ISSUE36 ARES战队

Tomas007UID: 2107663

TOPIC: ISSUE36 - "The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
WORDS: 440          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2006-7-13

The issue focused on the people who are able to decide the greatness of individuals-- their precursors or people after them. In my perspective, there is equal possibility on both situations. In fact, it depends on the significant role which their ideas or historial events have played to their consequent society.

Those great heros whose roles and effects are essential for their current ages are famous and their greatness are undoubtedly decided by their contemporaries. Albeham Lincon, one of the most famous and greatest presidents in American history, has lead American people winning the final victory in the civil War. In fact, it is him and his governors' signficant political strategies on the economy, such as publicly exchanging stocks to all civilials and assuring their activities as the great love for their motherland, that rescure and surrive the revolution and thousands of slavers. His greatness has undoubtedly won him the highest honor and prize all through the country, including their enemy. In some aspects, without his great contribution to the final success of war, their would not be any greater honor, pride, and even the murder by his politic enemy, which could be considered as the greatest honor for a president-- only his death could release his enemy. Those great heros contains not only great politics, but also dozens of excellent excutives, for example, Bill Gates, CEO of Microsoft Company.

However, if the great people's contribution or ideas are beyond the range of their period, what could represent their true value is the honor and prize from those live after them. Such great people includes high enteligent scientists, great engineers, and even some governors. Among them, the excellent biological scientist, Dr. Waston and Dr. Crick, the discovers of DNA double helix structure, are such great guys contributing a lot and win plenty of prize from their fellows. Their paper on such great issue was publicated in a general magzine without too much focus in the next five years. However, its significance was then spread and shake a strong wave through the biological field and the whole world. In such a short periods-- twenty years, there is a strong biological revolution that affect everyone in our world. The word "gene" is no longer an confusing one in the biological lab, instead, is the key word of such a new revolution that everyone are familiar with.

In sum, both great people with the hornor from their contemporaries and those with high prizes from the follows has contributed a great deal to the improvement of the society. The only differences between them-- the places that their honors came from, are not so important.

bronzeageUID: 2210452

The issue focused on the people who are able to decide the greatness of individuals-- their precursors or people after them.( 不太明白，是否改为focus on the question that….) In my perspective, there is equal possibility on both situations. In fact, it depends on the significant role which their ideas or historial events have played to their consequent society.

Those great heros whose roles and effects are essential for their current ages are famous and their greatness are undoubtedly decided by their contemporaries. Albeham Lincon, one of the most famous and greatest presidents in American history, has lead American people winning the final victory in the civil War. In fact, it is him and his governors' signficant political strategies on the economy, such as publicly exchanging stocks to all civilials and assuring their activities as the great love for their motherland, that rescure and surrive the revolution and thousands of slavers. His greatness has undoubtedly won him the highest honor and prize all through the country, including their enemy. In some aspects, without his great contribution to the final success of war, their would not be any greater honor, pride, and even the murder by his politic enemy, which could be considered as the greatest honor for a president-- only his death could release his enemy. Those great heros contains not only great politics, but also dozens of excellent excutives, for example, Bill Gates, CEO of Microsoft Company.

However, if the great people's contribution or ideas are beyond the range of their period, what could represent their true value is the honor and prize from those live after them. Such great people includes high enteligent scientists, great engineers, and even some governors. Among them, the excellent biological scientist, Dr. Waston and Dr. Crick, the discovers of DNA double helix structure, are such great guys contributing a lot and win plenty of prize from their fellows. Their paper on such great issue was publicated in a general magzine without too much focus in the next five years. However, its significance was then spread and shake a strong wave through the biological field and the whole world. In such a short periods-- twenty years, there is a strong biological revolution that affect everyone in our world. The word "gene" is no longer an confusing one in the biological lab, instead, is the key word of such a new revolution that everyone are familiar with.

In sum, both great people with the hornor from their contemporaries and those with high prizes from the follows has contributed a great deal to the improvement of the society. The only differences between them-- the places that their honors came from, are not so important.

第一段语法似乎挺大的，特别是focus on 之后，role之后的从句也有语法问题
第二段的林肯拼错了，感觉第二段用了太大段文字在别的上，好像有点偏题了
第三段的论证也有点偏题了，如果改为sometimes, the contribution could only be recognized in several years later because the results of the research needs a long time span to justify可能好一点
还有，似乎论证少了点，要好好加油呀