something else in the class time. Simultaneously some others will prefer that learning by themselves is the more free and comfortable way which will lead to better results. In my opinion, having one class or not depend on many different conditions.

Firstly, from the view about the attributes of various kinds of subjects, some obscure and difficult courses are necessary for students to hear the professors’ opinions and explanation. Students will comprehend one hard point deeply by attending class. Teachers’ advises will be important for theoretical science, such as mathematics, physics, chemic and so on. On the other hand, attending a class or not, which is relatively easy and understandable, will not influence study in the aspect of practical science as much as theoretical ones. Take English for example, oral English, listening or written English will never be promoted without using frequently. Therefore, in these subjects students should not be compelled to class.

What is more, to decide to go to class or not should consider students’ personal situation. Some students are suitable in sitting in classroom for a few hours to listen to one person talking about something. Only staying in one limited space and listening to one boring and tedious professor will be the most terrible thing in the world for some other students.
Thus it would be better to give these children liberty to leave classroom as long as they can learn the curriculum well enough.

Consequently, I agree with the second view that going to classes should be optional. University students are adults who can control their life and balance their entertainment and schoolwork very well. To Trust them and give them a loose circumstance will be the best way to manage a university.

[ 本帖最后由 tianwangxinran 于 2006-4-24 15:00 编辑 ]

susan8940UID: 160449

快困惑死了! :L
到底how to influence和what influence they give啊有区别啊?
后者也不算走题把?

我的,请楼主指教:
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tianwangxinranUID: 2137111

我稍微改了改，应该比上面的那个好一些吧
7. How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
电影，电视影响人们的行为：1，电影，电视可以拓宽人们的视野，了解更多的社会现状，进而改变人们的现实选择
2，电影，电视可以表现不同生活，影响人们对人生的看法，鼓励人们积极向上的生活
                          3，有些人过多地沉迷于虚幻世界中，有不良的影响
As the technology of media become more and more advanced, there are various kinds of programs in our televisions, benefit or time-consuming. The phenomenon that people spend plenty of time watching films and television will lead to some transformation in their behavior. However, what movies or television bring us are complicated. It’s hard to say that they are worth our compliment or not.

At first, by watching some programs in television, we can acquaint with some important information, such as educational news, examination news, domestic news, international news, jobs news and so on, which will be useful for us to make decisions. Sometimes many significant breakthrough, extraordinary emergencies and profound reports will show in television more effectively and quickly than newspaper and magazines. It is very useful for people. For example, when we select the university to attend or grasp some vocation, we will probably keep an eye on these kind of programs. Then perhaps they will change our ways to chase our dreams eventually, after we recognize the actual situation.

What’s more, movies and television can change the attitude towards life and promote positive and happiness lifestyle. A wonderful movie can evoke human to look forward to a happy life, make them indeed believe that they have the abilities to pursue what they actually desire and testify that something is deserve to be treasured. We can point out a lot example. The Hollywood cartoon movie, ice age, showing us a fascinating and interesting story among three cute animals, accentuates the importance of friendship. Rarely do people have never enjoy one film which have great influence through their life.

On the other hand, it has been proved that many children spend so much spare time facing the television that they neglect their studies. And also in order to gain profit, some station broadcast violence films producing a detrimental effect on adolescent ideas. Being obsessed in illusion will be harmful to children’s healthy grow as well.

All in all, the films and television have impressed in our daily lives as the main media. However, many measures are necessary to adopt to produce programs which will gain the whole social recognition. We should amplify the positive impacts, while get rid of the negative ones or minimize them. After that Common people will learn a lot valuable things from them.

dream_pursuerUID: 2208128

总体来说，听不错的。文章结构严谨。条理清晰。说理与事例相得益彰。尤其是举出
when we select the university to attend or grasp some vocation
和
The Hollywood cartoon movie, ice age, showing us a fascinating and interesting story among three cute animals, accentuates the importance of friendship.
时。感觉和前面说理搭配得很好。

但同时发现文章中有不少小语法错误和值得改进的小地方。
如：（加（）部分中内容是俺做的一点小修改）
lead to some transformation in （people’s behaviors）

（the influence） movies or television （bring to） is complicated

such as （examination and job information, domestic and international news） and so on感觉原文好几个news相连不够简洁

many significant （breakthroughs）

change （people’s attitudes）

（a） positive and happiness lifestyle

a lot （of examples）

keep an eye on these （kinds） of programs



另外在The Hollywood cartoon movie, ice age, showing us a fascinating and interesting story among three cute animals, accentuates the importance of friendship.
后的这句话：
Rarely do people have never enjoy one film which have great influence through their lives.
感觉和前面有点不相关。

个人的一点小看法。
总体来说，很不错。加油呵呵:handshake

tianwangxinranUID: 2137111

thank you！
ls对news的罗列的修改非常好，我也看着觉得有点怪怪的

Rarely do people have never enjoy one film which have great influence through their lives.
这句话确实满多余的，我当时是觉得那是个倒装阿！多不容易我才能写出个倒装句来，多少年才能见到一次，于是就什么都不管的加上去了！！

谢谢你，你的见解很棒！
你也加油！

susan8940UID: 160449

原帖由 tianwangxinran 于 2006-4-23 13:38 发表
我稍微改了改，应该比上面的那个好一些吧
7. How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
电影，电视影响人们的行为：1，电影，电 ...

谢谢楼主改我的文章,你提的意见相当好,我会照着修改的. :)

看了楼主修改过的文章,感觉可以多以movie/television做主语来写,更加突出主题中的
how.拿第三分论点来说,可以说movie/television provide怎么怎么多的精彩节目,children什么的怎么怎么被attracted了,因而荒了学业什么的.楼主觉得呢?

我的第四期作文,请楼主再指教 :)
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xujordanUID: 174747

0408考过
不会再出了

xujordanUID: 174747

0408考过
不会再出了

tianwangxinranUID: 2137111

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dream_pursuerUID: 2208128

文章开头和前两段说理事例挺棒的，尤其是开头一段，层次分明且有文采很吸引人。

俺就挑了一点小毛病：
opinions and explanation（s）
eachers’ advi（ce）
influence stud（ies） in the aspect（s）

中间一句觉得用主动式好一些，
a student will never promote the ability of English listening comprehension or the level of written English without extracurricular using and practicing frequently after class
或者只改动by （being used and practiced）frequently

个人觉得suitable （fo）好一些
consider students’ personal situation 中consider 不妨替换为take ... into consideration
其中( )内为已经改动内容

但是文章开头一段讲having one class or not depend(s) on many different conditions.
结束时候I agree with the second view that going to classes should be optional.
觉得前后似乎有点衔接不上，不妨可以说在部分课程required的基础上，让更多的课程optional.

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我的topic 14地址：https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

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