第四期

expire7UID: 2160574

In recent decades, with the economy and the society keeping on developing without any cessation, more and more attention is draw to education. There is a heat debate over what pattern of education is better in university. Since people are inclined to that students ought to be required to attend classes. On the other hand, many people ask for more optional room to students in their classes. Before rendering my opinion, I think it is necessary to look at the argument from both sides.

For one thing, it is certain that that universities need students attending classes is a valid and sound way to accomplish the aim of teaching students. First of all, the foremost task of universities is to aid students on improving their knowledge, preparing for future work and building good thinking ways. Therefore, even if universities try their best to design lessons to be selected by students, that hard work can not achieve its original goals, if students will not attend class. For example, although a student enters one of the most famous universities through his industrious study, he may miss the real fortune of the university. Since he considers the university free room and can do anything he favors, he neglects and rejects attending classes. Finally, he may not build a frame of any subjects and waste the precious chance in the university.

For another, there are some advantages in giving more rights to students to determine their courses. No student is exactly same. They born at different places experienced various events and will be destined to diverse roads. It is undoubted that classes supplied by universities can not be content with every student. A good way to complement this shortcoming is that universities allow more freedom in attending classes. Optional classes can ignite interests and potentials of students, and render more time to them choose any knowledge they can not get from conventional classes. Of course, optional class will be harmful under some circumstance, for the sake of that a few students can grasp its defect to indulge in something not relevant to their classes.

From analysis and example mentioned above, both of those methods have attractive advantages and shameful disadvantages. On the basis of my experience and custom, I am favor in the optional system. It will bring about many opportunities to choose appropriate and favorite classes. At the same time, I will possess much time to study what I interests and develop my characteristics in the natural way.

To sum up, there is no doubt to me to prefer that going to classes should be optional for students.

最后一个总结段有没有必要存在？感觉做出个人选择时候似乎就已经够了。大家给下一间吧。回拍留链。:rolleyes:

susan8940UID: 160449

In recent decades, with the economy and the society keeping on developing without any cessation, more and more attention is draw to education. There is a heat debate over what pattern of education is better in university. Since people are inclined to that students ought to be required to attend classes.(为何用since?感觉跟后面连接不太好,是我不知道的用法吗?) On the other hand, many people ask for more optional room to students in their classes. Before rendering my opinion, I think it is necessary to look at the argument from both sides.

For one thing, it is certain that that universities need students attending classes is a valid and sound way to accomplish the aim of teaching students.(改下是否更好?it is certain that requiring students to attend classes is a .. way for universities to accomplish..) First of all,(后面好像没有second,third吧?) the foremost task of universities is to aid students on improving their knowledge, preparing for future work and building good thinking ways(或better thinking mode). Therefore,(有因果关系吗?) even if universities try their best to design lessons to be selected by students, that hard work can not achieve its original goals, if students will not attend class.(这句感觉有点混乱啊) For example, although a student enters one of the most famous universities through his industrious study, he may miss the real fortune of the university. Since he considers the university free room and can do anything he favors, he neglects and rejects attending classes. Finally, he may not build a frame of any subjects and waste the precious chance in the university.

For another, there are some advantages in giving more rights to students to determine their courses. No student is exactly (the)same. They born at different places experienced various events and will be destined to diverse roads. It is undoubted that classes supplied by universities can not be content with(或satisfy) every student. A good way to complement this shortcoming is that universities allow(或offer students) more freedom in attending classes. Optional classes can ignite interests and potentials of students, and render more time to them choose any knowledge they can not get from conventional classes. Of course, optional class will be harmful under some circumstance, for the sake of that a few students can grasp its defect to indulge in something not relevant to their classes.

From analysis and example mentioned above, both of those methods have attractive advantages and shameful disadvantages. On the basis of my experience and custom, I am favor in the optional system. It will bring about many opportunities to choose appropriate and favorite classes. At the same time, I will possess much time to study what I interests and develop my characteristics in the natural way.

To sum up, there is no doubt to me to prefer that going to classes should be optional for students.

词汇丰富,句型多变!
这种结构我没写过,不太熟悉,不过感觉没支持一种观点好写,不容易论证充分.
总的来说楼主写的不错  :)

我的,请楼主指教
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yogurt4UID: 198389

下次记得把题目贴出来
这个先放着,我明天来瞅一下

michel_shaoUID: 204704

In recent decades, with the economy and the society keeping on developing without any cessation, more and more attention is draw to education. There is a heat debate over what pattern of education is better in university. Since people are inclined to that students ought to be required to attend classes. On the other hand, many people ask for more optional room to students in their classes. Before rendering my opinion, I think it is necessary to look at the argument from both sides.

For one thing, it is certain that that universities need students attending classes is a valid and sound way to accomplish the aim of teaching students. First of all, the foremost task of universities is to aid students on improving their knowledge, preparing for future work and building good thinking ways. Therefore, even if universities try their best to design lessons to be selected by students, that hard work can not achieve its original goals, if students will not attend class. For example, although a student enters one of the most famous universities through his industrious study, he may miss the real fortune of the university. Since he considers the university free room and can do anything he favors, he neglects and rejects attending classes. Finally, he may not build a frame of any subjects(不知道这样的表达好不好) and waste the precious chance in the university.

For another(thing?), there are some advantages in giving more rights to students to determine their courses. No student is exactly same. They born at different places experienced various events and will be destined to diverse roads. It is undoubted that classes supplied by universities can not be content with every student. A good way to complement this shortcoming is that universities allow more freedom in attending classes. Optional classes can ignite interests and potentials of students, and render more time to them choose any knowledge they can not get from conventional classes. Of course, optional class will be harmful under some circumstance, for the sake of that a few students can grasp its defect to indulge in something not relevant to their classes.

