argument145 Ares战队第五次作业(by garyknight)

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A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person—often so briefly that the waking goes unnoticed—and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.


    The arguer asserts that people who snore should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more. He cites a new study to show that the snorers are more likely to gain weight than common people because of the tiredness, a consequence of unnoticed waking stemming to sleep apnea. However, the argument is as unsubstantial as it stands.
    First of all, the collected data which the arguer cites suffers from statistical inaccuracy. The arguer fails to provide evidence to show that the number of the samples is big enough to be representative of all snorers all over the world. Therefore, we cannot conclude that anyone who snores leans to gain weight than the people who do not snore.
    Secondly, even if it is true that people, owning the habit of snoring, is easier to get fatter than common, the arguer ignores to substantiate the casual correlation between snore and gaining weight. It is obviously unpersuasive to claim that snore causes gaining weight merely because the two phenomena take place simultaneously. It is alternative that both the two symptoms are resulted from another disease which is not observed yet. Therefore, ascribing getting fatter to snore is unwarranted.
    Thirdly, providing that the symptom snore should be responsible for gaining weight, it is rash to assert that snore can lead to sleep apnea which wake and exhaust snorers. Admittedly, many people who snore suffer sleep apnea, as the arguer states. However, it lacks evidence to prove that everyone who snores has this symptom, which makes it limited to advice that snorers should go on a diet and exercise more because the reason of some snorers' gaining weight is perhaps not sleep apnea. It is possible that they do not wake up during sleep and do not feel tired in the daytime. There is an alternative explanation that their gaining weight should be traceable to some other illness, caused by snore, which will weaken, even cancel the effect of going on a diet and more exercise.
    Last but not least, even if it is true that sleep apnea causes waking up, waking up causes tiredness and tiredness causes gaining weight, the argument is still unauthentic for the arguer's circular reasoning. Although we do not deny that less eating and more exercise are efficient to lose weight, it is unpractical to demand the snorers who are already exhausted to accept this advice. Not in the least is the consequence unforeseen: the snorer who eat less and exercise more will be more tired than before, which will improve fatness at last. Accordingly, the arguer's advice is not believable.
    Summing up, the argument is not well reasoned for the assumptions it stands are not substantial. To strengthen this assertion, the arguer should 1) provide exact collected data to show that the phenomena, mentioned at the beginning of the argument, is reliable; 2) provide evidence to show that gaining weight is indeed the consequence of snore; 3) justify the reasoning line: snore, sleep apnea, waking up, tiredness and getting fat; 4) offer effective and efficient way to the snorers to lose weight.

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The arguer asserts that people who snore should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more. He[/she] cites a new study to show that the snorers are more likely to gain weight than common people because of the tiredness, a consequence of unnoticed waking stemming to sleep apnea. However, the argument is as unsubstantial as it stands.
    First of all, the collected data which the arguer cites suffers from statistical inaccuracy. The arguer fails to provide evidence to show that the number of the samples is big enough to be representative of all snorers all over the world. Therefore, we cannot conclude that anyone who snores leans to gain weight than the people who do not snore.[可以加点possibilities]
    Secondly, even if it is true that people, owning the habit of snoring, is easier to get fatter than common, the arguer ignores to substantiate the casual correlation between snore and gaining weight. It is obviously unpersuasive to claim that snore causes gaining weight merely because the two phenomena take place simultaneously. It is alternative that both the two symptoms are resulted from another disease which is not observed yet. Therefore, ascribing getting fatter to snore is unwarranted.
    Thirdly, providing that the symptom snore should be responsible for gaining weight, it is rash to assert that snore can lead to sleep apnea which wake and exhaust snorers. Admittedly, many people who snore suffer sleep apnea, as the arguer states. However, it lacks evidence to prove that everyone who snores has this symptom, which makes it limited to advice that snorers should go on a diet and exercise more because the reason of some snorers' gaining weight is perhaps not sleep apnea. It is possible that they do not wake up during sleep and do not feel tired in the daytime. There is an alternative explanation that their gaining weight should be traceable to some other illness, caused by snore, which will weaken, even cancel the effect of going on a diet and more exercise.
    Last but not least, even if it is true that sleep apnea causes waking up, waking up causes tiredness and tiredness causes gaining weight, the argument is still unauthentic for the arguer's circular reasoning. Although we do not deny that less eating and more exercise are efficient to lose weight, it is unpractical to demand the snorers who are already exhausted to accept this advice. Not in the least is the consequence unforeseen: the snorer who eat less and exercise more will be more tired than before, which will improve fatness at last. Accordingly, the arguer's advice is not believable.
    Summing up, the argument is not well reasoned for the assumptions it stands are not substantial. To strengthen this assertion, the arguer should 1) provide exact collected data to show that the phenomena, mentioned at the beginning of the argument, is reliable; 2) provide evidence to show that gaining weight is indeed the consequence of snore; 3) justify the reasoning line: snore, sleep apnea, waking up, tiredness and getting fat; 4) offer effective and efficient way to the snorers to lose weight [这个结尾很经典]

逻辑错误照得很全，而且每一段都环环相扣，连接得很紧密，这在argu中是比较难得的，在文字上没有什么大的问题，但是句式有些单一，比如it is possible 就用了很多，可以用possibilities, perhaps来穿插一些例子。