偶的topic14! 有拍比回!

duowqUID: 196783

看来今天偶应该是比较早交作文的吧. 嘿嘿. 不容易啊.请大家尽情拍砖啊. 小弟有拍必回! 这是小弟最近几次第一次没看范文就写了.
Topic 14  已经根据二楼的战友修改过了点.
There is a heat debate on whether university students should be required to attend classes. Many people think the modern students are responsible to attend their classes. In contrast, others hold the opposite opinion. They think it is not necessary for students to go to all classes. However, in my opinion, I am a firm advocator of the former opinion.

At the first place,  It is not difficult to understand that students who usually go to classes are always efficient to obtain knowledge. If you are always absent to classes and teach yourselves at home, you many spend a lot of time to learn what you should know, and inevitably, you may not go on well when you are in troubles highly beyond your mind. In contrast, if you study with the help of a experienced lecturer or a professor, you may feel studying is not a tough thing. These teachers can teach you how to find the short way and tell you the most valuable thing you should know. Obviously, learning in the classes is a better way for you.

At the second place, students spending a number of time having classes can establish a strong relationship with each other. In the classes, they can study with their classmates, learn one another, form the studying groups, talk about critical issues they care about. For them, all these behaviors may bring so much beneficent that they can develop the sense of teamwork and be in harmony with each other.

Finally, what maybe is the most important is that those university students have not yet enough ability to control themselves. Supposedly, if these students are always absent to classes with the excuse that classes should be optional for them, they are probable to spend the precious time in participating in some parties, playing the electronic games and so on. So, I believe going to classes is necessary for students.

In sum, study in the classes surely benefit students a lot. It can improve the efficiency of study, set up good relationship with each other and prevent the students from wasting time. So, I support that students should be required to go to classes.

[ 本帖最后由 duowq 于 2006-4-23 19:35 编辑 ]

midiyangUID: 2203266

鉴于水平有限，我只能挑些小细节出来。别的说不上来，请楼主见谅罗:)

第一句话There is a heart debate ……此处是否应该是heated debate。

倒数第四行……playing the electronic games and so on.是说电子游戏吧，是不是可就指电脑游戏呢，因为我没看到过electronic games的表示方法，不知computer games是否更妥。

……At the first place, students who usually go to classes are always efficient to learn knowledge. It is not difficult to understand.红色部分这句话感觉有点别扭，具体是哪里的问题说不清楚。learn knowledge好像不地道，用aquire or obtain 是不是更好，期待高人指点。  还有就是这两句话合二为一应当更好：……it is not difficult to understand that student who ……

就这些吧，楼主加油哦，:)

duowqUID: 196783

非常感谢楼上的战友的指点.  
1, 第一句话我打错了,不好意思. 我是想写heat debate的. 嘿嘿.
2,我好象有看过electronic games 这种表示方法的,但是也不确定的,请牛人指点.
3我也觉得红字的那句话有问题, 马上改正去.
共同进步啊.

woodygtUID: 2136751

There is a heat这个似乎还是不对吧，heat没有形容词意的 debate on whether university students should be required to attend classes. Many people think the modern students are responsible to attend their classes. In contrast, others hold the opposite opinion. They think it is not necessary for students to go to all classes. However, in my opinion, I am a firm advocator of the former opinion.

At the first place,  It is not difficult to understand that students who usually go to classes are always efficient to obtain in abtaining我觉得好点 knowledge. If you are always absent to我没看到有absent to的用法，from应该是好像 classes and teach yourselves at home, you many spend a lot of time to learn what you should know, and inevitably, you may not go on well when you are in troubles highly beyond your mind. In contrast, if you study with the help of a experienced lecturer or a professor, you may feel that studying is not a tough thing. These teachers can teach you how to find the short way and tell you the most valuable thing you should know. Obviously, learning in the classes is a better way for you.

At the second place, students spending a number of time having classes can establish a strong relationship with each other. In the classes, they can study with their classmates, learn one another, form the studying groups, talk about critical issues they care about. For them, all these behaviors may bring so much beneficent benefit that they can develop the sense of teamwork and be in harmony with each other.

Finally, what maybe is may be the most important is that those university students have not yet enough ability to control themselves. Supposedly, if these students are always absent to classes with the excuse that classes should be optional for them, they are probable to probably spend the precious time in participating in some parties, playing the electronic games and so on. So, I believe going to classes is necessary for students.

In sum, studying in the classes surely benefits students a lot. It can improve the efficiency of study, set up good relationship with each other and prevent the students from wasting time. So, I support that students should be required to go to classes.

整体结构我觉得很不错：）加油！

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