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TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."
WORDS: 453          TIME:  01:06:22          DATE: 2006-7-26

The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. By making a statement of the region of Brookville, the community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes shoud be painted and therefore average property values tripled, the argument for raising property values in Deerhaven Acres seems logical. However, a careful examination of this argument would reveal how groundless the conclusion is.

In the first place, the arguer makes a false analogy. The argument fails to establish the specific condition of the two communities. Perhaps Brookville is a small community with fewer homes, each on a similar basis, that is, a two-storey  house with a garden, while Deerhaven Acres is a much larger community where the apartment buildings and houses are mixed together, on a quite irregular scales. So the restrictions will give little apearance change of the community, resulting no effect of rasing property values. The arguer also ignores the other conditions such as traffic situations, function of the communities and economic  conditions of the two communities. If the Deerhaven Acres is near the airport where is more noisy, the enviroment condition is surely obstacle for the average property values raising.

The times are different. People with lastest values in Deerhaven Acres might pursue  a sense of individuality and won't easily get uniformed with the others as Brookville did 7 years ago. And modern people are getting more mobile than ever before, they  might  not stay at one place for ever, therefore they might not take it seriously to benefit the whole community at the cost of giving up their own homes' characteristics. So the letter requires all the homeowners in Deerhaven Acres to paint their homes in the same color, which  might cause much resistance. Some other condition, such as a economic brooming in the last 7 years in Brookville, also contributes to the property values increasing.

The arguer's conclusion depends on the questionable assumption that there is direct link between the trippling of the costs of average property values and the landscaped yards and the painted houses. During the 7 years which is quited a long period, other conditions might cause the effects also. Such as a lot of immigrants reside in Brookville, with a larger requrement of houses, the property values are surely increased.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility, because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strengthen the argument, the arguer would have to provide more evidence concerning the specific conditions in Brookville and Deerhaven Acres. To better evaluate the argument, we need more information regarding to situation chages in the seven years time period.

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The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. By making a statement of the region of Brookville, the community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes shoud( should )be painted and therefore 这里好象是中文的思路，因果关系体现不明，可以用个长句来表达average property values tripled, the argument for raising property values in Deerhaven Acres seems logical. However, a careful examination of this argument would reveal how groundless the conclusion is.

In the first place, the arguer makes a false analogy. The argument fails to establish 好象不合适，换个词吧the specific condition of the two communities. Perhaps Brookville is a small community with fewer homes,families书面一点吧 each on a similar basis, that is, a two-storey  house with a garden, while Deerhaven Acres is a much larger community where the apartment buildings and houses are mixed together, on a quite irregular scales. So the restrictions will give little apearance change有点不通啊 of the community, resulting no effect of rasing property values. The arguer also ignores the other conditions such as traffic situations, function of the communities and economic  conditions of the two communities. If the Deerhaven Acres is near the airport where is more noisy, the enviroment condition is surely an obstacle for the average property values raising.

找个与In the first place 对应的吧The times are different. People with lastest拼错了吧 values in Deerhaven Acres might pursue  a sense of individuality and won't easily get uniformed with the others as Brookville did 7 years ago. And modern people are getting more mobile我不太确定这么形容合适不 than ever before, they  might  not stay at one place for ever, therefore they might not take it seriously to benefit the whole community at the cost of giving up their own homes' characteristics.这句有创意 So the letter 换个主语吧requires all the homeowners in Deerhaven Acres to paint their homes in the same color, which  might cause much resistance. Some other condition, such as a economic brooming in the last 7 years in Brookville, also contributes to the property values increasing.

The arguer's conclusion depends on the questionable assumption that there is direct link between the trippling of the costs of average property values and the landscaped yards and the painted houses. During the 7 years which is quited a long period, other conditions might cause the effects also. Such as a lot of immigrants reside in Brookville, with a larger requrement of houses, the property values are surely increased. 考虑到了时间，不错，再多说一下没有link between上面第一句就更好了

To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility, because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strengthen the argument, the arguer would have to provide more evidence concerning the specific conditions in Brookville and Deerhaven Acres. To better evaluate the argument, we need 可以改成作者需要，毕竟是对他挑毛病more information regarding to situation changes in（during） the seven years time period.总体还可以，语言再修饰一下，逻辑顺序再强一些就更好了，加油！



不好意思啊，我用别人的电脑，印上去色就没了，我回去再发一个给你吧，有点不好看啊

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