Issue185 FLY AW作文组第17次作业（447字）

夜一UID: 2130338

Issue185  第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：65分34秒     286 words
从2006年5月24日8时49分到2006年5月24日9时65分
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Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
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Scandals, usually unpleasant, are pieces of information that do not demand confirmation as well as sense, and cannot be announced by speakers and reformers. They can be useful by focusing people's attention on special problems in various areas, if they are appropriately used and carefully controlled.

Admittedly, scandals are more or less harmful to people and society, whether in politics, academia, or other areas. Such unpleasant pieces of information, usually lacking of confirmation and sense, are specially advanced in popularity, a fact that is rather odd in human society. People are interested in scandals, and often prefer to demonstrate their advantages in gathering information by spread such unconvincing pieces of information. Since scandals are debatable, argument and distrust usually appear consequently, and induce severe individual as well as social problems. Scandals involving politicians will diminish their social reputation and possibly abort their beneficial operating projects, while scandals about scholars will destroy their academic credibility and disorder the ordinary pace of scientific, social and cultural studies. Scandals can make the involved individuals difficult to cooperate with others and maintain ordinary life. Organizations involved in scandals will also lose credibility and reputation, and induce more severe disorders. Popularity provides scandals with such great power that they can destroy the development of individuals, organizations, as well as the whole society, when such unpleasant and unconvincing pieces of information are abused and out of control.

However, scandals can affect people and society positively if they are used appropriately and controlled carefully. Speakers and reformers cannot focus on information that is not convincing enough, or they will lose their credibility as well as reputation, and will be deserted by public. As possibilities are far beyond those convinced ones, people need information more than that is provided by speakers and reformers. Though lacking of confirmation and sense, scandals offer people a great deal of additional information. Political scandals can help people explore facts that are important to common residents but are concealed by governments and politicians, while academic scandals can expose unfairness and dishonesty among scholars and used to modify current scholar systems. Coming across scandals which are not too hard to deal with, and facing them bravely and cleverly, individuals as well as organizations can also find more developing possibilities. When scandals are criticized carefully and used correctly, their negative effect can be minimized and positive effect will become apparent.

In conclusion, with appropriate schemes and careful control, scandals, usually unpleasant and harmful, can also become positive and useful, because they focus people's attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Scandals are just like drugs, which are usually harmful and deleterious, but are necessary in medical operation.

kckUID: 2214868

夜一的语言真是没的挑啊
不过我感觉好象大断大断都是推理,虽然逻辑严密,但是感觉不充实.
此外在组织上我也觉得楼主把前面一大段给了 论证 丑闻的 弊端.是否会让文章失去中心呢?因为作者的中心意思还是合理的利用会带来好处.
如果改成(1)先说好处,(2)再说大众在丑闻前面都是缺乏一定在判断力所以会带来的危害,(3)然后再说说需要谨慎对待.
是否会好点呢.?

PS:夜一现在是否也没有限时呀

夜一UID: 2130338

谢谢kck
虽然我很努力的想要限时，结果每次都远远超出时间。。。
还是语言的组织速度不够快，写中文的话无论怎样都能编得圆，写英文的话就有很多时候改来改去的
这篇文章的写法我考虑了很久，因为scandal这种东西（虽然很多中文的题目翻译都已成了“丑闻”，但是我还是倾向于理解为“流言蜚语”），绝对不是一个好到可以多多益善的东西，但是题目是属于事实性的，问题是scandal能否有用，所以又不能加入倾向性的观点，比如人们应该怎样对待scandal
多方考虑之下，我突然想到，既然不能写倾向性的观点，就给题目加上条件好了，让题目原本的论题只在一定条件下成立，就像牛顿第二定律只在经典力学下成立一样，想到这里似乎有点豁然开朗的感觉
但是正如kck所说，对于文章的表达，我掌握得还不够好
其实我的思路是这样的：
首先提出观点：条件性成立
然后论述一般情况：scandal带来的坏处
再然后论述条件情况：在某种条件下scandal是有用的
最后总结
也许在第二段的第一局加上一个generally会比较好，变成这样：
Admittedly, scandals are generally more or less harmful to people and society, whether in politics, academia, or other areas.

kckUID: 2214868

我觉得可以加入人们应该怎样对待scandal ,就是把这个作为条件性成立里面的条件

此外,我觉得在你的构思里面第二段直接就是scandal的坏处,可否改成:
条件性成立->如果不满足条件,坏处->满足条件,好处
这样是不是感觉过渡要平滑点呢?

我目前也很难限时间,都开始把目标降为4分了...