issue51 第一篇issue习作，fly aw第二次作业

风中尘埃UID: 164965

TOPIC: ISSUE51
"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."


1、开头：教育已经开始多元化
2、适应需求是趋势，如远程教育，在职教育等，不同的教育形式可以满足不同的需求
3、除了形式上，教育内容上也开始多样化，选修课制度就是代表，很多国家甚者从初中就开始鼓励孩子选择喜欢的职业教育而不是普通高中
[4、形式上的多样性和贴身性是必要的，但是社会并不是一个分门别类的世界，在真实世界中，我们必须面对的是整个，所以如果希望能通过特殊教育来保护弱势，可能值得商榷]
5、另外，作为教育的另一个功能，培养公民，而不仅仅是职业人来说，必要的普遍性道德教育是不能取代的。否则面对如此多的选择，年轻人可能做出选择的能力都没有
[6、最后，设计是死的，人是活的，设计出针对性的教育制度固然重要，但是高尚的老师给我们带来的影响是无法衡量的。教育的有效性既取决于它自身，也取决于执行他的人。only when 太过了]4，6点后来都没写，觉得写得比较散乱，再写就更乱了

自己知道结尾写得很潦草，从来没写过，听新东方的网络课堂也还没听到介绍结尾，大家原谅则个。前面的语句可能显得很幼稚，我这次是掐了时间的，一个多小时写完500字（别问我以前不限时是什么速度，汗~~~）

Now adays, education has experienced an dramatic reformation which resulted from both technique and civial developing. This reformation has aroused so many controversial issues especially in the aera of educational system construction. As to me, some kind of relativism may be better than go to the extremes.

In this era of competition and vanity, inkstand of simply take education as some kind of self-perfection progress, many of us treat it like pre-career training. Only from this aspect, the problem of the efficiency of education can get its significance. Though it seemed a little over-positive, the prosperous of various form of education, such as far-reach education, night schools, continuing education, and so forth, will strongly convince us that there is an enormous success to offer specifically designed education to meet the individual needs and interest. In Europe, some countries has began to encourage students to entry into specified technique schools other than their traditional choice of ordinary high schools after the graduation of primary education. As officially stated, this will help youngersters to develop their own advantages and become successful in their career exclude scholars. To some extent, it's true that if you only want to be a happy plumber, why you have to spend your time in the endless high school study?

Moreover, except for the fleet changing of its form, the contemporary education also become specifically designed in its content. Even in the junior high school, many students have the choice to take more classes in the field they are good at or interested in, not to mention the extracurricular activities. I have an Australian friend who want to be a craft driver and has chosen to study calculus when she was in junior high. As an comparison, her brother's interest is in literature. Unlike many Chinese students who have to study the whole integral subjects from chemistry to history, they have some limited but still freedom to ignore the subject they feel useless. One's meal maybe another's poison, why shouldn't we just offer them what they want and become both pleasant and effective?

The answer to the questions mentioned above is simple: there are some kind of nutrition, which maybe minus but are able to cause fatal diseases, they couldn't get unless they have balanced diet. To a sociaty, it couldn't measure exactly how more efficient a well educated man will function, just like we couldn't measure the contribution a balanced meal will do to our health. But we do know if we keep eating the junk food, we probably will get ill for lack of vitamin, or other nutrition. It is the same that if the society keeps producing citizens with only specified expertises; its health may in danger. To make our education more health, we need to teach more about the common morals like duties to family and society, honesty, thrifty, etc, basic thinking principals including both the reasoning ones and the article ones, the ability to enjoy some really beautiful things of our civilization. Only if we do this rightly, the life would be a pleasant procedure to go with our neigbours.

In the end, we should all acknowledge that specified education is the main trend of the world and has bring us a lot of convenience. If only we noticed it’s fallacies we could use it better without hurt ourselves.

[ 本帖最后由 风中尘埃 于 2006-5-20 04:55 编辑 ]

kckUID: 2214868

Nowadays, education has experienced an[a] dramatic reformation which resulted from both technique and civial[civil]developing. This reformation has aroused so many controversial issues especially in the aera[area] of educational[education] system construction. As to me, some kind of relativism may be better than go to the extremes.

In this era of competition and vanity, inkstand of simply take education as some kind of self-perfection progress, many of us treat it like pre-career training. Only from [in?]this aspect, the problem of the efficiency of education can get its significance. Though it seemed a little over-positive, the prosperous of various form of education, such as far-reach education[远程教育这么表达感觉不对remote education?], night schools, continuing education, and so forth, will strongly convince us that there is an enormous success to offer specifically designed education to meet the individual needs and interest. In Europe, some countries has [have]began to encourage students to entry into specified technique schools other than their traditional choice of ordinary high schools after the graduation of primary education. As officially stated, this will help youngersters[young people ] to develop their own advantages and become successful in their career exclude scholars. To some extent, it's true that if you only want to be a happy plumber, why you have to spend your time in the endless high school study?

