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Some students always hold the opinion that as collage students they do not need to attend every class any more. They claim that they can learn the same thing by themselves. In my point of view, however, it is necessary, even indispensable for a student to learn from the classroom. The regular education not only provides the knowledge that students need but also gives them a chance to communicate with others.

        First, although I concede that learning by oneself is an ability that should be improved in one’s collage time, and it has been proved to be an effective way for further education, the regular education which is offered by professional teachers is much more efficient. Professors usually have been studying in the particular fields for years, and they know what the field is really about and can help students to understand the course better. The students can be led directly to the main point of the course in the shortest time.

        Second, most collage students are not familiar with their major at the very beginning. They just do not know what they should learn and what is the most important thing in their fields. Without the direction given by the professors the students may just be busy engaged in something that they will find to be useless eventually. Instead, by attending the classes given by the professors, the students can easily understand the whole field.

        Finally, classrooms are not only the place to listen to the teachers but also the place to communicate with others, including the professors and the classmates, and to exchange ideas and opinions. And these are more crucial in studying new things. By expressing one’s own opinion he or she can make a deeper understand of what he or she has learnt, and by listening to others, one can have a more comprehensive view of the course. In short, communication accelerates the process of learning.

        To sum up, learning in the classroom can make one’s study more efficient by offering the best way to study, helping students to choose the course and providing the chance to communicate with others. So the university students should be encouraged to attend classes.


标红色的那两句word检查有语法错误,但是我觉得第1句这么说也可以吧,把what当主语。第2句我就看不出问题了,请高手指点下吧。

到现在还是超时。。。没天理了。
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发表于 2006-4-25 11:27:24 |只看该作者
我觉得是不是有点偏了 它说的是自己选还是要求上的嘛?

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发表于 2006-4-25 12:14:46 |只看该作者
First, although I concede that learning by oneself is an ability that should be improved in one’s collage time, and it has been proved to be an effective way for further education, the regular education which is offered by professional teachers is much more efficient.这句话感觉有点头重脚轻,看了很久才能找出主句,个人觉得把主句前移,although引导的句子后移较好。

红线部分的句子,我也觉得没什么语法错误。

楼主也帮我改改吧:handshake
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... e%3D1#pid1768485638

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发表于 2006-4-25 12:17:48 |只看该作者
First, although I concede that learning by oneself is an ability that should be improved in one’s collage time, and it has been proved to be an effective way for further education, the regular education which is offered by professional teachers is much more efficient.作为主题句来说似乎长了点,建议楼主先说结论,再阐述原因

Without the direction given by the professors the students may just be busy engaged in something that they will find to be useless eventually.
busy改为busily就对了:)

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发表于 2006-4-25 17:01:42 |只看该作者
同意楼上的改法!
另外觉得这个句子可以干脆写的简洁些,比如把to be 去掉,以及在professor之后加
个逗号,读起来更舒服些.

谢谢楼主帮看我的作文啊 :)
觉得楼主也喜欢写长句子,并且不够简洁,彼此啊,一起加油吧!

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发表于 2006-4-25 18:46:04 |只看该作者
没有提关于optional观点的,觉得应该提及

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发表于 2006-4-25 20:35:36 |只看该作者
不要用first.second

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发表于 2006-4-26 00:26:51 |只看该作者
原帖由 夜一 于 2006-4-25 12:17 发表
First, although I concede that learning by oneself is an ability that should be improved in one’s collage time, and it has been proved to be an effective way for further education, the regular edu ...


完了,这几天的语法白看了。。。

谢谢!
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发表于 2006-4-26 00:29:40 |只看该作者
原帖由 loiswtf 于 2006-4-25 18:46 发表
没有提关于optional观点的,觉得应该提及


这个是我的问题了,下次一定要看着题目写文章了。这个题目我就对attend那部分特别感兴趣,所以就没注意后面的部分。。。教训啊。
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