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jj7710UID: 204058

In the above letter to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres, a committee of homeowners recommended adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres. The author based his argument on a comparison between a nearby Brookville community and Deerhaven Acres. This argument seems reasonable at first glance, however, several flaws could be pointed out given a discretion consideration.

Firstly, no evidence shows the reason for average property values have tripled in Brookville is solely a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Various factors will affect the average property values in Broolville, such as transportation, economic situation, local amenities. Further more, the restriction exerted seven years ago. It is quite possible that the local government proposed a policy during this time to increase average property values, or the building there are designed extravagantly for the rich, or the currency inflated during the past seven years. The auther must provide enough information to show that the average property value have really raised and the reason for the raise is the restriction.

Secondly, the comparison between Brookville and Deerhaven Acres is not persuasive. Although the two communities are close in distance, there are several more factors which can cause great difference in average property value. Brookville might have broader and longer highways, while Deerhaven Acres have narrow and shorter highways. Even,  Brookville owns a large shopping area, while Deerhaven Acres far from any shopping centers. What's more, Brookville aimed at the rich while Deerhaven Acres for ordinary people. And, not all people like the restriction for their freedom of choice will be deprived, so it might be harder for them to sell the house in Deerhaven Acres. Thus, the author should make an adequate comparison between the two areas to support his argument that the restriction in Brookville should be adopted in Deerhaven Acres.

To sum up, we can see the recommendation was undermined by its insufficient reason, false analogy and inadequate interpretation of some facts. To raise the average property value, many thing could be done except a restriction on landscaping and housepainting such as proving better living surrounding and familiar amenities. The author should do more research to provide an effective methods of rasing average property value.

benniUID: 2166321

In the above letter to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres, a committee of homeowners recommended adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres. The author based his argument on a comparison between a nearby Brookville community and Deerhaven Acres. This argument seems reasonable at first glance, however, several flaws could be pointed out given a discretion consideration.(discretion已经是consideration的意思了，是不是应该去掉consideration，还有，given 做什么成份？)
Firstly, no evidence shows the reason for average property values have tripled in Brookville （for后面接名次，可改为tripled average property values in Brookville, tripled做adjective）is solely a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Various factors will affect the average property values in Broolville, such as transportation, economic situation, local amenities. Further more, the restriction exerted seven years ago. It is quite possible that the local government proposed a policy during this time to increase average property values, or the building there are designed extravagantly for the rich, or the currency inflated during the past seven years. The auther must provide enough information to show that the average property value have really raised (不是已经说明values raise 了么？triple=triply raise。你可能是想说由于 inflated， 虽然价钱高了，但价值没涨。可貌似values说的就是价值，而不单是市价) and the reason for the raise is the restriction.

Secondly, the comparison between Brookville and Deerhaven Acres is not persuasive. Although the two communities are close in distance, there are several more factors which can cause great difference in average property value. Brookville might have broader and longer highways, while Deerhaven Acres have narrow and shorter highways. Even,  Brookville owns a large shopping area, while Deerhaven Acres far from any shopping centers. What's more, Brookville aimed at the rich while Deerhaven Acres for ordinary people. And, not all people like the restriction for their freedom of choice will be deprived, so it might be harder for them to sell the house in Deerhaven Acres. Thus, the author should make an adequate comparison between the two areas to support his argument that the restriction in Brookville should be adopted in Deerhaven Acres.

To sum up, we can see the recommendation was undermined by its insufficient reason, false analogy and inadequate interpretation of some facts. To raise the average property value, many thing could be done except a restriction on landscaping and house painting such as proving better living surrounding and familiar amenities. The author should do more research to provide an effective methods (method) of rasing （raising） average property value (values).

8错~
不过感觉两点有点少，建议把第一段提到的时间问题换个角度，单独成段。

jj7710UID: 204058

第一段最后得discretion 不知是从哪里copy得，自己还没掌握呢。
低级错误很多，太不好了！
关于Value，我再查查看，好似我误认为价格了。
每次找攻击点都找得不够多，因此文章长度总不够。
看了benni得文章，深受启发。
谢谢benni！