Moreover, except for the fleet changing of its form, the contemporary education also become specifically designed in its content. Even in the junior high school, many students have the choice to take more classes in the field they are good at or interested in, not to mention the extracurricular activities. I have an Australian friend who want to be a craft driver and has chosen to study calculus when she was in junior high[school]. As an[a] comparison, her brother's interest is in literature. [这里仅仅只说兴趣不同，没说带来什么差异]Unlike many Chinese students who have to study the whole integral subjects from chemistry to history, they have some limited but still freedom to ignore the subject they feel useless. One's meal maybe another's poison, why shouldn't we just offer them what they want and become both pleasant and effective?

The answer to the questions mentioned above is simple: there are some kind of nutrition, which maybe minus but are able to cause fatal diseases, they couldn't get unless they have balanced diet. To a society[society], it couldn't measure exactly how more efficient a well educated man will function, just like we couldn't measure the contribution a balanced meal will do to our health. But we do know if we keep eating the junk food, we probably will get ill for lack of vitamin, or other nutrition. It is the same that if the society keeps producing citizens with only specified expertises; its health may in danger. To make our education more health, we need to teach more about the common morals like duties[responsibilities or fidelity忠诚] to family and society, honesty, thrifty, etc, basic thinking principals including both the reasoning ones and the article ones, the ability to enjoy some really beautiful things of our civilization. Only if we do this rightly, the life would be a pleasant procedure to go with our neigbours.

In the end, we should all acknowledge that specified education is the main trend of the world and has bring us a lot of convenience. If only we noticed it’s fallacies we could use it better without hurt ourselves.[去掉only?]
[文章中心感觉不够明确，应该着重在教育无论从形式还是内容上的多元化带来高效率，而不是仅仅阐述这个事实。可以看夜一引的那个I51的分析，题目的主义是： education[主体]meet individual needs and interests [途径]will be truly effective[目的]。可以在这中间做文章，阐述自己见解。不过，能在一小时内写完已经很强了，至少在刚开始的阶段，让我佩服佩服啊。。。。。。。。  ]

honeyviolaUID: 2199703

Now adays  Nowadays, education has experienced an dramatic reformation which resulted from both technique and civial developing. This reformation has aroused so many controversial issues especially in the aera of educational system construction. As to me, some kind of relativism may be better than go to the extremes.

In this era of competition and vanity, inkstand instand of simply take taking education as some kind of self-perfection progress, many of us treat it(最好用从句可能清楚些吧) like pre-career training. Only from this aspect, the problem of the efficiency of education can get its significance. Though it seemed a little over-positive, the prosperous of various form forms  of education, such as far-reach distance education, night schools TAFE, continuing education, and so forth, will strongly convince us that there is an enormous success to offer specifically designed education to meet the individual needs and interest. In Europe, some countries has began to encourage students to entry into specified technique schools other than their traditional choice of ordinary high schools after the graduation of primary education. As officially stated, this will help youngersters to develop their own advantages and become successful in their career exclude scholars. To some extent, it's true that if you only want to be a happy plumber, why you have to spend your time in the endless high school study?

Moreover, except for the fleet changing of its form, the contemporary education also become specifically designed in its content. Even in the junior high school, many students have the choice to take more classes in the field they are good at or interested in, not to mention the extracurricular activities. I have an Australian friend who want to be a craft driver and has chosen to study calculus when she was in junior high. As an comparison, her brother's interest is in literature. Unlike many Chinese students who have to study the whole integral subjects from chemistry to history, they have some limited but still freedom to ignore the subject they feel useless. One's meal maybe another's poison, why shouldn't we just offer them what they want and become both pleasant and effective?

The answer to the questions mentioned above is simple: there are some kind of nutrition, which maybe minus but are able to cause fatal diseases, they couldn't get unless they have balanced diet. To a sociaty society, it couldn't measure exactly how more efficient a well educated man will function, just like we couldn't measure the contribution a balanced meal will do to our health. But we do know if we keep eating the junk food, we probably will get ill for lack of vitamin, or other nutrition. It is the same that if the society keeps producing citizens with only specified expertises; its health may be in danger. To make our education more health, we need to teach more about the common morals like duties to family and society, honesty, thrifty, etc, basic thinking principals including both the reasoning ones and the article ones, and the ability to enjoy some really beautiful things of our civilization. Only if we do this rightly, the life would be a pleasant procedure to go with our neigbours.

In the end, we should all acknowledge that specified education is the main trend of the world and has bring us a lot of convenience. If only we noticed it’s fallacies we could use it better without hurt ourselves.

文章好像和教育的有效的相关性不是很大,前面第二,三段从教育多样性和教育的可选择角度讲述,缺乏中心意思,就是没有围绕为什么说教育多样性就能体现出是很有效果的,和为什么说教育可以特殊化,让人随心选择就代表了教育的有效.下面的第四段的反证我觉得比上面讲的清楚,有论点.我自己写的也是这样的问题,没有把题目分析清楚就下笔.不过你的论述的例子还是挺好的

exp03UID: 2158827

觉得搂主花了很大力气去研究这篇文章，所选论证也很新颖，但觉得文中所说的几个多样化的例子比如选课和在职教育好象作为支持特殊教育更好。或者从你所想突出的观点方面再解释一下。一小时能写出这样的文章已经很值得佩服了。

风中尘埃UID: 164965

这两天寄托网页更新有问题:L
大家给我的评论刚看到，说得很对，自己写的时候也觉得在堆砌词句
空洞了点。
以后一定改，坚决改~~~
不想清楚不动笔~！