Topic79 写完才知道什么叫自虐~~

归来的虎子UID: 181060

Extra  NO. 4   Topic  79   Time consumed: 31min


  When the news is released that our city has decided to build a famous person in my country, there bursts out much discussion in my community at once mainly on which one would be a choice. When faced the question myself, I think that I would prefer Du Fu, the most famous and respectful poet in Tang Dynasty.

  The most significant argument of my point is that our city, Xi’an, is one of the tourists’ heaven throughout the country, with countless places of interest and a rich legacy of cultural debris. Thirteen Dynasties have make Xi’an their capital, including Tang Dynasty, during which China is in its golden age, both in economy and culture. There are a myriad of people coming to Xi’an to chase back the past glory of the Empire. Du Fu, being as a symbol of the cultural spirit of Tang, would definitely attracts more people flushing into the city, thus give us a bigger tourism income.

  Another striking reason for my choice goes to the fact that nowadays more and more people, engaged in admiring and fighting for the modern life, are getting lose to the culture inheritance our ancestors left us. High school children are all familiar with BackStreet Boys and Hollywood movies, but few of them have ever heard about Yue Fu songs. It is high time to remind us of what we have inherited from our wise forebears. A statue of Du Fu will just function in this way.

  Furthermore, as we all know, that Du Fu is one of the most talented realistic poets in our history. A memorial of this literary giant would stimulate people in and out of our country to study and develop this great form of Chinese literature. And, in consequence, promote our affection and self-pride to out country.

  To put into a nutshell, despite many other candidates in choosing a person to be honored with a statue or monument, I hold the strong belief that Du Fu should be given first priority because he could not only attracts more tourists to influx into our city but also encourage our citizens to remember our splendid literal historic inheritance.

晕了，随便找了一个BT题就写成这样了~~
大家使劲扔啊

归来的虎子UID: 181060

up up

westcowerUID: 2123051

symbol 改成symbolization 也许更好点

这个文化名字好多.不容易

beryl2006UID: 2199018

好有勇气啊,,佩服佩服

bjork921UID: 2125927

5-6

songofyngwieUID: 2205435

不错

sharkangleUID: 2180822

读起来很不顺利啊，我觉得你这搞得太中国化了~~

smartcellUID: 2177277

5.5
不过感觉写的有些口语化了

susan8940UID: 160449

大概看了下，挺不错的：）
今晚也写个BT的

雷鼠UID: 2159778

写得还是很不错的 赞一个
我的摸板都快忘记了

lanccyUID: 2156906

提点反对意见：
觉得这篇文章写得有点乱。特别是B1段，你得ts说西安是个古都，可是完全没有和杜甫扯上关系，你应该说杜甫经常在西安活动（是这样没错吧），是西安文化的一个代表，所以要在西安建杜甫的纪念碑。B2的ts同样没有扣题，你应该说建杜甫的纪念碑是为了让当代人重拾古代文化，而不是说现代人对古代文化越来越陌生。只有B3的ts是扣题的。

这篇文章我一个月前写过，是写的周恩来的。三个理由分别是他是新中国的第一任总理，他身为一国总理死后未留一分遗产，他身为一个有着十亿人口国家的总理身后未留子嗣，把自己都贡献给了祖国的建设事业。

不想发上来了，不知你觉得这个提纲可否？

wandonyeUID: 2143573

文化差异：他身为一个有着十亿人口国家的总理身后未留子嗣
                                                                     ~~~~~~这个理由也许老美不能理解

归来的虎子UID: 181060

唉，以后还是写政治人物好了，好写啊~


谢谢lanccy的意见！

[ 本帖最后由 归来的虎子 于 2006-5-8 17:56 编辑 ]

lanccyUID: 2156906

原帖由 wandonye 于 2006-5-8 08:25 发表
文化差异：他身为一个有着十亿人口国家的总理身后未留子嗣
                                                                     ~~~~~~这个理由也许老美不能理解

这三个理由是联合国秘书长当时解释为何为周恩来逝世降半旗的理由