From analysis and example(复数好一点吧) mentioned above, both of those methods have attractive advantages and shameful disadvantages. On the basis of my experience and custom, I am favor in the optional system. It will bring about many opportunities to choose appropriate and favorite classes. At the same time, I will possess much time to study what I interests and develop my characteristics in the natural way.

To sum up, there is no doubt to me to prefer that going to classes should be optional for students.

No student is exactly same.我知道lz的意思,但是不知道这样的表达方式地不地道.
例子方面,觉得LZ给出的例子假设居多,还是在讲道理,讲有个学生错过了大学机会的那个.好象和主题偏了一点点.
说说结构的方面:lz先分别写好的和不好的方面,再在最后点出自己的观点.我觉得可以在第一段开头就开门见山点明自己的看法,再在下面分开写.要不要看到最后两段才知道LZ的观点.

[ 本帖最后由 michel_shao 于 2006-4-27 01:32 编辑 ]

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帮我看看吧
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vigilwangUID: 203758

In recent decades, with the economy and the society keeping on developing without any cessation, more and more attention is draw to education. There is a heat不能做形容词吧 debate over what pattern of education is better in university. Since people are inclined to that students ought to be required to attend classes. On the other hand, many people ask for more optional room to students in their classes. Before rendering my opinion, I think it is necessary to look at the argument from both sides.

For one thing, it is certain that that universities need students attending need Sb. doing?楼主是想把学校强迫学生上课作主语吧classes is a valid and sound way to accomplish the aim of teaching students. First of all, the foremost task of universities is to aid students on improving their knowledge, preparing for future work and building good thinking ways. Therefore, even if universities try their best to design lessons to be selected by students, that hard work can not achieve its original goals, if students will not attend class. For example, although a student enters one of the most famous universities through his industrious study, he may miss the real fortune of the university. Since he considers the university free room and can do anything he favors, he neglects and rejects attending classes. Finally, he may not build a frame of any subjects and waste the precious chance in the university.

For another, there are some advantages in giving more rights to students to determine their courses. No student is exactly(the) same. They born at different places (,)experienced various events and will be destined to diverse roads. It is undoubted that classes supplied by universities can not be content with every student. A good way to complement this shortcoming is that universities allow more freedom in attending classes. Optional classes can ignite interests and potentials of students, and render more time to them(to) choose any knowledge they can not get from conventional classes. Of course, optional class will be harmful under some circumstance, for the sake of that a few 这里表否定直接用few students can grasp its defect to indulge in something not relevant to their classes.

From analysis and example（s） mentioned above, both of those methods have attractive advantages and shameful disadvantages. On the basis of my experience and custom, I am favor in the optional system. It will bring about many opportunities to choose appropriate and favorite 有最高级的意思吧，前面的形容词appropriate是否也应该加上the most? classes. At the same time, I will possess much time to study what I interests and develop my characteristics in the natural way.

To sum up, there is no doubt to? me to prefer that going to classes should be optional for students.

楼主的写法挺新颖，有些地方表达不太地道，这也只有看别人的作文才能发现腊
我想问问谢托福的时候能不能标新立异写成童话或者其他什么的:lol

我的，请拍！
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yogurt4UID: 198389

我来无敌的UP下,这个今天看不了
撑不住了,你是语法听力作文三个大炮轰我啊
问的题目真素无敌,最后我也倒下了,呵呵
cu tomorrow

yogurt4UID: 198389

是,我觉得应该在开头给出自己的观点,然后在后面谈两个方面
各自的优缺点,你赞同的方式要侧重谈优点,否则建议采用combine的方式教学

很多有问题的表达的地方

First of all, the foremost task of universities is to aid students on improving their knowledge

aid students to improve...

try their best to design lessons to be selected by students

后面的therefore意思上也有点莫名其妙,看不出来顺承关系

build a frame of any subjects

passion吧?


语言太chinglish了,影响意思的表达,这是看上去的第一个毛病

第二,twe没有aw那么多时间给你搞段内转折,要转就一段一段的转折好了
你的第二段就是这样.看开头是说必修的意义,后面first of all,解释第一点
therefore又是接着说,信号词和你后面的句子意思完全不配对,实际上你是想否定必修
ts,过渡,一个字,差~!


修改的话
人说甲好,人说乙好,我觉得什么什么好--->开头表明自己的观点


b1. Although required class attending is considered to equip students with more knowledge and skills/Although no one can deny that*** , we might still reap little benefit from .........After all, 缺点......

b2.When it comes to selective class attending,优点虾米.

结尾:对照强制上课,选修可能有点点缺点,但总的来说,这种缺点还是可以弥补的/和它的优点比,即使有缺点,还是值得的.再次换个表达方式把B2的有点夸一下.所以我选择B2.

yogurt4UID: 198389

in short,aw绕啊绕,转折啊转折,折中啊折中,这你都搅到twe里面来了
原来那种一眼瞟上去干干净净的结构倒丢了

注意开头,结尾,ts,信号词的功能.
至于题目的内容,能有多大写头?你是在大城市住还是在小城市住?飞机和自行车那个更重要?这种话题用中文大部分人可以讲上半天吧.

所以要想拿高分,关键是怎么把这些土得掉渣的内容表达出来
清晰的结构,流畅简洁的语言,就是这样.