作文互动小组好像都没开始啊，再来一篇

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题库第181题，改变了模板，反正而且首段末句没有下结论，大家帮我看看这个论证思路可行不，word格式，和直接在网页上贴出来两个都有，感觉word看着更舒服，好改，字体可以有颜色
题库181题
In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition, or is there more need for land for developed for housing and industry?


Nowadays, people are always haunted by a debate concerning whether left in its natural conditions for the land or developed for housing and industry. The development on housing and industry appears to enhance more opportunities to promote the economy and for job; and people who hold this statement may also point out that the land utilized for developed for housing could enhance the quality of life While people claim the advantages of industry, however, the fact that the influence of the industry upon the physiological and mental state of the people has been completely neglected.

With the advent of 21st century, the structure of the modern industry face to the profoundly modified. The factory has been built with no regard for us, since the world went through the globalization and industrialization. It expands unresistantly without any idea of the true nature of the human beings, who run the machines and without giving any consideration on individuals. Moreover, such pollutions as carbon dioxides and sulphur dioxides, refuse by factory; not only was people to be harmful but also contaminated the air, on which people breathe everyday.

Similarly, the development for housing, as regard for this question, we cannot ignore another problem that housing will cause the construction of gigantic buildings where too large masses of human beings are crowed together, meanwhile, the greater the population there is in a localarity, the greater the need there is for water, transportation, and disposal refuse. It is hardly to imagine that we live in a city consisting of monstrous edifies and dark, narrow streets full of petrol gases dusts, congested by vehicles and thronged ceaselessly by great crowds.

If we left more nature condition for land, on the contrary, we should have more cozy elements to live, such as fresh air, green grassland, ect. Within this environment with no noise, no crowds and no air pollution enveloped ourselves, we may also give us more health from the body to the mentality.

Consequently, except for one or two advantages, if it is the real good qualities, there are too many disadvantages to develop the housing and industry as presented above. And compared with some more obvious advantages to left natural condition of the land, which may inevitably involve some disadvantages, as far as I concerned, to choose the latter is more sagacious.

[ 本帖最后由 mean2006 于 2006-7-20 12:49 编辑 ]

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怎么都没人看，没人改啊
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